Abandoned
A Search Is On To Find An Abandoned Child13 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
I am glad this is fiction. However, I have heard similar stories of people picking up ghosts at the side of the road. If you ever want to expand on a story, this would be it. Great flash fiction. Nice work.
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I am glad this is fiction. However, I have heard similar stories of people picking up ghosts at the side of the road. If you ever want to expand on a story, this would be it. Great flash fiction. Nice work.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Thesis,
Some people take better care of their cars or pets than they do their children, so even though this is a piece of flash fiction, unfortunately, it happens far too often in our society. Thank you for sharing. I wanted your story to continue...maybe...
Best Wishes,
diane
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Hello Thesis,
Some people take better care of their cars or pets than they do their children, so even though this is a piece of flash fiction, unfortunately, it happens far too often in our society. Thank you for sharing. I wanted your story to continue...maybe...
Best Wishes,
diane
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
What a chilling poem. It really pulls at the heart strings, and more so because you know it happens. You used your well-chosen words to tell a complete story, which was the object of the prompt. You did it well.
Take care,
Rhonda
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What a chilling poem. It really pulls at the heart strings, and more so because you know it happens. You used your well-chosen words to tell a complete story, which was the object of the prompt. You did it well.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 12-Feb-2018
Comment from barbara.wilkey
How horrible??? I can't say I enjoyed reading, but this is an excellent contest entry. It really bothers me that a mother would abandon a child. I know it happens but I don't understand. Good luck with the contest.
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How horrible??? I can't say I enjoyed reading, but this is an excellent contest entry. It really bothers me that a mother would abandon a child. I know it happens but I don't understand. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2018
Comment from jenintorre
I really enjoyed reading your dribble flash fiction. What a very sad story, I hope it's not true.
The picture is very well chosen. Good luck in the competition.
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I really enjoyed reading your dribble flash fiction. What a very sad story, I hope it's not true.
The picture is very well chosen. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2018
Comment from Thomas Bowling
So sad. Some people should never have children. It's hard to imagine someone being so cruel, yet I know that it happens over and over again. Animals treat their children better than some humans.
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So sad. Some people should never have children. It's hard to imagine someone being so cruel, yet I know that it happens over and over again. Animals treat their children better than some humans.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2018
Comment from c_lucas
Some people are not fit to be parents. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest. I like your work.
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Some people are not fit to be parents. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest. I like your work.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2018
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Great job with this piece. These aren't easy to pull off, but you have a whole thing going on here.
Sadly, a too familiar scenarios as well.
G
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Hi there,
Great job with this piece. These aren't easy to pull off, but you have a whole thing going on here.
Sadly, a too familiar scenarios as well.
G
Comment Written 12-Feb-2018
Comment from Sis Cat
A great, tight read about "a sad situation that happens more often than you think." In 52 words, you paint a picture of a child's abandonment and of the officer who pulled over and rescued her.
Your terse prose is almost like a poem. You get in there, tell a fragment of a story, and you get out, inviting the readers to fill in the blanks of Why?
This is compelling and creative writing. Thank you for sharing. I wish you contest success with your fine entry.
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A great, tight read about "a sad situation that happens more often than you think." In 52 words, you paint a picture of a child's abandonment and of the officer who pulled over and rescued her.
Your terse prose is almost like a poem. You get in there, tell a fragment of a story, and you get out, inviting the readers to fill in the blanks of Why?
This is compelling and creative writing. Thank you for sharing. I wish you contest success with your fine entry.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2018
Comment from Debbie Pope
I am going to bed thinking how fictional your story is. How disturbing. Children are so precious and vulnerable. This is an excellent example of flash writing. Good luck in the competition.
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I am going to bed thinking how fictional your story is. How disturbing. Children are so precious and vulnerable. This is an excellent example of flash writing. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
