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Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Smoke and Chains(Part Number Two)"A Children's Story Book.
7 total reviews
Comment from poetwatch
A children's fairy-tale, Ricky? Good... I see them hiding under the blankets as mom or dad spin this tale of darkness. I like this story. You finishing it later on tonight right? when the light of day has closed it eyes and shadows appear in the moonlight. Good read keep it up my friend you're getting it together.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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A children's fairy-tale, Ricky? Good... I see them hiding under the blankets as mom or dad spin this tale of darkness. I like this story. You finishing it later on tonight right? when the light of day has closed it eyes and shadows appear in the moonlight. Good read keep it up my friend you're getting it together.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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This is progressing along nicely I just had a part number to part number 3 will go through tomorrow and also possible you can clusion thanks for your final review poet dr. Ricky 1024
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
Albeit, with allusions geared towards the dreadful, the story was told with least scare the audience,which I suppose comprise mainly of children. That's a big plus that further enhances Doctor Ricky's creativity.
The reported format of event taken by Annie Oakley is yet another exciting aspect of the work that brings it much closer to a children audience. This is also highly commendable.
The scenario comprising Smoke and Chain as the antagonist and protagonist is laudable.
The use of doom and gloom with their accoutrements of diseases, addictions, cancers and suicides on the side of the antagonist is a well thought out innovation that approximates the plight of the present generation.
Let's hope that Chains who sees it differently as the protagonist in the work would swiftly come up with a countervailing force that will break the Blood Reds hold on Red Dwarf and facilitate succour for its inhabitants.
This is an outstanding work on which I should award a six star. But I am bereft of such facility. Nevertheless, keep the flag flying!
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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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Albeit, with allusions geared towards the dreadful, the story was told with least scare the audience,which I suppose comprise mainly of children. That's a big plus that further enhances Doctor Ricky's creativity.
The reported format of event taken by Annie Oakley is yet another exciting aspect of the work that brings it much closer to a children audience. This is also highly commendable.
The scenario comprising Smoke and Chain as the antagonist and protagonist is laudable.
The use of doom and gloom with their accoutrements of diseases, addictions, cancers and suicides on the side of the antagonist is a well thought out innovation that approximates the plight of the present generation.
Let's hope that Chains who sees it differently as the protagonist in the work would swiftly come up with a countervailing force that will break the Blood Reds hold on Red Dwarf and facilitate succour for its inhabitants.
This is an outstanding work on which I should award a six star. But I am bereft of such facility. Nevertheless, keep the flag flying!
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Comment Written 21-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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thanks Lloyd for your fine review and perceptions of this I actually just released part number to report number three coming tomorrow and possibly the conclusion doctor Ricky 10:24 and have a blessed day
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Great work!
Keep on flourishing!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about the two characters of the children's fairy tale, they are - Smoke and Chain and how they are related; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. KEEP WRITING, TIP CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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This speaks about the two characters of the children's fairy tale, they are - Smoke and Chain and how they are related; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. KEEP WRITING, TIP CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 21-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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Thanks again for your wonderful review and time Al Creator.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment from heavenempress
This creative, nice piece of work fits so well with category of Children's poetry. Very funny indeed. Keep it up. It's a unique poetry in its own category. I highly recommend it to others.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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This creative, nice piece of work fits so well with category of Children's poetry. Very funny indeed. Keep it up. It's a unique poetry in its own category. I highly recommend it to others.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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Thanks for the review and time dear.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment from Gloria ....
Well there isn't anything too pleasant about these kinds of smokes and chains, Dr. Ricky.
But you've told your story well and I look forward to part two. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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Well there isn't anything too pleasant about these kinds of smokes and chains, Dr. Ricky.
But you've told your story well and I look forward to part two. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 21-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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Thanks Gloria for your kind review.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment from dmt1967
I am intrigued and will keep my eyes open for part two. I like the word play you did and the way the poem feels like a conversation rather than a poem. Thank you for sharing this poem.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018
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I am intrigued and will keep my eyes open for part two. I like the word play you did and the way the poem feels like a conversation rather than a poem. Thank you for sharing this poem.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018
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Thanks.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment from Trudi Perkins
This is an interesting poem indeed. I really enjoyed this poem very much and I can't wait to read more of your writings. Thanks again for sharing your craft with us.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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This is an interesting poem indeed. I really enjoyed this poem very much and I can't wait to read more of your writings. Thanks again for sharing your craft with us.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Always a pleasure Trudi to!see your name.
Ricky....
