Pecos Valley
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Comment from Sankey
Yep, I Knew about the clavier. Did you ever see my Requiem for a Piano? I wrote it about my piano I sold as I can't hear it, no more. Another good chapter I liked the expressions, can't think of a particular word you used I thought was clever. Good read again makes us feel like we are on the scene.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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Yep, I Knew about the clavier. Did you ever see my Requiem for a Piano? I wrote it about my piano I sold as I can't hear it, no more. Another good chapter I liked the expressions, can't think of a particular word you used I thought was clever. Good read again makes us feel like we are on the scene.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. Appreciate the continued support. Will look for "Requiem for a Piano".
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Hey mate I posted a new poem today right on the subject dear to your heart about Cut and paste Reviews. Hope you find it.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Nights in Pecos Valley were so dry Verne could smell the dirt. That is an interesting line Brett. I thought he gave Patch the money for sporting. Your palaver was well done Brett and even to the wishes and desires of the lonesome
cowboys. Good job. Nancy
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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Nights in Pecos Valley were so dry Verne could smell the dirt. That is an interesting line Brett. I thought he gave Patch the money for sporting. Your palaver was well done Brett and even to the wishes and desires of the lonesome
cowboys. Good job. Nancy
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. Always appreciate your insightful reviews and you writing them. I invite you to continue following along as my tale unfolds.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
I thought this seemed out of place until I read the author notes. We get a little more development of Verne. You asked about dialect. I use it sparingly. I The West, I use it to add humor and show Inga struggling with English. In the Caleb scripts, I give a little Cajun dialect to everyone one since the story is set in Louisianna. You use it well in your story.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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I thought this seemed out of place until I read the author notes. We get a little more development of Verne. You asked about dialect. I use it sparingly. I The West, I use it to add humor and show Inga struggling with English. In the Caleb scripts, I give a little Cajun dialect to everyone one since the story is set in Louisianna. You use it well in your story.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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I could not believe I simply missed this chapter. That tends to happen when I try to write following an outline instead of flying by the seat of my pants and just writing something. Always appreciate your insightful reviews and comments.
Comment from robina1978
I love the photo that complements your poem perfectly. I did read a previous chapter, but possibly not the right one. The chapter is well written and has speed. I usually don't like Western but yours is nice.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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I love the photo that complements your poem perfectly. I did read a previous chapter, but possibly not the right one. The chapter is well written and has speed. I usually don't like Western but yours is nice.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review. This is my first attempt at writing in the Western genre, so far most readers seem to enjoy what I pen.
Comment from Mrs. KT
There is nothing not to praise about this chapter...albeit...I realized halfway through what you share with your readers in your comments! :)
Now, I am certainly no Isabell, (perhaps in a past life?) But I loved this passage:
"However, he didn't want to talk cows. What Verne desired was a card game. Isabell often played when the Silver Cent wasn't full of cowboys. Those times she weren't allowed to. When Isabell won a little cash her eyes lit up and she'd laugh a bit. Verne'd let her win a pot or two to watch Isabell's metamorphosis. He liked the change. "
Reminded me of when I would play euchre with my father and uncles...or my father and his roofing employees. I swear they only let me win just to hear me laugh! God! I miss those days!
Again, your prose just carries and engages the reader. So well-crafted!
Thanks for sharing, Brett!
diane
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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There is nothing not to praise about this chapter...albeit...I realized halfway through what you share with your readers in your comments! :)
Now, I am certainly no Isabell, (perhaps in a past life?) But I loved this passage:
"However, he didn't want to talk cows. What Verne desired was a card game. Isabell often played when the Silver Cent wasn't full of cowboys. Those times she weren't allowed to. When Isabell won a little cash her eyes lit up and she'd laugh a bit. Verne'd let her win a pot or two to watch Isabell's metamorphosis. He liked the change. "
Reminded me of when I would play euchre with my father and uncles...or my father and his roofing employees. I swear they only let me win just to hear me laugh! God! I miss those days!
Again, your prose just carries and engages the reader. So well-crafted!
Thanks for sharing, Brett!
diane
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. Always appreciate your insightful reviews. Much more to come so I invite you to ride along as my tale continues to unfold.
Comment from Ricky1024
this is a well-written chapter Brett ocean themed imagery you talk basically about patch and Vern and then a little bit about Isabella nicely done thanks for this talk to Ricky 10:24 and have a blessed day
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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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this is a well-written chapter Brett ocean themed imagery you talk basically about patch and Vern and then a little bit about Isabella nicely done thanks for this talk to Ricky 10:24 and have a blessed day
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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Appreciate you taking the time to read this portion of my tale and write a review. Much more to come so I invite you to ride along as the tale unfolds.
Comment from beizanten
Interesting characters. You describe the background and the characters very well that your story came to life. Interesting first paragraph you easily capture my interest, well done. Very interesting plotline
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018
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Interesting characters. You describe the background and the characters very well that your story came to life. Interesting first paragraph you easily capture my interest, well done. Very interesting plotline
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review. Also appreciate the six stars. Much more to come so I invite you to ride along as my tale unfolds.
