Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

What a lovely poem. I have never read an origami haiku before, and I am totally impressed. I love to read descriptions of nature. I cannot write that way. That is why I appreciate it so much. I like how you juxtapose death and renewal. Expertly done poem.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

Thanks so much for the excellent review and for all your comments supporting this poem. I came up with the Origami format because I wanted to throw the exact balance of Haiku a little off balance, like creating a little curliqueu at the end of a musical phrase. This was fun to write estory

Comment from brenda faye curtis

Exceptional

I find it interesting that the flow of words becomes smoother with each successive stanza, which I'm sure is intended. It likens the flow of words to the flow of the waterfall, picking up speed as it goes. The words themselves are simple, strong and evoke such good living imagery-firs born of memories, spirit born of rock, and bright angel born of the fusion of all. Truly exceptional!

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

Thanks again for the amazing six star review and all your wonderful comments supporting this poem. It's kind of a dripping effect, I guess, good form for this theme and symbol. A really tranquil and sublime spot estory

reply by brenda faye curtis on 14-Feb-2018

You're welcome, story.

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

What an interesting new form - haiku in meter! I love it. Excellent suite of meditate Aha moments. New Hampshire woods and falls are beautiful. Favorite lines:

Alone in the woods
Where memories are buried
New firs sprout

I found it odd to cap all lines since haiku, traditionally, does not use caps. That's my only critique.

Enjoyed this. So serene - lovely imagery!

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

Thanks so much for the five star review and all your wonderful comments supporting this poem. I think that was my favorite stanza too; very oriental, very much a haiku epiphany moment. it was fun to write. I am glad you enjoyed it and found it so inspiring. estory

reply by rama devi on 12-Feb-2018

Yeah! :-)))

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

Indeed. This is an interesting take on the traditional haiku dear estory! I think you have successfully submitted a poem that doesn't fit the common apple.
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings and a big squeeze!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

Thanks so much for the five star review and your wonderful comments. No I don't like to be a common apple. I am always looking for new ways to make music in language, to be on the cutting edge and explore. estory

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A serene and tranquil write filled with the warmth of the sun, nature at its best and skies filled with God's creatures, a joy to read, best wishes, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

Thanks so much for the excellent review and all your wonderful comments and suggestions, glad you enjoyed it so much and found it so inspiring estory

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very well written poem you have formatted. You used very good descriptive wording and great imagery with your words. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

Thanks so much for the five star review and all your wonderful comments and suggestions estory