Clean Your Room!
Contest Entry - What A Mess9 total reviews
Comment from angel123
Six stars, but used them all this week. I love your poem. It flows well right down the page. It's sincere, honest and relatable. My son use to keep his room that way, as a teenager. I think your poem will do well in the contest. Your artwork choice goes well with your message. Best wishes! keep writing.
Angel123
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Six stars, but used them all this week. I love your poem. It flows well right down the page. It's sincere, honest and relatable. My son use to keep his room that way, as a teenager. I think your poem will do well in the contest. Your artwork choice goes well with your message. Best wishes! keep writing.
Angel123
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
Comment from For better for verse
Great poem this, which most of us will identify with one way or the other. We have all heard this when we were kids and of course find ourselves saying it to our own kids in later life.
Very enjoyable, good rhyme and a worthy contest entry, good luck.
Great artwork too.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Great poem this, which most of us will identify with one way or the other. We have all heard this when we were kids and of course find ourselves saying it to our own kids in later life.
Very enjoyable, good rhyme and a worthy contest entry, good luck.
Great artwork too.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Debbie Roland
Cute poem. It reminds me of my teenager's room. One thing that bothers me- The middle two lines in the 2nd stanza need to be shortened for rhythm to match the rest of the stanzas
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Cute poem. It reminds me of my teenager's room. One thing that bothers me- The middle two lines in the 2nd stanza need to be shortened for rhythm to match the rest of the stanzas
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your review. I am sorry but I have to disagree with you on this one.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
They say we pay for our raising...so I have to think your mom is watching and smirking, yes?
A cute poem about a problem we all have to figure out ways of dealing with. Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Dear Mystery Writer,
They say we pay for our raising...so I have to think your mom is watching and smirking, yes?
A cute poem about a problem we all have to figure out ways of dealing with. Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
Comment from James H. Oldfield
Looks somewhat like my house, if I go away for the weekend :)
Very good, I liked this one. A worthy entry to the contest, best of luck.
Well done, and take care.
-James
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Looks somewhat like my house, if I go away for the weekend :)
Very good, I liked this one. A worthy entry to the contest, best of luck.
Well done, and take care.
-James
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
Comment from Fabiha_N
This poem is very well-written! I love the flow to the words. This is so true, my room is always messy, but not that messy! I don't know where my mom finds the energy to always straighten up my room every week.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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This poem is very well-written! I love the flow to the words. This is so true, my room is always messy, but not that messy! I don't know where my mom finds the energy to always straighten up my room every week.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your review and kind words. Help your Mom out, and you clean it up. LOL
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I'm with you on that one and I liked your short quick lines which make me feel your anger and attention required to cleaning up the mess! Good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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I'm with you on that one and I liked your short quick lines which make me feel your anger and attention required to cleaning up the mess! Good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
Comment from rjuselius
Hahaha lol. This is an amusing piece of poetry dear anonymous! You make it rock. Thanks for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings and a big squeeze!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Hahaha lol. This is an amusing piece of poetry dear anonymous! You make it rock. Thanks for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings and a big squeeze!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good story for the 'What A Mess' writing prompt.
Well written and well done. The picture kind of says it all.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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I think this is a good story for the 'What A Mess' writing prompt.
Well written and well done. The picture kind of says it all.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
