A Little Bunny Tail
A Poem for Children10 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This parody of the tune to I'm a Little Teapot, A Little Bunny Tail, sounds right and creates a cutesy scene of a fur-bearin' critter frolicking in the underbrush. Nice.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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This parody of the tune to I'm a Little Teapot, A Little Bunny Tail, sounds right and creates a cutesy scene of a fur-bearin' critter frolicking in the underbrush. Nice.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much for the review and comments.
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a "I'm a Little Teapot writing Contest Entree rich in Theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Good luck with this.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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This is a "I'm a Little Teapot writing Contest Entree rich in Theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Good luck with this.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written teapot format poem about s little bunny tail he is hiding in the clover and will stay there for a while because there is plenty to eat. He will go when he filled his need.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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A very well-written teapot format poem about s little bunny tail he is hiding in the clover and will stay there for a while because there is plenty to eat. He will go when he filled his need.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your good review.
Comment from robyn corum
SR,
Thanks for participating in this contest! I do like your entry and I think others will, too. Your image is strong and definitely works well with your poem and appeals to the senses. I think you have a contender. *smile*
My only 'negative' is that you and another member have entries with similar titles which can be confusing to voters. You MAY want to consider making your title memorable or distinct in some way?? That is not a requirement - it's merely an observation. Do with it as you wish - or ignore it completely! hahahah
Good luck!
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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SR,
Thanks for participating in this contest! I do like your entry and I think others will, too. Your image is strong and definitely works well with your poem and appeals to the senses. I think you have a contender. *smile*
My only 'negative' is that you and another member have entries with similar titles which can be confusing to voters. You MAY want to consider making your title memorable or distinct in some way?? That is not a requirement - it's merely an observation. Do with it as you wish - or ignore it completely! hahahah
Good luck!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much for the good review. I saw the same problem but I?m unsure what to do. I appreciate the suggestion.
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No worries. I mentioned the same thing to Dolly and she's changed hers. We're all set. Thanks!
Comment from judiverse
You have a cute takeoff on "I'm a Little Teapot" here. The words you use to describe the bunny and its actions are excellent...tiny and timid. You also use vivid words to show action--hiding, scampering, jumping. My only thing, for the purposes of the contest, I would suggest you put your fourth and fifth lines together to follow the four-line format. No need to change your wording. judi
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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You have a cute takeoff on "I'm a Little Teapot" here. The words you use to describe the bunny and its actions are excellent...tiny and timid. You also use vivid words to show action--hiding, scampering, jumping. My only thing, for the purposes of the contest, I would suggest you put your fourth and fifth lines together to follow the four-line format. No need to change your wording. judi
Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the excellent idea. Great suggestion!
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You're very welcome. I felt that if you didn't keep to the four lines as specified, that might land you in trouble with the CEC. judi
Comment from zlp22
Cute poem, not only for children but for everyone. Bunnies are not just for Easter but for everyday pets .Some are wild and many are tame and make great pets.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
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Cute poem, not only for children but for everyone. Bunnies are not just for Easter but for everyday pets .Some are wild and many are tame and make great pets.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the good review and comments.
Comment from Gulbahar Sidhu
Hi Sugarray77
I loved the simplicity that your poem oozes. It was a pleasure to read such a happy poem. It took me back to my childhood. All the best!
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
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Hi Sugarray77
I loved the simplicity that your poem oozes. It was a pleasure to read such a happy poem. It took me back to my childhood. All the best!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much for the good review. I wanted to write something cheerful that can be shared with children.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 'I'm A Little Teapot' writing prompt.
Well done and well told. I like your version.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the 'I'm A Little Teapot' writing prompt.
Well done and well told. I like your version.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 19-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much for your review.
Comment from James H. Oldfield
Lovely little poem.
Only one tiny suggestion:
Line one, I'd have a comma after 'tail'.
Otherwise, nothing at all to suggest. Very well done.
Take care.
-James
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
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Lovely little poem.
Only one tiny suggestion:
Line one, I'd have a comma after 'tail'.
Otherwise, nothing at all to suggest. Very well done.
Take care.
-James
Comment Written 19-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much for your review and suggestion. I really appreciate your thoughts.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a cute 'little teapot' write full of warmth and cosiness. Little bunnies munching on clover! A bundle of joy and your write is cute, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
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This is a cute 'little teapot' write full of warmth and cosiness. Little bunnies munching on clover! A bundle of joy and your write is cute, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your lovely comments and good review!
