Soul Changing
faith poetry contest entry see notes22 total reviews
Comment from Margaret McNellis
Acrostics are fun to write--and read! Thank you for sharing this poem, and good luck in the contest. This poem has a great flow, and I like that both of the lines for "N" start with never. The repetition is far enough apart that it doesn't feel overbearing, yet close enough together that it creates a connection between the two lines, adding to the poem's cohesiveness. My question is a small one--is it intentional that there's no period at the end of the last line? I ask because each idea before closes with a period. It's not a bad thing if there's no period there, but I'm just wondering. Overall, great job!
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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Acrostics are fun to write--and read! Thank you for sharing this poem, and good luck in the contest. This poem has a great flow, and I like that both of the lines for "N" start with never. The repetition is far enough apart that it doesn't feel overbearing, yet close enough together that it creates a connection between the two lines, adding to the poem's cohesiveness. My question is a small one--is it intentional that there's no period at the end of the last line? I ask because each idea before closes with a period. It's not a bad thing if there's no period there, but I'm just wondering. Overall, great job!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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Thanks for taking the time to read an review my poem so thoroughly. I appreciate it very much as well
as the good luck wishes.
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You're welcome!
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Dragonpoet, this is a fine entry for the Faith Poetry contest. A strong word - TRANSFIGURATION - with an effective narrow layout. The simplicity of this piece allows the words to speak louder to the reader. My only suggestion, if I were to add anything, would be to have each first letter on each sentence in bold font so that the acrostic word is more visible.
Well done and best of luck in the competition. ~DD
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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Dragonpoet, this is a fine entry for the Faith Poetry contest. A strong word - TRANSFIGURATION - with an effective narrow layout. The simplicity of this piece allows the words to speak louder to the reader. My only suggestion, if I were to add anything, would be to have each first letter on each sentence in bold font so that the acrostic word is more visible.
Well done and best of luck in the competition. ~DD
Comment Written 15-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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Thanks for the review. For some reason when I cut and pasted it from
my word processor to Fanstory the bolding disappeared.
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Are you using 'advanced editing'? You can do each letter individually then..
Comment from Pamusart
So, this would also have been a good entry for the Acrostic contest. This is a good entry for the rhyming contest. Another religious post. I think more than half of the posts are religious. The message is clear on this one. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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So, this would also have been a good entry for the Acrostic contest. This is a good entry for the rhyming contest. Another religious post. I think more than half of the posts are religious. The message is clear on this one. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 15-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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I appreciate your kind words. Sometimes it is hard to choose where to post a poem.
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Comment from tfawcus
You've woven a fine poem out of this acrostic. I particularly like the strength of the single word "Unconditionally" standing alone. You have several other effective line breaks that emphasise the underlying message.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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You've woven a fine poem out of this acrostic. I particularly like the strength of the single word "Unconditionally" standing alone. You have several other effective line breaks that emphasise the underlying message.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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Thanks for the review. I am glad you think my line breaks are effective.
Joan
Comment from Boogienights
This is a beautiful poem that offers great advice on how to share your faith with others. It covers themes of unconditional love and forgiveness, something we all need to practice , and which we need for ourselves. Thanks for a lovely poem.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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This is a beautiful poem that offers great advice on how to share your faith with others. It covers themes of unconditional love and forgiveness, something we all need to practice , and which we need for ourselves. Thanks for a lovely poem.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate all the stars.
dragonpoet
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is an excellent little poem that has a clear message of faith. You did a great job with describing all of the elements of your message throughout the poem. I like this well written little poem. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
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This is an excellent little poem that has a clear message of faith. You did a great job with describing all of the elements of your message throughout the poem. I like this well written little poem. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
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Thank you for such positive remarks and the generous rating. I am glad you liked it.
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Comment from Sherman541
Believing in God, having faith in him and all that he does for us, is very important, but to survive completely and have hope, we need to have faith in ourselves too. We need to believe in who we are. Thus, facing the changes that come and go allows us to keep the faith in ourselves and God. Very Lovely and thought filled. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Believing in God, having faith in him and all that he does for us, is very important, but to survive completely and have hope, we need to have faith in ourselves too. We need to believe in who we are. Thus, facing the changes that come and go allows us to keep the faith in ourselves and God. Very Lovely and thought filled. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Thanks for the kind words and generous rating. I appreciate the time you took to read and
review
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You are very welcome :)
Comment from Mel E. Furnish
Very pleasant piece. Your word choice and structure used is comforting and flows nicely. I found reading this relaxing and soothing. Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Very pleasant piece. Your word choice and structure used is comforting and flows nicely. I found reading this relaxing and soothing. Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Thanks for such encouraging words. I am glad you found it soothing.
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Comment from royowen
I've been asking myself these questions in recent time. 1: what is conditional? 2: how many times must I forgive? Of course, both are limitless, but this is an extra good gaze at the same subject Joan, such a salien and heavy questioning. Beautifully conceived and written, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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I've been asking myself these questions in recent time. 1: what is conditional? 2: how many times must I forgive? Of course, both are limitless, but this is an extra good gaze at the same subject Joan, such a salien and heavy questioning. Beautifully conceived and written, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Roy, for such positive comments. I appreciate all the stars and the good luck wishes.
Have a nice weekend.
Joan
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Well done
Comment from BeasPeas
A nicely composed acrostic using the title of "Transfiguration" which is so meaningful as Jesus's message of faith. We are all capable of altering ourselves into what God intended for us to be. Marilyn
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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A nicely composed acrostic using the title of "Transfiguration" which is so meaningful as Jesus's message of faith. We are all capable of altering ourselves into what God intended for us to be. Marilyn
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Marilyn, for taking the time to read and review. I am glad you liked it.
Joan
