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Holiday and Holyday Poetry

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religious and holiday poetry

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Comment from tfawcus
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I like the way you have balanced the love associated with Valentine's Day with the more sober period of mourning and reflection that leads up to Good Friday. In both cases, ashes may be involved, but also the joy of the resurrection. An original composition

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
    Dear tfawcus, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Not sure if we should confuse the two, but you have combined them here in your write, I am dreaming of my Valentine, and Ash Wednesday too, best wishes, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
    Dear Dolly, Thank you for your comments and review. DoveDear Surgarray
Comment from Mistydawn
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This is a very warm, heartfelt emotional poem. You are so right, each day is a new beginning and we need to go out and make the best of it, improving ourselves along the way.

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
    Dear Mistydawn, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Mustang Patty
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Hi, Dove;
It is a bit unsettling that the beginning of Lent falls on Valentine's Day. So many people give up chocolate.

This year, as many years before, instead of giving something up, I've added a new Bible study to my daily activities.

~patty~

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
    Dear patty, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from rama devi
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Good acrostic exploration of the theme. I love the opening and closing lines best:

Love can turn to ashes
Each time we have our clashes

AND:


Easter is the fullness of virtues of the heart

I like the random rhymes. However, it was distracting that the first stanza had a rhyme scheme and the second did not (ie AABBCC in first stanza. Then ABCCDEFGC) The flow is also a bit choppy (enjambment is not fluid) but it does sound okay read aloud.

One more critique - reading this aloud, I think using THE HEART twice in a row is not optimal:


I am trying to awaken my heart and
Never again be the same person I was
Easter is the fullness of virtues of the heart

Suggest:

I am trying to awaken and
Never again be the same person I was
Easter is the fullness of virtues of the heart


Tasteful presentation.

Very interesting theme with the juxtaposition of Valentine's Day and Lent!


Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
    Dear rama devi, Thanks so much for your comments, review and helpful suggestions. I did go in and edit the last verse. Dove
reply by rama devi on 12-Feb-2018
    Yay! Happy to help. :-))
Comment from His Grayness
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I really enjoyed this lovely work and found it to be exceptional in packaging and beautiful presentation. The script is lovely and perfect in all ways and I cannot suggest a single thing to improve it in any ways! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
    Dear Vance, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
reply by His Grayness on 09-Feb-2018
    You did the great works! Smiles! Vance
Comment from Teri7
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This is a very well written Valentine Day poem done in the acrostic format. You used very good descriptive words and great imagery from the art work. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
    Dear Teri, Thank you for your comments and review. Blessings to you too, especially on Valentine's Day! Donna
Comment from Shelly King
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I loved how it was not just about one thing.The poem is very smooth and easy to read. I feel the poem also tells a story that all should spend the time to read.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
    Dear Shelly, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove