Comment from jppoet

Excellent

congratulations, this is such a glorious, sensitive poem, which would stand alone on its legs of Love. but NO, you sculpt it into HAIBUN, given
that technical exigence as well. The photo lends all its affinity to the grace of your poem. Blessings.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018

Thank you so much for your comments and review!

reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018

Thank you so much for your comments and review!

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This haibun, Late September, has a moving story of lost love in the world that keeps revolving. The adjoining haiku captures the essence of that mood in its reduced format. Nice.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018

Thanks for your review.

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Well done haibun. Good word economy. Expressive emotional overtones and fine metaphorical imagery. A contender for my vote.
Awesome lines:

I hear the clock in the square chime the hour, ever onward. My regret remains eternal.


perfect three-liner closing:

fond memories of
September long ago when
autumn nights were ours.

Lovely presentation.

Wistful.


Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018

Thanks so much for the good review and comments. I appreciate it.

reply by rama devi on 24-Jan-2018

My pleasure. :)

Comment from Mrs. KT

Excellent

Hello!
Beautiful and soulful. The chosen photograph, your prose coupled with your poetry results in a complete image of love found and then lost. Well-crafted.

Best Wishes,
diane

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018

Thank you so much for the good review!

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

This is a lovely haibun, Anonymous Poet, very eloquently worded.
The prose portion is brief yet elegant and poignant, and the haiku is written as a haiku should be--17 syllables (but less is okay), limited punctuation, no capitalization (except for "Fond", you may want to change that), and a "kigo", or seasonal reference.
Very well done.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018

Thank you very much for your great comments and suggestions. Appreciate it!

reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018

Thank you very much for your great comments and suggestions. Appreciate it!

reply by Dean Kuch on 22-Jan-2018

You're more than welcome.
Good luck!
~Dean :)

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Dear Mystery Author,

So far, this is the closest entry I have read that resembles what I was taught to be anything close to a haibun. This piece is clever and emotive and powerful. In just a few short lines, you tell a whole, dramatic story. Quite well done. Good luck in the voting!!

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018

Thank you so much. It sounds personal, and I have received reviews with condolences, but I must say, it?s fictional. I truly appreciate your comments.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written haibun. A romantic tale that seems not to come to fulfillment and the writer will always regret the outcome but still she keeps fond memories close to her heart.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018

Thanks so much for your good review.

reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018

Thanks so much for your good review.

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

Hey, we've got a winner here. What lovely, yet sad, sentiments beautifully expressed in a haibun. The image of the clock ticking away was perfect. A moment in time that will last an eternity. Well done.

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018

Thanks so much for the good review. I appreciate it.

reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018

Thanks so much for the good review. I appreciate it.

Comment from Wetbelly01

Excellent

Neat poem... Well suited for the 'Haibun' contest, I do believe...
Well written... I see no problems with it at all...
Well Done, as far as I'm concerned...

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018

Thanks so much for the good review.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

An atmospheric and romantic write with some meloncholy and longing as those memories bring back nights in September, I loved the matching artwork too. Your heart seems broken and I wish you well with the contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018

Hi Dolly
Thanks for the good review. My heart is fine .... it?s fictional.

reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018

Hi Dolly
Thanks for the good review. My heart is fine .... it?s fictional.

reply by Dolly'sPoems on 21-Jan-2018

It is so heartfelt I was sure it was real! Fine words of the poet! Love Dolly x

reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018

Thanks.