Comment from Asem.inspirations

Excellent

Hello again, estory: This is another exceptional poem. Yet again you use deep imagery that took me to the very place, right at that shoreline which became something new, somewhere new. It divided the realities and the possibilities. Your author notes once again are so poetic too. You have a marvelous way of expressing yourself. Your poetry is genius and so beautiful. I could read it for hours. You must publish a book.
Black skies. White windows.

Love this:

After sunset, she stands there,
Waiting,
Night after night.
But his boat will never come back.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018

Thanks so much for the excellent review and for your continued support and enjoyment of my poetry. There are some dramatic moments in this poem, and I am glad you pointed that out, it means I did my job. I don't know if its genius, but I am glad to be making connections with people who enjoy my work. I think the eloquence comes from years of studying, reading, and writing poetry. I was very fortunate to attend New College at Hofstra University, and have great professors like Diana Ben Merre and Doug Friedlander to teach me how to interpret poetry and appreciate the various forms, and write it. My biggest influences were Seamus Heaney, WB Yeats, WC Williams, Denise Levertov, EE Cummings and Jack Anderson. After that came decades of writing and rewriting. estory

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

To be alone it's horrible just like to have loved once is wonderful but two who have loved only once and not twice as hard also which of course provide separation thanks for this well written piece doctor Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018

Thanks for the excellent review and for all your interesting comments supporting this poem. I am glad you enjoyed it so much estory

Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux

Excellent

I like the contrasting flow of this piece. I see in it places I would like to be right now. Thank you for causing me to see this. Well written and well done.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018

Thanks so much for the excellent review and for all your comments supporting this poem. I am glad you enjoyed it and that the poem took you away to the sea, and all the things the sea stands for estory

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Excellent contemplative, reflective write. Ditto the comments on the previous poem review--flows like waves, appropriately! This one is more direct and less layered (in a good way, as each is different). I liked this, but am sparing with sixes for the same poet in one day! think I have none left, anyway.

I forgot to mention in the other review that i feel that poem )and this one too) would be improved by not capping each line, since there is so much fluid enjambment between the lines. It is not 'wrong' to cap all lines, but I don't think that style option serves the poem well. It would be optimal to use normal sentence-style caps. However, since the lines are relatively short and well-spaced, it's not a big issue.

Enjoyed this.

Exquisite and unique.

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018

Thanks so much for the excellent review, and all your comments and suggestions supporting the poem, and I appreciate your support and enjoyment of my work so much. I think in many ways, despite all the experimentation, that I am a traditionalist, and have always written poetry the traditional way with the opening caps, but I do see your point to opening up the flow, which is very important to me. I will think about it. In the end, the music is the most important thing estory

reply by rama devi on 18-Jan-2018

Thanks for your gracious response. Using all caps is traditional, yes - and older style that most modern poets tend to avoid, as far as I can tell. When a poem has much enjambment, I find all caps distracting and hindering a smooth read. :)

Comment from James H. Oldfield

Excellent

Really liked this one, possibly my favourite poem today.

I liked part IV the best, though throughout it was such a powerful, contemplative poem, whilst still remaining very concise, to the point (not a skill a share :) ).

Excellent work, very well done.

-James

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018

Thanks so much for the excellent review and all the wonderful comments supporting this poem. Glad you enjoyed it so much and found it so uplifting, one of the best on the site. Makes my day and the work seem worthwhile, when you make connections to readers like this estory

Comment from Joel Deniz Nazario

Good

I enjoyed very much the contrasting images and themes of this poem. I feel the raw rhythm and pared back language to mimic the sea. I also very much enjoy the pivotal position of "changeling". I think this gives it a powerful effect.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018

Thanks so much for the good review and all your comments supporting this poem estory

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This poem has deep meaning and spiritual ambiance. Not sure if you know about the separation of the waters in Brazil? Your poem reminded me of this phenomena, a river flows and yet it has an undercurrent of different speeds and temperatures which visibly separates it, much the same as the separation between the sea and the shore. You may find this interesting. A joy to read, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018

Thank you so much for he excellent review for this poem and all your interesting comments. I had not known about that, but It sounds like an interesting image for something in the future, very much in the vein of what I was talking about in this poem estory