The Life of Mrs. Armstrong
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Comment from lyenochka
What a wise teacher! And how scary to let them choose their punishment and finally, offering to be let off with just a warning. They probably will take giving respect seriously after that! I really liked "With each suggestion, I had watched the color changes in both faces."
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and my rational for such; (rationale)
Well, Mrs. Armstrong, its like this (it's)
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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What a wise teacher! And how scary to let them choose their punishment and finally, offering to be let off with just a warning. They probably will take giving respect seriously after that! I really liked "With each suggestion, I had watched the color changes in both faces."
Comments:
and my rational for such; (rationale)
Well, Mrs. Armstrong, its like this (it's)
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much Helen for reading, reviewing and your great comments. I will fix those two items in a moment.
Comment from MelB
Hi Aryr, you really put down the law with them! Wow - The one guy went through a lot of jobs. It doesn't seem like they will be a problem going forward.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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Hi Aryr, you really put down the law with them! Wow - The one guy went through a lot of jobs. It doesn't seem like they will be a problem going forward.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much Mel for reading and reviewing, problems will pop up from time to time, I promise.
Comment from Dumbledor
There is much to be valued in this story, Lots of human insight and measured sensitivity, In one aspect it may , lack depth as a prose piece , is in character description and building, Match your depth of understanding ,with depth of word craft and the sky is the limit.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2018
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There is much to be valued in this story, Lots of human insight and measured sensitivity, In one aspect it may , lack depth as a prose piece , is in character description and building, Match your depth of understanding ,with depth of word craft and the sky is the limit.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2018
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Thank you for reading and review and for your constructive comments.
Comment from Pantygynt
We shall see what we shall see. I got a bit confused at one stage when, "my problem number three raised his hand", but as I understand it there are only two in the room at this stage, so where did number three come in?
Apart from this I continue to enjor the trials and tribulations of Mrs Armstrong.
One thing I believe you defintely have right is the length of your "chapters". I am convinced the the normal length of chapters as found in printed books is far too long for reviewers to deal with helpfully. These shorter chapters are absolutely right for this site and I believe should increase your readership here. Later, if and when you go for publication you can always glue these first three days into a single chapter, separating the days with a row of stars: ***.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2018
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We shall see what we shall see. I got a bit confused at one stage when, "my problem number three raised his hand", but as I understand it there are only two in the room at this stage, so where did number three come in?
Apart from this I continue to enjor the trials and tribulations of Mrs Armstrong.
One thing I believe you defintely have right is the length of your "chapters". I am convinced the the normal length of chapters as found in printed books is far too long for reviewers to deal with helpfully. These shorter chapters are absolutely right for this site and I believe should increase your readership here. Later, if and when you go for publication you can always glue these first three days into a single chapter, separating the days with a row of stars: ***.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2018
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Okay I will check but I think I commented in the beginning that there were three but had also mentioned that 1 & 2 were probably bored. When the idea came to me for some reason I just felt short was better, thank you so much.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a nice fiction shows there is no end in problems, troubles continue, one goes and another comes, but students wait for the outcome and hope for good changes; well said, well done. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2018
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This is a nice fiction shows there is no end in problems, troubles continue, one goes and another comes, but students wait for the outcome and hope for good changes; well said, well done. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 16-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much I really appreciate your kind comments and encouragement.
Comment from royowen
It sounds like you dispensed some communicative common sense to the young men, and actually managed to get some sort of assent to your proposal, it's funny how commonsense can work, well done, good scribing, blessings, Roy
Typo : Which you could write out and submit(ed) to me. 2: neither of you are jumping in to offer (and) ideas. Any?
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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It sounds like you dispensed some communicative common sense to the young men, and actually managed to get some sort of assent to your proposal, it's funny how commonsense can work, well done, good scribing, blessings, Roy
Typo : Which you could write out and submit(ed) to me. 2: neither of you are jumping in to offer (and) ideas. Any?
Comment Written 16-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, I really appreciate you kind comments. Once I am done with this page I will make those corrections, thanks for noticing. Blessings.
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Most welcome
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Common sense is actually a good thing.
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Well done
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Brilliant. Letting them decide their own punishment was perfect. In the end, you gave them an ultimatum with a lot to lose. I think that may have shocked them enough to begin thinking of their own best interests. Can't wait to see tomorrow. :)
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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Brilliant. Letting them decide their own punishment was perfect. In the end, you gave them an ultimatum with a lot to lose. I think that may have shocked them enough to begin thinking of their own best interests. Can't wait to see tomorrow. :)
Comment Written 16-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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I am so glad that you found this one interesting, as a former teacher it was great feedback. Thanks.
