The Life of Mrs. Armstrong
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Comment from lyenochka
What an amazing friend! Not only to be there for her as she transitions from the hospital to being home and getting used to all that equipment, but also being willing to teach Darlene even while being busy working all week!
But what really dropped my jaw reading was how you nurses trained to help geriatric patients by simulating all the difficulties of old age with the blurred vision and the loss of dignity that comes with incontinence etc. I think you should enter the flash fiction contest and write about someone who is in training and end the story with the surprise that it's not an old person but a nurse in training!
One suggestion:
when she calmly ask if it would be okay (asked)
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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What an amazing friend! Not only to be there for her as she transitions from the hospital to being home and getting used to all that equipment, but also being willing to teach Darlene even while being busy working all week!
But what really dropped my jaw reading was how you nurses trained to help geriatric patients by simulating all the difficulties of old age with the blurred vision and the loss of dignity that comes with incontinence etc. I think you should enter the flash fiction contest and write about someone who is in training and end the story with the surprise that it's not an old person but a nurse in training!
One suggestion:
when she calmly ask if it would be okay (asked)
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much, Helene. Maybe one day, lol. I fixed the correction just before I sent this. Hugs!
Comment from Pantygynt
This was a sudden change from the classroom scenes and I wondered whether I had missed something.
The training seems very sound to me. Perhaps there would be fewer instances of patients left lying in their own mess if that aspect of it had not been stopped.
"... which was wore over our normal undies." This should read "worn" in the passive voice or it could be re-written in the active, "... which we wore over our normal undies."
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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This was a sudden change from the classroom scenes and I wondered whether I had missed something.
The training seems very sound to me. Perhaps there would be fewer instances of patients left lying in their own mess if that aspect of it had not been stopped.
"... which was wore over our normal undies." This should read "worn" in the passive voice or it could be re-written in the active, "... which we wore over our normal undies."
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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I really appreciate your reading and screening, all of your suggestions are fantastic and helpful. Thank you so much.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This story has a nice catch, good plot development, interesting climax, orderly resolution, and a formal ending; well said, well done, thank you for sharing this with us. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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This story has a nice catch, good plot development, interesting climax, orderly resolution, and a formal ending; well said, well done, thank you for sharing this with us. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Once again thank you so much for reading and reviewing.
