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Comment from mermaids
This is excellent. Any human being who has lost a child would have a raging beast within. It makes so much senses. I think many who have lost children would relate well to your words. I commend you for creating this poem.
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This is excellent. Any human being who has lost a child would have a raging beast within. It makes so much senses. I think many who have lost children would relate well to your words. I commend you for creating this poem.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
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Glad you can understand this Elaine doctor Ricky 1024 whatever wonderful day
Comment from Dumbledor
I will tread softly on commenting on this deep verse. It seems like a dialogue with the self, fearful of looking at a deep wound, too painful and terrible to behold, and there is no escape because it is ''At the rift from the Back of my mind '' The dialogue is nicely done,,questioning, pointing towards, but not saying. ''for I fear'' the wound is too painful to be spoken about directly. Well crafted verse, carries the reader along, and maybe brings them to that place many fear to go. I am not skilled enough in the niceties of grammar to point out any changes there, all I know is that it is a nicely done, and presented piece. Best wishes to you.
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I will tread softly on commenting on this deep verse. It seems like a dialogue with the self, fearful of looking at a deep wound, too painful and terrible to behold, and there is no escape because it is ''At the rift from the Back of my mind '' The dialogue is nicely done,,questioning, pointing towards, but not saying. ''for I fear'' the wound is too painful to be spoken about directly. Well crafted verse, carries the reader along, and maybe brings them to that place many fear to go. I am not skilled enough in the niceties of grammar to point out any changes there, all I know is that it is a nicely done, and presented piece. Best wishes to you.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
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Thanks for stopping by my house is suffering dr. Ricky 1024
Comment from Joy Graham
I'm sorry for your loss. It never gets easier no matter how many years pass by. My dad has been gone four years and my brother has been gone for six years. We never get over it, we simply learn a new way to live without them.
I fine all the quotation notes distracting and annoying. There is no need for them. Please take them out.
Sincerely Joy xx
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I'm sorry for your loss. It never gets easier no matter how many years pass by. My dad has been gone four years and my brother has been gone for six years. We never get over it, we simply learn a new way to live without them.
I fine all the quotation notes distracting and annoying. There is no need for them. Please take them out.
Sincerely Joy xx
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
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To Emphasize the Matter to Matter..
More.
Dr Ricky 1024
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I think we all get it and feel your emotion. Take out the quotation marks.
Comment from Henry King
First, get the negative out of the way. Yes, I know that is bad form, but it's not so negative - you typed a "p" instead of an "o" in a couple of places. If a reader can't see that... This is excellent word blending, it flows well. This work is very comprehensible for a dreamer. I also do not want some of my doors opened.
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First, get the negative out of the way. Yes, I know that is bad form, but it's not so negative - you typed a "p" instead of an "o" in a couple of places. If a reader can't see that... This is excellent word blending, it flows well. This work is very comprehensible for a dreamer. I also do not want some of my doors opened.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
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Thanks for the review and info.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
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You are welcome
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Dr. Ricky;
Thank you for sharing your glimpses of a mind trying to heal from one of life's most dastardly blows. Does anyone ever recover from losing a child? I think not.
~patty~
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Hi, Dr. Ricky;
Thank you for sharing your glimpses of a mind trying to heal from one of life's most dastardly blows. Does anyone ever recover from losing a child? I think not.
~patty~
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
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Thanks Patty and I Pray...
To God...
You Never...
Experience...
THAT DAY...
DR. RICKY 1024
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks how sad, sorrowful state of mind and living have been, following deaths in family over the last decades; well said, well done. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
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This speaks how sad, sorrowful state of mind and living have been, following deaths in family over the last decades; well said, well done. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
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And thanks for your wonderful review and time.
Dr Ricky 1024.
Comment from Owais Khan
Hello Ricky!
This is an interesting bit of writing, although not the easiest to comprehend or follow. The use of artwork is appropriate, and adds to the general sense of doom and prophesying thats seems to be the central theme of this piece. This piece left me a bit confused and depressed. I hope you find release and succour through your writings, stay blessed and keep writing!
Love and regards,
Owais
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Hello Ricky!
