Comment from Y. M. Roger

Good

Those seaweedy dragons are such interesting creatures -- love them!! A fun rhyme with a few "catches", but still fun all the same! Maybe look at the syllables in your fourth line for starters? Take some time and work with it because it has some awesome "kiddie visual" here!!

Thank you for sharing the smiles today! :) :)

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018

Thanks for reading and enjoying. Elaine

Comment from Artasylum

Excellent

this was precious... I love the kraken and want one to live with me and we can entertain each other... We could tell each other jokes and dance a duet about in the sea... kraken come and be with me. yours, diana

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018

Thanks for reading and enjoying. Elaine

Comment from fm wright

Exceptional

A very wonderful, whimsical poem. I like the picture you chose. I would have considered capital letters and periods in some places but that doesn't really affect the poem overall.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018

I am honored by your generous amount of stars. Thanks so much. I am stuck on the Jolly Kraken. Elaine

reply by fm wright on 23-Jul-2018

An interesting creature to be stuck on.

Comment from Gert sherwood

Exceptional

Hello and thank you mermaids for your wonderful rhymed poem about the sea dragon who loves to joke when he meets the tentacle of an ( I believe is an jelly fish or an octopus
Gert

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018

Thanks again for a generous amount of stars. Elaine

reply by Gert sherwood on 23-Jul-2018

You are welcome mermaids
Gert

Comment from Raul1

Excellent

Excellent poem! The poem tells perfect description of the kraken. He lives in the sea water and thinks someone is in charge. Perfect poem! No mistakes here at all.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018

Thanks for a great review. Elaine

reply by Raul1 on 23-Jul-2018

You're welcome

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

And what an adorable little dragon he is. I don't lots about Kraken but it is amazing how these lakes contain mysterious and fun surprises.

Terrific poem and most unique.

Gloria

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018

Thanks for reading and enjoying. Elaine

Comment from Cybertron1986

Excellent

I love the personification here. It gives off an innocent and creative description of the two creatures in an enjoyable and entertaining fashion. A beautifully presented piece, this was an enjoyably simple read.

A very strong five

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018

I appreciate your positive comments. Elaine

Comment from Senyai

Excellent

Hi Mermaids,

This reminds me of a child's playful poem-story. I love it, especially when the Jolly Kraken's laugh makes the sea rise, to the red, blue and green comedic sea dragon's surprise!
Whimsical and well written.

Lynn

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018

Thanks for a great review. Elaine

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

Excellent and may I ask did you write this from and for this beautiful photo as I went back to the photo several times and picked up the tentacle or what could be, very well written****kahpot

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018

Thanks for reading and enjoying. I appreciate your positive comments. Elaine

Comment from Alexander Vasa

Good

Hello Mermaids, this is lovely, so much great imagery in this poem that reads like a story, very engaging and I Noticed no errors, I also appreciated that great picture and the colors you've chosen to go with your work.

This is nicely written and I have no suggestions for improvement and found this poem a pleasure to read and review, Ana.

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 Comment Written 01-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018

Thanks for reading and enjoying. Elaine