Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Hello Val. This is a gorgeous write my friend. You still have a passionate soul and it comes out nicely in this Lune done in perfect format. Good luck and well done you. xoxo deborah

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018

Thank you my dear friend

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Assuming a lune is a five/three/five short work, I think--well, I think more contrast between text and backdrop would help old coots like me read it--excellent lune.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018

Thank you I am trying to lighten so .....

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a lovely poem for the Lune Poem contest.
Well said in so few words. Beautiful picture as well.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon

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 Comment Written 15-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018

thank you so much for this lovely review.

Comment from Rebekah Lew

Excellent

I liked your poem. My only suggestion would be to find a better word that 'hot'. In the realm of passion, it's fatigued from overuse. Lovey publishing choices, and best of luck with the competition, cheers, Rebekah.

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 Comment Written 15-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018

Thank you for pointing that out, and I agree I changed "hot" to "lost" I love suggestions. Thank you for the review.