Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

I think everyone has a dark side. Obviously,the 'beast' has to be controlled, let out only on paper. Otherwise we'd find ourselves in a load of trouble. I think your writing has improved over the last couple of months.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

Hi Cindy can you feel him creeping about on the on the paper as you're reviewing this he's so hungry just doesn't want to be contained anymore I don't know what to do with them he's always telling me let me lose let me lose but I know he's nasty I don't want any part of him thanks for your review dr. Ricky 1024

Comment from Trudi Perkins

Excellent

This is a very interesting poem. I truly enjoyed this poem. Thanks for sharing with us. It's a well written poem. Thanks again Ricky. I'm a fan.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

Thanks Trudi and likewise.
Ricky....

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

Awesome, awesome poem. I see the fury in your words and I see the restraint. There are so many needs, addictions, angers that this poem addresses. You mention a divorce but it resonates with so many other hurts. I hope it is not autobiographical, but if so, my hat is off to you for the restraint. Good luck in the competition. I would be remiss if I did not mention that your title did not print correctly. Easy fix.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

Thanks for your kind review Debbie but when I originally titled this I ran out of room and daddy wouldn't come through it is correct though in the original space would have home thanks for this doctor Rickey 1024

Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko

Exceptional

The work obliquely questions the rationale for giving life to a being and taking it back.

The work highlights the pain inflicted on the living who mourn the dead.

The work earns it's texture through the use of alliteration, onomatopoeia, and rhymes; and more so, it constitutes a dialectical negation of Archbishop Idahosa's valedictory message to his followers: "The Benefit of Dying".

Excellent work! Keep the flag flying!

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018

I like this review Lloyd you've captured it quite beautifully the demon that lies inside thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

This poem speaks to me and I am sorry for your pain. I get days like this as well, so you are not alone. This poem tells the reader of the turmoil in your mind very well. Thank you for sharing and take care.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018

Thanks DMT for your time in this wonderful review of my pain you must have also lost somebody very very extremely special and to that my condolences talk to Ricky 1024

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

You have great pain inside you Ricky that you have expressed here in your writing, it is hard to move on from such a tragedy and time may heal the wound, but we never forget. I wish you luck in your life. May I suggest you make your writing a little larger so that it is easier to read? Also, if you leave out the punctuation your words would stand out more Ricky, good luck, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018

And thanks for your wonderful review and time.
Dr Ricky 1024.

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

This is a strong write, and I don't take anything lightly here, for deep in the psyche it must stay for whom the truth is attached.
Good alliteration, and potent the vision.
I hope for release.
Have a good Sunday.
My best wishes.
RGstar

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018

Thanks for your wonderful review and time.
Dr Ricky 1024.

Comment from Rebekah Lew

Poor

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 Comment Written 29-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018

Thanks.
Dr Ricky 1024.

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Hi Ricky. I don't believe I have ever met a man so deeply emotional about the loss of not one but two loved ones. Your beast would be hard to contain again methinks if he ever comes out loose and not afraid as everything worth having has already been taken away. Good luck Ricky. A strong write. xoxo deborah

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018

Thanks again kiwi.
Dr Ricky 1024.

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Hello, Ricky, :)

My favorite stanza is:
"It's perception is a need...
"Deadly indeed...
"Cavernous, Cancerous, and Dangerous...
"As its Greed needs."
I like the third line the best in this stanza. :)
Ricky, please have a good week.
Nome

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018

Will do and you too!
Dr Ricky 1024.