Black Blizzard, White
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "A Plan of Sorts"A 2-part story of a young girl named Betty
2 total reviews
Comment from Wetbelly01
Yeah, I like it so far... You're doing real well with this,
as far as I'm concerned... You might want to reread your piece,
I think I spotted a couple of 'glitches'... " why did (you) chang(e)"...
And... "Lloyd('s) dad needs your help, your(')s and mine"...
Otherwise, your story is coming along great!...
My compliments!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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Yeah, I like it so far... You're doing real well with this,
as far as I'm concerned... You might want to reread your piece,
I think I spotted a couple of 'glitches'... " why did (you) chang(e)"...
And... "Lloyd('s) dad needs your help, your(')s and mine"...
Otherwise, your story is coming along great!...
My compliments!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your feedback. I never see my own glitches so I really appreciate another "eye". Thank you! I will check it out.
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks strong determination, will can help one to reach the destination, even some other plans, does to help reach the target, so everything goes in favour then, well said, well done. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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This speaks strong determination, will can help one to reach the destination, even some other plans, does to help reach the target, so everything goes in favour then, well said, well done. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much.
