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Veronica is sent back again

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Comment from rwilliam
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I really liked the photo you chose for this chapter.

This was another interesting chapter. I like the fun she's is having as a ghost. The humor is fun and lightens the mood in between the drama. Great writing.

I look forward to reading more.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
    What can I say? Thank you so very much for another wonderful review and for another 6 stars! I just can't thank you enough!! Biggest hugs, my friend! :) Sandra xxxxx
Comment from Sharon Haiste
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Another good and exciting chapter.
Well told and very clear in story and character.
Well done. I'm looking forward to reading what comes next.
Sharon

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
    Thank you so much, Sharon! Your support is so appreciated. :-) Sandra x
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-Another excellent chapter, Sandra.
-I like how you introduce Ver.'s
decision to have some fun and
how she carries it out!
-I think you have created the
1846 version of Mildred:
"'The poker ... didja see it flyin'?
'Ow could that 'appen?'
-I felt badly for Elowen, though, but Ver.
didn't have a lot of choice.
-I like the rest of the dialogue betw. Ver. and Daveth.
-I am glad Gwendolyn is at the manor since
she mentioned looking in the cellar.
-Of course, that brings shudders even to this reader!
-Now we wait to see how Ver. and Gwendolyn
are going to help Joe.



 Comment Written 28-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
    Hmm, our Aunt Glad another Mildred? Worth me thinking about. Lol, thank you, Pam, for another wonderful review, and all those shiny stars. The cellar isn't a nice place in the Manor, as we know. What Veronica can do to help Joe is going to be a hard one for her to work out, but she does like a challenge! As always, your review means such a lot to me, thank you, my dear friend. Big hugs. :)) Sandra xxxx
reply by Pam (respa) on 29-Jan-2018
    "Me hopes you figger that out, Miss." ~Aunt Glad.
    You are welcome and deserving of the review and stars, Sandra. I think Gwen will be a help to her, and who knows, maybe L. Ann will drop in, then Ver. would really have some help!
Comment from rspoet
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Hello Sandra,
The intensity picks up in this chapter, for sure, and the use of humor is quite effective
to maintain equilibrium. One question though, about the use of the iron poker.
I was under the impression Veronica and the ghosts had very limited ability
to maneuver objects, especially heavy ones. You did say it was light and thin,
but pokers that I've used are quite heavy. Just a thought to consider.
Still, the scene is very effective and the humor dissipates the intensity a bit.
(and poker is the perfect word since that is exactly what it does)

The language and dialogue reads true to my ear, though I know nothing of the year 1846,
but then, neither does anyone else. lol
We'll see how Veronica deals with the two thugs of Sir John in the next chapter.
Well done
RS

PS I noticed one review about active/passive voice. I'd be careful about making such changes in the middle of a book, chapter 30. I felt your wording was appropriate to the scenes and consistent with the previous chapters.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
    Hello Robert, Thank you so much for another wonderful review, and brilliant 6 stars! You have given me some food for thought regarding the poker, it would be rather heavy, far heavier than a diary. I'll be working on that for the final edit. I'm glad you pointed that out as I need to keep it 'believable' (as far as it can be with time travel, lol) I'm delighted you thought the language and dialogue reads true, that is a big compliment, my friend. Thank you again! Big hugs, Sandra xxxx
Comment from F. Wehr3
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Nicely done, Sandra. I enjoyed the floating poker scene, lol. Now, Veronica needs something like that to deal with those thugs.

The first thing I had to do once I'd passed through the main door of the Manor, was to find Joe.--I think you need a comma after do. The sentence would read the first thing I had to do was to find Joe.

Looking forward to more,
Russell

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
    Thank you so very much for the lovely review, Russell, and all those lovely stars. I will add that comma, it does cry out for one there, thank you for spotting it and letting me know. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Mustang Patty
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Hi, Sandra;
This latest chapter helped to tie up a lot of details, and I do find myself very scared of Sir John and the things he can do.

What will happen if Veronica cannot control her time travel again?

~patty~

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
    Thank you, Patty, for another lovely review. :)) Veronica has never been in control of her travels, the 'powers that be' will be watching and deciding when she will need to go back to her own time. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Ricky1024
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This was well written with great theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly
Dr Ricky 1024.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
    Thank you so much, Ricky, for another wonderful review. Big hugs, my friend! :) Sandra x
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I was smiling right along with Daveth. I am worried about this cellar and what they might find. I am on the edge of my seat waiting. This is another good addition. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018
    Thank you so much, Barbara. Yes, Veronica hates the cellar, too many bad memories from previous time travels. I'm delighted you enjoyed this part, my friend. Thank you! xx Sandra xx
Comment from estory
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I think this is a pretty strong chapter, you had some fun in that opening scene, as you scared away that flunky with the poker. Then a bit of suspense before you find Joe in the basement, beaten badly. we are making connections emotionally with the protagonists, we don't like the antagonists, and the writing is colorful and there is nice detail in the scene setting. I think its good lively suspense writing, good action adventure building here. estory

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018
    Thank you so much, Estory, for your lovely review. I did have fun with the poker, I just wish I could be invisible some times! Thanks again, my friend. xx Sandra x
Comment from JDRBAR
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Had to go back and read the last four chapters I missed being able to read before reading this one. My computer crashed and I had to do a complete restore, wiping out so much of my work and many other things. Just got back online.
As usual, excellent chapter. It is riveting to say the least.

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018
    Goodness, thank you so very much for going back and reading the last chapters. I'm delighted you are enjoying my story. And a huge 'Thank you' for the 6 stars!! Big hugs, xxx Sandra x