Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

*...sigh...* I want you to publish so that I can have a book of your poetry to read anytime I want to - to hold it in my hand, to cherish it. I loved this one too, Roy. There is such wisdom in what you write!

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018

Thanks again dear Dawn,, for these lvery uplifting words and sheerly beautiful review, blessings, Roy

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I like the sentiments behind your words Roy, to have a servant heart and to do those tasks we hate but do them cheer in our heart, the young could learn from your words, your write is humble and uplifting, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018

Tha funny thing is I've regretted it, the rewards out way cost considerably, never once did Mother Teresa regret her service, and nor have I. Bless you for the great review Dolly, blessings, Roy

Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

Roy this is wonderful, a spiritual offering that paints sublime imagery in the mind.
A deep and meaningful poem that has an effortless flow to the rhythm.
Excellent my friend
Mitchell

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018

Thanks Mitchell, for these lovely words and sage review, blessings, Roy

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

Roy, this is a fine sequel to your poem on service. I love how you took the account of Jesus washing his disciples feet and expanded upon this example not in your poem but in your life of faith:

"To be a servant you must be upon your bended knee;
contrite of heart, to be a part, that is the Lord's decree."

You sum up the purpose of a life of service in your closing couplet:

I give you life, remove all strife, to set you free from sin,
I call you friend and brother, kin, your freedom -- I will win."

In terms of structure, this line does not read smoothly:

then, I'm your teacher and your king, but, this wisdom give to you

I suggest:

then, I'm your teacher and your King; I give this wisdom to you

These lines would be clearer written thus:

if you will seek a leader's crown, then you'll a servant be, I wash your feet and that's my treat to set your proud heart free."

Otherwise, this is a fine poem of faith that extends upon the previous poem.

Thank you for sharing.



I give you life, remove all strife, to set you free from sin,
I call you friend and brother, kin, your freedom -- I will win."

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 Comment Written 12-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018

Thanks Andre, for these sage and helpful words and super review, blessings, Roy

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

servant be,I wash your feet <-- needs a line break there.

get off your tush, the toilet bowl's your chore

LOL! What a great line!

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 Comment Written 12-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018

Thanks Phyllis, for these lovely words and sage review, and the correction blessings, Roy