This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Sir John Confronts Joe"Veronica is sent back again
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Comment from giraffmang
Thank goodness for picking up a trick or two, I say. It's all go here and not looking good for Joe.
'Don't say anything, but blink once for 'yes', and twice for 'no', okay? - need closing speech marks here.
to smack the man on his back-side - backside can be a single word here.
Joe hesitated, then turned and walked back to his sister - should be Daveth here rather than Joe.
I'm trying find Joe - trying to find.
After we rushed though it to see - through.
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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Thank goodness for picking up a trick or two, I say. It's all go here and not looking good for Joe.
'Don't say anything, but blink once for 'yes', and twice for 'no', okay? - need closing speech marks here.
to smack the man on his back-side - backside can be a single word here.
Joe hesitated, then turned and walked back to his sister - should be Daveth here rather than Joe.
I'm trying find Joe - trying to find.
After we rushed though it to see - through.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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What can I say? You are wonderful, Gareth. Thank you so very much for reviewing me straight away, but a bigger thank you for finding those nits and letting me know. I had checked through before posting, not once, but loads of times and I still missed some!! I can't thank you enough. Biggest hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
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lol, no problem
Comment from royowen
Well, Veronica has learnt some tricks on her travels through time, and she rescues Aunt Gladys and Elowen from the clutches of one of the thugs, by poking a poker into into the "jailers" chest, she manages to frighten the poor the soul and he runs off. Then looking for Joe, to see if he's OK, she bumps into Gwendolyn, watching Meg play with her son, Gwendolyn tells her to look in the cellar, bringing back memories, she finds Joe slumped in a chair, beaten by the two thugs. Well done Sandra, excellent chapter, blessings, Roy
Typo (Joe) hesitated, then...Daveth?
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Well, Veronica has learnt some tricks on her travels through time, and she rescues Aunt Gladys and Elowen from the clutches of one of the thugs, by poking a poker into into the "jailers" chest, she manages to frighten the poor the soul and he runs off. Then looking for Joe, to see if he's OK, she bumps into Gwendolyn, watching Meg play with her son, Gwendolyn tells her to look in the cellar, bringing back memories, she finds Joe slumped in a chair, beaten by the two thugs. Well done Sandra, excellent chapter, blessings, Roy
Typo (Joe) hesitated, then...Daveth?
Comment Written 25-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Thank you so very much, my dear friend! What a lovely review, and thank you for finding that mistake with the names, I really must keep an eye on that! Roy, I really appreciate the lovely six stars, the lovely review and you for reading my story. Bless your heart, my friend. Sandra xxxx
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Lays a pleasure dear girl
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Even always
