Death
The questions thought.18 total reviews
Comment from Katie Solis
What a great tanka. I have found that most don't pivot so much as jump into left field (of another ballpark). Yours flowed nicely, there was definitely a transition, but a natural one. Good job.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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What a great tanka. I have found that most don't pivot so much as jump into left field (of another ballpark). Yours flowed nicely, there was definitely a transition, but a natural one. Good job.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, I really appreciate your comments and I am glad that you enjoyed the flow.
Comment from Whispering_ink
This is a great write!! I wish you the best of luck in the contest!! This is always a form of poetry I struggle with and i enjoyed reading yours!!! I look forward to reading more of your work!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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This is a great write!! I wish you the best of luck in the contest!! This is always a form of poetry I struggle with and i enjoyed reading yours!!! I look forward to reading more of your work!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much for reading and then taking the time to review. I really appreciate your kind comments and good luck wishes. I am, for the record, not a poet, I usually submit it only because of the challenge of a contest or a promise/ agreement with another writer to make an attempt and of course to build up my requirements. Whew I only have 5 more poems to go lol. Again thanks.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
A guess that no one can know
Wonders with or without pain....that is the thing that frightens me...the pain...other than that I'd happily die in my sleep at a certain age. This poem is very wise and intelligent. Well done and good luck in the Tanka competition love and best regards Meia x
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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A guess that no one can know
Wonders with or without pain....that is the thing that frightens me...the pain...other than that I'd happily die in my sleep at a certain age. This poem is very wise and intelligent. Well done and good luck in the Tanka competition love and best regards Meia x
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much for reading and then taking the time to review. I really appreciate your kind comments and of course your good luck wishes.
Comment from Bill Schott
This tanka, Death, has the proper format and poses the question to which no one wants the answer. If I knew I'd die this year, I figure I'd make it the one to be remembered for. If I died yesterday, I want everyone to know MY WIFE DID IT !!!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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This tanka, Death, has the proper format and poses the question to which no one wants the answer. If I knew I'd die this year, I figure I'd make it the one to be remembered for. If I died yesterday, I want everyone to know MY WIFE DID IT !!!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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LOL, sorry about that but I had to laugh at your last line. Your response was well appreciated and so cute. It gave me my chuckle for the day. Thank you so much.
Comment from Pantygynt
A wonder that all secreatly share. Syllabically correct there is a good pivot line relevant to both parts of the poem but that does not stand on its own as I am informed these ought to. But you can't have everything. Some say you should have personification and metaphor as well. More damn rules to these things than you can shake a stick at.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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A wonder that all secreatly share. Syllabically correct there is a good pivot line relevant to both parts of the poem but that does not stand on its own as I am informed these ought to. But you can't have everything. Some say you should have personification and metaphor as well. More damn rules to these things than you can shake a stick at.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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LOL, I am sorry but I am chuckling as I read this review which I am grateful for. I at least thought that after reading a months work and by the way shall read more (hint), I would attempt and the key word is attempt to write one. Once again you provided great learning advise but I was surprised by two things-'you can shake a stick at'- I didn't realize it was said over the ocean and you actually used a semi cuss word, lol; just teasing you. Thank you so much.
Comment from MelB
A well written poem on death. We never know when our last day will be and how it will come, fast or slow, instantly or over a period of time. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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A well written poem on death. We never know when our last day will be and how it will come, fast or slow, instantly or over a period of time. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much, because I do know that you are busy with all that you have on your plate-the survival guide, the horses, the children & people and life. I really appreciate your good wishes. Again thanks.
Comment from Boogienights
This is a great contest entry, well written and thought provoking. Everyone thinks about death...it's unavoidable,and we all wonder about it. You have truly expressed this in your poem. The photo included fits the subject well. I wish you good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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This is a great contest entry, well written and thought provoking. Everyone thinks about death...it's unavoidable,and we all wonder about it. You have truly expressed this in your poem. The photo included fits the subject well. I wish you good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much for reading and then taking the time to review. I really appreciate your kind comments and good luck wishes.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
Unfortunately, death comes to us all and we may never know the how or the when. This work is thought provoking and causes us to see and know our mortality. Thank you for sharing this. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Unfortunately, death comes to us all and we may never know the how or the when. This work is thought provoking and causes us to see and know our mortality. Thank you for sharing this. Well done.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much for reading and then taking the time to review. I really appreciate your kind comments.
Comment from robyn corum
Alie,
As a nurse for so long, I imagine you had to become well-acquainted with death and all the things that surround it. Thinking about that made this poem resonate on an even deeper level for me. Of course, you are right. Sad, but so!
Thanks!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Alie,
As a nurse for so long, I imagine you had to become well-acquainted with death and all the things that surround it. Thinking about that made this poem resonate on an even deeper level for me. Of course, you are right. Sad, but so!
Thanks!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much for reading and then taking the time to review. I really appreciate your kind comments Robyn, I am glad that the reviews are reflecting that it makes them think about it, and it really is not all that bad, if the pain is managed. I had several hospice patients comment as their time was near that-'it's almost my time, I am not afraid and its really a blessing'- so I learned from them.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I've been thinking about death a lot lately, Alie. Not that I'm ill, just an age thing. I do think we have it on our mind more as you grow older, and wonder just how we'll go. I hope I go quickly and quietly in my sleep and wake up with wings! :)) You've started me thinking again, my friend! lol. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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I've been thinking about death a lot lately, Alie. Not that I'm ill, just an age thing. I do think we have it on our mind more as you grow older, and wonder just how we'll go. I hope I go quickly and quietly in my sleep and wake up with wings! :)) You've started me thinking again, my friend! lol. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much for reading and then taking the time to review. I really appreciate your kind comments and good luck wishes. I think the secret is to live each day to its fullest, even if it means with a cup of tea and looking out the window for hours, let your body decide and most important don't be afraid. Its like people being afraid of the dark -nothing has changed- what was there in daylight is still there in the dark- it is more so the unknown that people are afraid of. No many, die and return, a few but not many, and people then scoff what they report. Off my soap box. Perhaps one day I will write about that. lol.
