Faith
Faith is a shield28 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
Faith comes in great at scary moments like a sudden door knock when we are not expecting company. Well thought out and clearly written. Strong visual imagery. Nice work.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Faith comes in great at scary moments like a sudden door knock when we are not expecting company. Well thought out and clearly written. Strong visual imagery. Nice work.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Dear sunnilicious, Thank you for your review of my piece "Faith". It was written for a contest. At the time my Muse had departed for part unknown with a mammoth huff (Goodness knows why), so I was trying to fly alone as it were, with little inspiration.
The picture of the little girl reminded me of a child who used to play at our place with my two sons ( and half the neighborhood children)I saw the picture and the words came afterwards. cheers Cass
Comment from BeasPeas
This is so true--faith knocks off fear. Turning things over to our Higher Power insures that we have comfort and peace. It's out of our hands. Nicely composed message of faith. Marilyn
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
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This is so true--faith knocks off fear. Turning things over to our Higher Power insures that we have comfort and peace. It's out of our hands. Nicely composed message of faith. Marilyn
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
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Dear Marilyn, thank you for your review and the five stars, It was a short piece as my Muse still isn't particularly co-operative, but we're working on it. Il want to put out longer prose works, but she isn't especially keen. She is used to the quick result from a poem or a short piece and still needs reassuring that the effect will be so much more so. Cheers Girl, nice to see you are back amongst us again. Take it steady and don't rush things. All the best Cass
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Thank you, Cass.
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! So amazingly done with just these short lines. It's our minds that can easily create fearful scenarios but if we truly have faith and believe, we can see through eyes of faith the fearful circumstances for what they are.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018
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Wow! So amazingly done with just these short lines. It's our minds that can easily create fearful scenarios but if we truly have faith and believe, we can see through eyes of faith the fearful circumstances for what they are.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018
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Dear Lyenochka, Thank you for your review and the five stars. Yes, it is true what you say.Often the things we fear most are simply of our own making. Facing them sends them away in a puff of smoke. Cheers Cass
Comment from Bill Schott
This spiritual 5-7-5, Faith, answers the question, Who should see who's at the door? Send Faith. This lets us know that there isn't much to fear with God on your side.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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This spiritual 5-7-5, Faith, answers the question, Who should see who's at the door? Send Faith. This lets us know that there isn't much to fear with God on your side.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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Dear Bill, thank you for your review and the five stars. Yes, you do sum it up very well. Good! Thanks again cheers Cass
Comment from RGstar
I love your presentation with the little girl in focus. Whilst loving the presentation, I knew of the saying.
It has even been changed around by some to incorporate Jesus and Satan using the same format.
It's an old English proverb with many thoughts of origin. The one that has strength in depth is;
a sign posted above the door of an Inn. White cliffs of Dover)In 1940 the Nazis were intending to invade or cross the English channel and Winston Churchill (prime minister) called on the nation to pray. A thick fog arrived on that day preventing the crossing.
I think as a competition, as these words have been written before, it would not be fair to win the competition, but what I think you could have done is built on it a bit, build it out to longer and bring your own take to it.
I never like to see words repeated when written before, but as I do not think winning is the end all, and I feel you presented this in Honesty, I am not going to mark this down. Two, I really don't mark down, just advise, but think in the future, if something written or heard, even a proverb...change it to suit your angle.
Here is something written by Gary Jones in 2007 using only half of the proverb that shows how one can build.
2007-09-29 by Gary Jones
Fear knocked at my door, I answered with temptation,
I screamed for forgiveness, but all was for damnation.
Love knocked at my door, I answered with respect,
I dreamed of untold pleasures, I had none to collect.
Envy knocked at my door, I answered with compassion,
I thought of those other kids, who had the latest fashion.
Hope knocked on my door, I answered with contempt,
I wondered why always, I looked for all and wept.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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I love your presentation with the little girl in focus. Whilst loving the presentation, I knew of the saying.
It has even been changed around by some to incorporate Jesus and Satan using the same format.
It's an old English proverb with many thoughts of origin. The one that has strength in depth is;
a sign posted above the door of an Inn. White cliffs of Dover)In 1940 the Nazis were intending to invade or cross the English channel and Winston Churchill (prime minister) called on the nation to pray. A thick fog arrived on that day preventing the crossing.
I think as a competition, as these words have been written before, it would not be fair to win the competition, but what I think you could have done is built on it a bit, build it out to longer and bring your own take to it.
I never like to see words repeated when written before, but as I do not think winning is the end all, and I feel you presented this in Honesty, I am not going to mark this down. Two, I really don't mark down, just advise, but think in the future, if something written or heard, even a proverb...change it to suit your angle.
