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Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Roy. Forgive my late review I must have missed in my messages but it is a lovely thought provoking statement and question poem and congratulations on your win. I am pleased to be second to yours (not bad for a couple of Aussies LOL ) Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Hi Roy. Forgive my late review I must have missed in my messages but it is a lovely thought provoking statement and question poem and congratulations on your win. I am pleased to be second to yours (not bad for a couple of Aussies LOL ) Cheers Christine
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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No Christine, this was an blind contest entry, nothing to forgive, thanks my friend, you are kind, Roy
Comment from GLOBALEYES
The picture goes well with the mood of the poem. this reminds me of someone looking at the cup as half empty rather than half full. Typo: the line "Can we depend." should not end with a period.
Even though it doesn't have to rhyme, it does nicely. until the last two lines??
If Internal hope we each may bring
with thoughts of love can we all sing?
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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The picture goes well with the mood of the poem. this reminds me of someone looking at the cup as half empty rather than half full. Typo: the line "Can we depend." should not end with a period.
Even though it doesn't have to rhyme, it does nicely. until the last two lines??
If Internal hope we each may bring
with thoughts of love can we all sing?
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Thanks, nothing good? Nothing like an opinion eh.
Comment from Douglas Paul
This looks like a really good contest entry to me. I really like your subject matter - it makes one stop and think. Good luck in the contest. Have a good day
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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This looks like a really good contest entry to me. I really like your subject matter - it makes one stop and think. Good luck in the contest. Have a good day
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Thanks so much Douglas, for your great review and kind comments,
Comment from mandyjpg
I like the uncertainty that comes with this poem, though I guess that's what is supposed to happen with the "Statement-Question" poem. This poem isn't very long, but it's very good. Good luck on the contest!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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I like the uncertainty that comes with this poem, though I guess that's what is supposed to happen with the "Statement-Question" poem. This poem isn't very long, but it's very good. Good luck on the contest!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Thanks so much, for your great review and kind comments,
Comment from jppoet
This is a glorious poem, all too thought-provoking, but "says it like it is,"
in perfect metrical cadences and rhythmic rhymes. The photo adds affinity to your superb poem. i would like to become a FAN, but dont see
that i can do so. congratulations, john
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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This is a glorious poem, all too thought-provoking, but "says it like it is,"
in perfect metrical cadences and rhythmic rhymes. The photo adds affinity to your superb poem. i would like to become a FAN, but dont see
that i can do so. congratulations, john
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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You already are John bless you for the lovely review.
Comment from AudreyRose
Wonderful flow and rhythm here. You make a good point and convey how you feel perfectly. I really like the middle stanza, shine and dine. Great imagery here. Overall good job, good luck with the contest
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Wonderful flow and rhythm here. You make a good point and convey how you feel perfectly. I really like the middle stanza, shine and dine. Great imagery here. Overall good job, good luck with the contest
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Thanks so much Audrey, for your great review and kind comments,
Comment from fastdigits
A beautifully formatted poetic message scripted in a statement-question form that artistically whispers so elegantly about this made world that we have come to live in.
Well done and good luck
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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A beautifully formatted poetic message scripted in a statement-question form that artistically whispers so elegantly about this made world that we have come to live in.
Well done and good luck
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Thanks so much for your great review and kind comments,
Comment from Jacques Wolfguard
I enjoyed the content of your poem. I believe the general theme is very relevant especially in today's culture.
I do however have a couple critiques of the poem. The first of these issues is that the rhyme scheme is very loud--meaning it is noticeable enough, that it may distract the reader from the theme your poem is trying to present. In other words, if you can figure out a way to mute that rhyme scheme a little I believe your poem would have an improved fluidity to it. My second issue is in the last stanza. You may want to remove the period that comes after can we depend, because the next line is a continuation of what is started on the "can we depend" line and that period, kind of jarringly stops the reader in the middle of the stanza. These were the main issues I saw with the piece.
But, besides that, keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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I enjoyed the content of your poem. I believe the general theme is very relevant especially in today's culture.
I do however have a couple critiques of the poem. The first of these issues is that the rhyme scheme is very loud--meaning it is noticeable enough, that it may distract the reader from the theme your poem is trying to present. In other words, if you can figure out a way to mute that rhyme scheme a little I believe your poem would have an improved fluidity to it. My second issue is in the last stanza. You may want to remove the period that comes after can we depend, because the next line is a continuation of what is started on the "can we depend" line and that period, kind of jarringly stops the reader in the middle of the stanza. These were the main issues I saw with the piece.
But, besides that, keep up the good work.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Thanks so much for your great review and kind comments,
Comment from Ulla
This is a wonderful poem and asks the million dollar question. How will all this end? We seem to live in an era of so much hatred. How has it come to that? And how can we do something about it? I liked your poem a lot. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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This is a wonderful poem and asks the million dollar question. How will all this end? We seem to live in an era of so much hatred. How has it come to that? And how can we do something about it? I liked your poem a lot. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:))
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Thanks so much Ulla, for your great review and kind comments,
Comment from emereaux
Beautiful poem and very relevant. I loved the rhyming pattern and positive voice of your entry. The photo you used was in harmony with your poem. Wishing you the best in this contest!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Beautiful poem and very relevant. I loved the rhyming pattern and positive voice of your entry. The photo you used was in harmony with your poem. Wishing you the best in this contest!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Thanks so much, for your great review and kind comments,