This is an interesting bit of writing, although not the easiest to comprehend or follow. The use of artwork is appropriate, and adds to the general sense of doom and prophesying thats seems to be the central theme of this piece. This piece left me a bit confused and depressed. I hope you find release and succour through your writings, stay blessed and keep writing!
Love and regards,
Owais
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
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Thanks for your wonderful review and time.
Dr Ricky 1024.
Comment from Sherman541
I am so sorry for your great loss and I cannot imagine what that is like to know a child and then abruptly lose that child. Trying to make peace with that and why and how, has to be very difficult.
I have a lot of sorrow in my life and it is so hard to keep on pushing it down or stuffing it back when it rears its ugly head; so no one knows or can see, feel or hear it. That is a great poem and I am certain it does help to write about the pain, the sorrow and sadness. I know it sure helps me.
I don't talk about it much, because I come from an age of whence they hid, slid/swept it under the rug, brushed it away and was never talked about again age. However, I lost a son who was 4 and 1/2 months pregnant. There was no funeral I did not get to name him, he had blonde hair and blue eyes. I secretly have always called him Adam. I have never forgotten him. Whether I held him or not, he was a part of me and will always be, forever with me and in my heart.
However, I was trained or coerced into believing that was just a part of life and basically to let it go and forget that it ever happened. I don't think anyone even said that they were sorry I had lost the baby, those that knew anyways.
Later I was told by my Mother-in-Law that women just have to deal with the things men dish out. She told me this, because her son was beating me and she basically said that was alright for him to lose his temper and do that sort of thing, because some men are like that, as was my husband's Father to his Mother. Thus, in her eyes women were just supposed to take and not complain or care.
Alcohol was involved and still there is no excuse for men to beat women. I have long since left that man and moved on. I have had to deal many other kinds of sadness and sorrow, but I think it makes one stronger. God stands beside us and guides us, as we go through these things, to help assure we will make it to the other side and come out stronger.
Well, I hope I did not go over board or over step my boundaries. I guess I just wanted you to know you are not alone in the big sea or sadness and sorrow. :)
Sherman
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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2018
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I am so sorry for your great loss and I cannot imagine what that is like to know a child and then abruptly lose that child. Trying to make peace with that and why and how, has to be very difficult.
I have a lot of sorrow in my life and it is so hard to keep on pushing it down or stuffing it back when it rears its ugly head; so no one knows or can see, feel or hear it. That is a great poem and I am certain it does help to write about the pain, the sorrow and sadness. I know it sure helps me.
I don't talk about it much, because I come from an age of whence they hid, slid/swept it under the rug, brushed it away and was never talked about again age. However, I lost a son who was 4 and 1/2 months pregnant. There was no funeral I did not get to name him, he had blonde hair and blue eyes. I secretly have always called him Adam. I have never forgotten him. Whether I held him or not, he was a part of me and will always be, forever with me and in my heart.
However, I was trained or coerced into believing that was just a part of life and basically to let it go and forget that it ever happened. I don't think anyone even said that they were sorry I had lost the baby, those that knew anyways.
Later I was told by my Mother-in-Law that women just have to deal with the things men dish out. She told me this, because her son was beating me and she basically said that was alright for him to lose his temper and do that sort of thing, because some men are like that, as was my husband's Father to his Mother. Thus, in her eyes women were just supposed to take and not complain or care.
Alcohol was involved and still there is no excuse for men to beat women. I have long since left that man and moved on. I have had to deal many other kinds of sadness and sorrow, but I think it makes one stronger. God stands beside us and guides us, as we go through these things, to help assure we will make it to the other side and come out stronger.
Well, I hope I did not go over board or over step my boundaries. I guess I just wanted you to know you are not alone in the big sea or sadness and sorrow. :)
Sherman
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Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
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Sorry for your loss.
Never to know...
Touch...
Reach...
Teach...
As much?
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Never to again see...
The Beauty...
That could Be?
Thanks for this.
Dr Ricky 1024
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you are welcome and thank you, it was many years ago. I have learned how to allow myself to grief and forgive myself for not grieving when I needed to. I hope that make sense. However, from time to time the sorrow keeps coming back and I have to fight back, so I write. ;)