Here is something written by Gary Jones in 2007 using only half of the proverb that shows how one can build.
2007-09-29 by Gary Jones
Fear knocked at my door, I answered with temptation,
I screamed for forgiveness, but all was for damnation.
Love knocked at my door, I answered with respect,
I dreamed of untold pleasures, I had none to collect.
Envy knocked at my door, I answered with compassion,
I thought of those other kids, who had the latest fashion.
Hope knocked on my door, I answered with contempt,
I wondered why always, I looked for all and wept.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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Dear Friend, Thank you for your review and the five stars. Thank you also for your words of wisdom and correction. I concur with all you have written and own myself somewhat shame faced. Plagiarism is an unforgivable sin in my writer's mind and to realise I have committed it is chastening indeed. Never mind, a word to the wise never goes amiss. Thank you again for your review and the time you took to write this thoughtful admonition. It will not be brushed aside, but remembered always. Yours truly Cass Carlton
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My pleasure author, you are an honest author, and sometimes a saying comes to mind and sticks and with the image and your sense of expression has me in no doubt this was genuinely meant, so if something is so strong in mind, build it out so you have own take and that will suffice. keep writing...keep the spirit. Your next write will be all the better for it.
My best wishes.
RG
Comment from l.raven
HI Cass, what a wonderful faith poem my sweet friend...
all you have to do is have faith...and God will stand at the door with you...so very nicely written sweet one...and your picture is precious...love you Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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HI Cass, what a wonderful faith poem my sweet friend...
all you have to do is have faith...and God will stand at the door with you...so very nicely written sweet one...and your picture is precious...love you Linda xxoo
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Dear Linda, thank you for your review and the five stars. The artwork is rather special. The little girl resembles a child who played at our house when my boys were small. She was a sweet, generous child who had a smile for everyone. Looking at the picture was like seeing her again. Your words about the poem are so true my dear friend. You have captured the sense of what I wanted to say perfectly We do come from the same box of God's Chillun' don't we? cheers Cass
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yes we do Cass...I just know I feel safe with Him on my side...cheers to you too...and your so welcome...love xxoo
Comment from mermaids
Your use of words shows the power of faith. Excellent use of words, the reader can feel the fear and then the fear dissolves once the door is opened. I wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Your use of words shows the power of faith. Excellent use of words, the reader can feel the fear and then the fear dissolves once the door is opened. I wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Dear Mermaids, thank you for your review and the five stars. This is a very brief poem on a big subject, but it says all I needed to say. It seems that many readers relate to its brevity and also the artwork showing a child at prayer. thanks again cheers Cass
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Such a sweet and wonderful poem I loved it and the presentation is excellent well done on a stellar poem. I enjoyed it very much good luck in the competition kind regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Such a sweet and wonderful poem I loved it and the presentation is excellent well done on a stellar poem. I enjoyed it very much good luck in the competition kind regards Meia xx
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Dear Meia, Thank you for your review and the five stars. The piece is brief, but says all I needed to say. Those who have read it seem to appreciate the short message and also the artwork of a sweet child with her head bowed in prayer. Thanks again cheers Cass
Comment from MSJVClarke
Your inspiration did a great job on this one. Simply put with a strong message. I like the artwork you chose to reiterate the topic of faith in your words. It was a very nice poem.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Your inspiration did a great job on this one. Simply put with a strong message. I like the artwork you chose to reiterate the topic of faith in your words. It was a very nice poem.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Dear Friend, Thank you for your review and the five stars. It is a very short piece, but says all I wanted to say. The artwork is of a child who resembles one I once knew when my children were small. She was sweet and gentle and wore a bonnet very like the one in the picture. Her name was Edith, but her Grandmother's name was Loretta Faith. cheers Cass
Comment from Zue65
Oh my, we are on the same boat, when my muse is not working hard, I resort to 5/7/5 to squeeze the creative juice. I enjoyed reading your excellent piece and the picture is so heavenly which complements well your message to the readers. All the best.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Oh my, we are on the same boat, when my muse is not working hard, I resort to 5/7/5 to squeeze the creative juice. I enjoyed reading your excellent piece and the picture is so heavenly which complements well your message to the readers. All the best.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Dear Friend, Thank you for your review and the five stars. You're so right. The Muse has only just returned to the fold and wasn't disposed to give me a lot on this occasion. She sat on the edge of the desk (eating a peach) and just gave me these few words before strolling off for a bubble bath. Small mercies my dear, very small indeed, but at least she is back with me again. cheers Cass
