Comment from Wetbelly01

Excellent

Wow!... Those poor kids... Kind of looks like they're
about to be history... Guess I'll find out eventually...
Looking forward to the next chapter!

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018

Well, I hit the wrong button and erased what I wrote. I said that there is definitely a kernel of truth in this chapter and I feel terrible for the two kids. My stories just take me where they want to go. Thank you for your thoughts WB. I appreciate your feedback a great deal.

reply by Wetbelly01 on 22-Feb-2018

You're very welcome!

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

I would give this a 6 Star if I had one . After a few sentences, I put my legs up to enjoy. You are quite the story teller. Of all the prose writers that I have reviewed, you are my favorite. I have no offering of suggestions for improvement. I think I would take away the holding of the word "love". Seems to me a little over dramatic . Otherwise, superb.

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018

I am SO appreciative of your kind review. I am always looking for constructive advice so I will definitely look at the word love a little closer. Thank you again.

Comment from Susan Burger

Excellent

Charlene, this is a good chapter. I had not read any of the previous chapters, yet this stood alone just fine. It kept my interest, and now I may have to read the next installment so I can find out what happens to these two! Very nice job. Keep writing and God bless!

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018

Thank you so much for your kind review. I appreciate any feedback (or critique) since I am more a story teller than a writer.