Tho No Land's In Sight
Nonet12 total reviews
Comment from angel123
Your poem is well written and well received. I enjoyed reading it and it flows well with insight. I like your use of alliteration of s, words, and sounds. I also like your artwork choice and your profound message. Best wishes!
Angel123
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Your poem is well written and well received. I enjoyed reading it and it flows well with insight. I like your use of alliteration of s, words, and sounds. I also like your artwork choice and your profound message. Best wishes!
Angel123
Comment Written 25-Jan-2018
Comment from kiwigirl2821
This is beautifully presented and the words act as the art within your frame. It is an impressive and moving nonet. That "Shh liars are speaking ..." is particularly chilling. Good luck to you. xoxo Kiwi
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This is beautifully presented and the words act as the art within your frame. It is an impressive and moving nonet. That "Shh liars are speaking ..." is particularly chilling. Good luck to you. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 25-Jan-2018
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Nonet. We have no power over nature's cause. We can control our own happiness because it is coming from within ourselves. Our thoughts are the first event leading to our happiness or sadness.
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A very well-written Nonet. We have no power over nature's cause. We can control our own happiness because it is coming from within ourselves. Our thoughts are the first event leading to our happiness or sadness.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2018
Comment from nordicgirl
This has a lot of depth to it, Michael. Really, it inspires me while making me think. A lot of the problems of today are us listening to people saying this is truth. You are so right, faith AND truth is found within. NG
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This has a lot of depth to it, Michael. Really, it inspires me while making me think. A lot of the problems of today are us listening to people saying this is truth. You are so right, faith AND truth is found within. NG
Comment Written 25-Jan-2018
Comment from Gloria ....
Geeze author, this is a fantastic overlay. I really like how you've dragged the beach landscape into the black as that is symbolic of something ominous, yes?
You've done very well with the inverted triangle shape with just two ellipses. But shhhhhhh no one is going to tell.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
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Geeze author, this is a fantastic overlay. I really like how you've dragged the beach landscape into the black as that is symbolic of something ominous, yes?
You've done very well with the inverted triangle shape with just two ellipses. But shhhhhhh no one is going to tell.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
Comment from Debbie Pope
I like it...a lot. Particularly the first line. The "free" breaching doubt. I love that. And, I appreciate the interplay between "doubt", "hope," and "faith," with faith being that which helps breach the doubt. I am leaving out "truth" because I don't see the connection as clearly. Well thought out and executed. Good luck. You may have a winner here.
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I like it...a lot. Particularly the first line. The "free" breaching doubt. I love that. And, I appreciate the interplay between "doubt", "hope," and "faith," with faith being that which helps breach the doubt. I am leaving out "truth" because I don't see the connection as clearly. Well thought out and executed. Good luck. You may have a winner here.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A friend gave me a painting of an old sailing ship going over the edge of the world. A plaque on the frame said, "I told you so." This is a very good contest entry.
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A friend gave me a painting of an old sailing ship going over the edge of the world. A plaque on the frame said, "I told you so." This is a very good contest entry.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Nonet writing prompt.
Well written. A clear message. I like the way you have run the poem into the picture.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the Nonet writing prompt.
Well written. A clear message. I like the way you have run the poem into the picture.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Food for thought here in this free thinking nonet. As you say faith lies within us all. I wish you luck with the contest, an unusual and intriguing nonet here, love Dolly x
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Food for thought here in this free thinking nonet. As you say faith lies within us all. I wish you luck with the contest, an unusual and intriguing nonet here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
Comment from MaryAnnie
It was difficult to read this poem due to the image, formatting, and font. I'm not exactly sure what the author was getting at. I was looking to the author notes to give me context, which were not didplayed for the contest.
Having said that, the work was true to the nonet format.
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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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It was difficult to read this poem due to the image, formatting, and font. I'm not exactly sure what the author was getting at. I was looking to the author notes to give me context, which were not didplayed for the contest.
Having said that, the work was true to the nonet format.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Not sure why you couldn't read it. Is it because it is handwriting? Anyway, here it is in a printed font. If it doesn't make sense to you then it doesn't. LOL Thanks for reviewing though. :))
Tho No Land's in Sight
The free-- breach doubt, setting sail, seeking
no matter the walls built by men
to keep confined or banished
Shh ... liars are speaking,
saying, "we are truth"
But hope whispers,
"Faith resides
within
you"
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Thank you!! Breach doubt...that makes sense. It?s difficult to see that...and yes, I think it?s the handwriting font. Thank you for resending it!
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No worries. I now they don't teach cursive anymore. Us OLD folks still use it. LOL Or so I've heard. :))
