I Will Break You
free verse10 total reviews
Comment from Katie Solis
I appreciated your poem. I often write to make myself feel better, and if someone else enjoys it then bonus, I have helped someone; and if I win a prize super bonus. Those who are unfairly mean or criticize are definitely the losers. If you could work on the flow and try to smooth it out; and make it more cohesive I think it would be perfect. I love the confidence you project in this work. It was a very good.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
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I appreciated your poem. I often write to make myself feel better, and if someone else enjoys it then bonus, I have helped someone; and if I win a prize super bonus. Those who are unfairly mean or criticize are definitely the losers. If you could work on the flow and try to smooth it out; and make it more cohesive I think it would be perfect. I love the confidence you project in this work. It was a very good.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
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I'm pretty sure this has a smooth flow and good cohesion. But I'd love to hear any suggestions you have. Just stating it needs work on flow doesn't help unless you point out where. In any case, I appreciate the kind words and detailed feedback. Thanks a bunch. :))
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a witty poem about all the competitions of this site and the one you have entered. Maybe you aren't good in sports but with written words you always win.
The dancing gorilla makes be chuckle.
Good luck and keep writing
dp
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This is a witty poem about all the competitions of this site and the one you have entered. Maybe you aren't good in sports but with written words you always win.
The dancing gorilla makes be chuckle.
Good luck and keep writing
dp
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
Comment from nordicgirl
Pinocchio!!#! I get it. Hehehe!! Too funny.
This is way too funny, Michael. Some people ARE off the deep end and you have captured it to a tee here. I take it all is not on the up and up here? Or that's the rumor?
A beautiful ending, so true and on the button. Has to be a winner. NG
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Pinocchio!!#! I get it. Hehehe!! Too funny.
This is way too funny, Michael. Some people ARE off the deep end and you have captured it to a tee here. I take it all is not on the up and up here? Or that's the rumor?
A beautiful ending, so true and on the button. Has to be a winner. NG
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
Comment from Harry Smith
Beautifully written is this poem with lots of imagery. I really loved the read and the picture selection is just outstanding. I will come back to read more.
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Beautifully written is this poem with lots of imagery. I really loved the read and the picture selection is just outstanding. I will come back to read more.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Ha, ha.
Competition indeed.
It seems like it's all or nothing and I think you have given it a good shot.
A little bit like tall tales and true but all in fun.
Good luck.
:-) Shirley
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Ha, ha.
Competition indeed.
It seems like it's all or nothing and I think you have given it a good shot.
A little bit like tall tales and true but all in fun.
Good luck.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a subtle write with deep resonating meaning behind these words, love the artwork and the flippant words of sarcasm that cut deep, very well rhymed and written with great eloquence, loved it, love Dolly x
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This is a subtle write with deep resonating meaning behind these words, love the artwork and the flippant words of sarcasm that cut deep, very well rhymed and written with great eloquence, loved it, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think that your Funny Video is a good match for the Competition writing prompt..
Well done, well said.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
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I think that your Funny Video is a good match for the Competition writing prompt..
Well done, well said.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
Comment from Debbie Pope
Awesome job with the poem. And of course I love the visual aide. Your sense of humor is clever and sharp. But as for me, I like the ending. I love sports and physical activity. Those who do not share in this love are missing something big. Good luck in the competition.
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Awesome job with the poem. And of course I love the visual aide. Your sense of humor is clever and sharp. But as for me, I like the ending. I love sports and physical activity. Those who do not share in this love are missing something big. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2018
Comment from Gloria ....
Author this is hilarious. It's like hip hop Jay Z, Meek Mill and 21 Savage all wrapped up in a fitty cent sausage roll. We really do love our orangutans when it comes to competition.
Super job with a most entertaining read. :)
Gloria
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Author this is hilarious. It's like hip hop Jay Z, Meek Mill and 21 Savage all wrapped up in a fitty cent sausage roll. We really do love our orangutans when it comes to competition.
Super job with a most entertaining read. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 14-Feb-2018
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a competition writing piece Richard Seaman mg it had great flow and if there was any grammar issues involved with this one as I read it all the way through descriptive measures aligned perfectly and adjectives content was wonderful also thanks for this talk to Ricky
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This is a competition writing piece Richard Seaman mg it had great flow and if there was any grammar issues involved with this one as I read it all the way through descriptive measures aligned perfectly and adjectives content was wonderful also thanks for this talk to Ricky
Comment Written 14-Feb-2018
