Pecos Valley
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Comment from Sankey
Good chapter. I did wonder about the change back to "ordinary speakin' " hehe. I don't mind the old cowboy talk. Now a couple of possible misses. sunk so low she quit[e] talking.
a low cut bo[u]dice,
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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Good chapter. I did wonder about the change back to "ordinary speakin' " hehe. I don't mind the old cowboy talk. Now a couple of possible misses. sunk so low she quit[e] talking.
a low cut bo[u]dice,
Comment Written 13-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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Appreciate the catch on the nits. Goes to show no matter how many times you edit a piece of writing, sometimes you still miss some errors. Glad you enjoyed this portion of the tale.
Comment from Debbie Pope
I have been keeping up, at least with several prior chapters, and I vote for this no jargon version. In the other chapters, there is so much, it's distracting. To me, it takes away from the character's intelligence. Or, pick out one or two appropriate characters to use it with. It seems appropriate for some old timers, and not for others. For instance you could not use it with Isabelle. But, you are so good with the jargon, it's a shame not to use it.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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I have been keeping up, at least with several prior chapters, and I vote for this no jargon version. In the other chapters, there is so much, it's distracting. To me, it takes away from the character's intelligence. Or, pick out one or two appropriate characters to use it with. It seems appropriate for some old timers, and not for others. For instance you could not use it with Isabelle. But, you are so good with the jargon, it's a shame not to use it.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. Appreciate your comments, support, and the explanation concerning the use of Old West jargon.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
For Isabell, sporting was easier than tending cows
A poetic name for the world's oldest profession. A lot of women through the years have sold their bodies as a means of survival.
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For Isabell, sporting was easier than tending cows
A poetic name for the world's oldest profession. A lot of women through the years have sold their bodies as a means of survival.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. In the Old West jobs for women were scarce so they did what they had to do to survive. Question, would you rather the Old West jargon, or eliminate using it?
Comment from Rasmine
At least Isabell didn't walk the solitary dirt road through Pecos Valley carrying a sheet to lay down on the ground on (comma) like some sporting women she knew In Texas did.
Good chapter.
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At least Isabell didn't walk the solitary dirt road through Pecos Valley carrying a sheet to lay down on the ground on (comma) like some sporting women she knew In Texas did.
Good chapter.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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Appreciate the comma catch. Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. Appreciate your support.
Comment from Ricky1024
I bet this chapter is very well-written focusing on Isabel and I'm not that experienced would reading this Western's except for what you've posted here and Charlie Lucas but Charlie is writing jargon is in the old style also, he does a lot of research I believe when he's writing his stuff from what I can tell but so I would suggest you stay with the old style running that would work better with this thanks dr. Ricky 1024 well done
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I bet this chapter is very well-written focusing on Isabel and I'm not that experienced would reading this Western's except for what you've posted here and Charlie Lucas but Charlie is writing jargon is in the old style also, he does a lot of research I believe when he's writing his stuff from what I can tell but so I would suggest you stay with the old style running that would work better with this thanks dr. Ricky 1024 well done
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Comment Written 13-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from misscookie
Thank you for writing this interesting piece
You capture my attention from the first line to the last And the photo that you choose to go with your write is a perfect match
Thank you for sharing this delightful write
Cookie
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Thank you for writing this interesting piece
You capture my attention from the first line to the last And the photo that you choose to go with your write is a perfect match
Thank you for sharing this delightful write
Cookie
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Comment Written 13-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
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Thank you misscookie for your review. Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale.
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Your very welcome.
Happy Valentine Day to you.
Cookie
