Dolphin Kiss
A Haibun10 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This haibun, Dolphin Kiss, alludes to a 'swim with the dolphins' and an all-around pleasant life goal accomplished. The adjoining haiku captures this scene as well and the success of achieving the exotic goal. Nice.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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This haibun, Dolphin Kiss, alludes to a 'swim with the dolphins' and an all-around pleasant life goal accomplished. The adjoining haiku captures this scene as well and the success of achieving the exotic goal. Nice.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your insights!
Comment from jenintorre
I absolutely love this poem. It is so well described and atmospheric, i was right there with you in the water. The last line "bucket overflows" is pure genius. Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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I absolutely love this poem. It is so well described and atmospheric, i was right there with you in the water. The last line "bucket overflows" is pure genius. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your lovely comments!
Comment from Sugarray77
What a lovely poem. I can feel the tropical air and hear the raindrops. So soothing. The Haibun was well-written and flowed smoothly. Good theme and photo. Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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What a lovely poem. I can feel the tropical air and hear the raindrops. So soothing. The Haibun was well-written and flowed smoothly. Good theme and photo. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Thank you for dropping by to read and review!
Comment from kathleenspalding
This is an excellent story, but the way the haiku at the end fit with the 'bucket' reference is what earned it a six. What a wonderful memory! Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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This is an excellent story, but the way the haiku at the end fit with the 'bucket' reference is what earned it a six. What a wonderful memory! Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Appreciate very much your insights and rating!
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You're welcome
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haibun. To watch dolphins in nature is an amazing experience and to swim with them must be an extra cherry on the top of a wonderful chocolate cake.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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A very well-written haibun. To watch dolphins in nature is an amazing experience and to swim with them must be an extra cherry on the top of a wonderful chocolate cake.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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It was amazing to be so close to these playful and intelligent creatures! Thank you for your encouraging comments.
Comment from kiwisteveh
This one would be on my bucket list too, although perhaps not the rubbery kiss on the lips!
The prose is beautifully descriptive and the haiku connected yet different, as it should be. The last words of both the prose and haiku sections express the positivity you gained from this experience.
Good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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This one would be on my bucket list too, although perhaps not the rubbery kiss on the lips!
The prose is beautifully descriptive and the haiku connected yet different, as it should be. The last words of both the prose and haiku sections express the positivity you gained from this experience.
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your insights!
Comment from brenda faye curtis
I've never seen a haibun before, but, having looked up the rules, this one appears perfectly crafted. The prose is highly descriptive, and I can easily envision the experience, and the haiku is lovely. I wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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I've never seen a haibun before, but, having looked up the rules, this one appears perfectly crafted. The prose is highly descriptive, and I can easily envision the experience, and the haiku is lovely. I wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your kindness and consideration.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Great memories of swimming with the dolphins, how lovely. I saw pink dolphins in the Amazon river when I was there and it was an amazing sight, it must have been such a joy to swim with them. Your write is filled with tropical drops of joy, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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Great memories of swimming with the dolphins, how lovely. I saw pink dolphins in the Amazon river when I was there and it was an amazing sight, it must have been such a joy to swim with them. Your write is filled with tropical drops of joy, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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Thank you! Would love to have seen pink ones though!
Comment from James H. Oldfield
I love the final line, when taken in conjunction to your reference to your 'bucket list'. What a great image.
Very well done, really liked this, and I'm enjoying the haibun form, too.
Great job.
Take care.
-James
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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I love the final line, when taken in conjunction to your reference to your 'bucket list'. What a great image.
Very well done, really liked this, and I'm enjoying the haibun form, too.
Great job.
Take care.
-James
Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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Thank you for dropping by to read and review.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is well done for the 'Create A Haibun' writing prompt.
Well written and well said. I like how the verse refers to the bucket as in list.
Thank you for sharing this and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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This is well done for the 'Create A Haibun' writing prompt.
Well written and well said. I like how the verse refers to the bucket as in list.
Thank you for sharing this and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sharon.
