Black Blizzard, White
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "The Promise"A 2-part story of a young girl named Betty
4 total reviews
Comment from robina1978
Betty went off somewhere, but the weather caught up with her. Her father looked for her, and Lloyd. Betty noticed too late that the weather was really turning bad. First she sees her father, Fred come. Then Lloyd on Scout. Her father did not listen to the advice he received. Now the four of them huddled together, wondering when or if they ever would get home again. No changes needed.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Betty went off somewhere, but the weather caught up with her. Her father looked for her, and Lloyd. Betty noticed too late that the weather was really turning bad. First she sees her father, Fred come. Then Lloyd on Scout. Her father did not listen to the advice he received. Now the four of them huddled together, wondering when or if they ever would get home again. No changes needed.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Thank you for your kind review and the five stars. I appreciate it.
Comment from Zue65
Wow, I enjoyed reading your post about Betty, her father Fred and Lloyd and how their love for Betty, put them all together to conquer the cold rage of nature. It is quite exciting that I look forward to your next post and then find out if they will all survive the wrath of nature. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Wow, I enjoyed reading your post about Betty, her father Fred and Lloyd and how their love for Betty, put them all together to conquer the cold rage of nature. It is quite exciting that I look forward to your next post and then find out if they will all survive the wrath of nature. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Thank you SO much for your kind review. It gives me the incentive to move forward. Lots to come yet!
Comment from Mistydawn
This is a great chapter. Well-written very interesting held my attention start to finish. Your main character Betty really drew me in. My only suggestion is to put thoughts in italics not " makes it easier for the reader that way.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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This is a great chapter. Well-written very interesting held my attention start to finish. Your main character Betty really drew me in. My only suggestion is to put thoughts in italics not " makes it easier for the reader that way.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Thank you, I'm learning SO much from this group. I will go back and do that! I have a lot of editing to do. I am not a very technical writer so any help I get is very much appreciated. Thank you again.
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I'm learning a lot here too. The people here are very helpful. They start to feel like your extended family after a while.
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I have always just considered myself a "Story Teller" and wasn't at all certain I should share my work with others but everyone here has given me the incentive to do just that. In the beginning I was writing for my grandchildren, now I'm getting brave. Thanks again. BTW, I can't italicize those thoughts on here. But thank you again for your help.
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Bravo to you for stepping out of your comfort zone. It takes a lot of courage to do so but it'll be so well worth it in the long run.
Below where you post your work you'll see the advanced editor that's where you can do the italics and other formats changes. If you want to change size. Do one paragraph at a time otherwise you're wording may get jumbled. I did that once.
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Great, I will look. Thanks again.
Comment from Debbie Pope
Glad that I got to read the next chapter. Now, I will look for the next. I am enjoying this story. I love how you describe the blizzard as a drunken sailor dancing across the prairie. Great imagery. You are doing a fine job with this book.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Glad that I got to read the next chapter. Now, I will look for the next. I am enjoying this story. I love how you describe the blizzard as a drunken sailor dancing across the prairie. Great imagery. You are doing a fine job with this book.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Thank you SO much Debbie. I am glad it's keeping you entertained and it really makes me happy to know you are looking forward to what's about to happen.
