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Comment from Pearl Edwards
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She is gorgeous, and a beautiful colour, and she does look tall and proud. You've really captured Bianca's voice with this poem Craig. I've spun a few Alpaca fleeces they are beautiful and soft, gorgeous to work with. Good fun read.
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
    They are indeed, Valda - and none of that oily lanolin to deal with! Many thanks for the lovely review, and Bianca says thank you too :) Craig
Comment from Dawn Munro
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OH! She IS gorgeous. And your response to Robyn's challenge is adorable. Ahem... camels spit too, as my mother discovered one day after joking about one at the zoo. We teased er about it for years. LOL.

Well done. I'm grinning ear-to-ear.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018
    Thanks for the lovely review, Dawn - I'm glad it gave you a smile. I have only worn an alpaca's spit once (a direct hit that is), and I can tell you it's not pleasant! I feel for your mother. Much appreciated, Craig
reply by Dawn Munro on 15-Jan-2018
    LOL - right in the eye! You're very welcome.
Comment from robyn corum
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CD,

This is a really fun answer to this challenge. *smile* Even sounds like you know this particular alpaca? Either way, it's a fun poem! I've already pasted the link in my author notes. Thanks for playing!!

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
    Thanks very much, Robyn, for the lovely comments, and the fun challenge. Yes, Bianca is one of ours, although she's not really a spitter lol. Much appreciated - Craig
Comment from kiwigirl2821
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Hi Craig. What a cute challenge. You need one more syllable on that first line anyway. "I'm a cute alpaca, tall and proud" for instance. I am somewhat an expert on Alpaca and their wool products if you ever need help. Can't imagine how you are keeping them alive and healthy. they do tend to love altitude and cold. Great write. good luck. xx deborah

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
    Hi Kiwi,
    They get plenty of cold here for half the year lol - they're pretty hardy things. My other half spins their wool and sells it. She also makes beanies and jumpers. She's clever in many ways I'm not. But if we find ourselves needing to know something, I'll know who to ask. Many thanks - Craig
Comment from Joy Graham
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This is funny :) I have seen those guys spit too. Some drunk guys at the zoo years ago thought they were being funny. The alpaca spit on them and they didn't enjoy it. Poor widdle drunks.

Robyn is getting lots of bites from her teapot challenge. This is fun.

Joy xx

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
    Thanks so much, Joy. I have only copped a full dose once (not from darling Bianca). It's not pleasant lol
Comment from Teri7
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Craig, This is a wonderful answer to Robyn's challenge for the Little Teapot. Your words were great and went well with that beautiful Alpaca, Bianca. Very good job my friend! Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
    Thanks very much for the lovely review, Teri.Bianca thanks you as well :) Craig
Comment from Gloria ....
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Bianca is so gorgeous. Did you show her the photograph and poem you wrote? Hopefully she nuzzled you rather than give you a spit. lol.

Great job, Craig and it's all the more humorous because it's clear you haven't a deep and abiding knowledge of the I'm a little teapot, metre. ;-)

Hope to read more of these delights.

Gloria

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
    On the contrary, Gloria - we in the correct hemisphere don't add extra words to nursery rhymes - like, for example "and" in the last line. Would you like to hear it read? ;-)
Comment from rama devi
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LOL - that sing on
't get out of my head because of so many poems with that tune ringing through! This is one of my favorites of the batch, with the image, POV and superb creative rhyming plus consonance o S and L.

Bravo.

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
    Thanks very much, RD. Much appreciated. I have seen so many cute pet pics associated with this, I just saw it as a chance to show off one of my "children" :) Craig
reply by rama devi on 14-Jan-2018
    :-)))
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
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Yes, Bianca is gorgeous. She looks so nice and soft and fuzzy.

You rose to Robyn's challenge and your write is cute, Craig; and, I especially love your little zinger of a last line. Yes, they "spit". :) Good humor in this with your last line and "that's not allowed." Well done. ~~ Connie

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
    Thanks again, Connie. I've been on the receiving end, and it's not pleasant LOL Cheers, Craig
Comment from --Turtle.
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Ha!

This was fun, a play on the I'm a little tea pot, sung with the offense of animal being mistaken for another.

nice rhymes used, fun theme, good line up with the original song that inspired the format.

(Some random thoughts I had)

I thought llamas spit too.

The last line of I'm a little tea pot that I recall..

Tip me over and pour... me... out...

Making me want to suggest: Seems no one warned you that... we... spit
(but, as you know, my meter/syllable suggestions are ... eh, every time I suggest something it is with the warning that I'm not very good with poetry, so they are more idle thoughts than suggestions)




 Comment Written 14-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
    Hi Turtle,

    Yes, llamas spit too. The intention was just to say "if you call me the wrong name, I'll spit at you."

    As far as the meter in the last line goes, you are 100% correct the way you learned it (and also the way it's written in Robyn's notes). However, the way I learned it as a child is "tip me over, pour me out." (no "and" - there is a longer pause after "tip"). That's why my version is written as it is :)

    Many thanks, Craig