Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Oh man alive this is one scary story, Ricky. I'm very glad to be a vegetarian when I see this kind of bird contracting some kind of Bubonic Plague or something. Shudder.

Very interesting friend, Ricky.

Gloria

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2018

Thanks Gloria dr. Ricky 1024

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

That is putting it out there bluntly and without cover along with backing to strengthen your piece. Very well done in wording and content

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018

Thanks Barb the idea behind this was to give the clues along the way and then put the the resulting answer to the riddle in the editor's note so they know what I was talking about just a little trick of mine I'm sure you've used it in the past. Directly 1024 have a nice evening

Comment from NiviE

Needs Improvement

The topic is intriguing, and certainly, writing a story about the bubonic plague should be captivating (if not somewhat gruesome). You set the stage well, introducing the character, time, and place. And then, you've stepped back to provide context. All good.

But the dialog is, perhaps, not serving your narrative. Without a greater sense of who is conversing (so far we've only been introduced to one character, and nowhere is another character name addressed), it's hard to get a feel for what motivates the characters, why they're saying what they're saying. If this is setting the stage, you have an opportunity, with greater context, to introduce the conflict. Beyond the presence of the plague, that is. At the start, we are introduced to the main character, and are told he dies. Where, then, is the conflict? Are we stepping back to see the death, or does it move forward from the death?

You've set the stage well, giving the who, what, when, and where. Now delve into the why and the what next.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018

In all actuality this is meant as a informative piece bake based on the black plague or Bubonic plague the character is introducing and his fiction is a fictional character and it's meant to make the reviewer think until they get to the editors notes sort of like a riddle who did it it's already gotten five and six star review so I'm sorry you didn't understand it but I guess when you start writing on the site here and somebody offers you a 2-star review you might consider it whether it's appropriate dr. Ricky 1024

Comment from CSChollie

Excellent

OMG! I wish I could write like you, Ricky. The pictures your words produced for me gave me the shivers. Having said that, I would love to read something uplifting from you right now. Need to take the shivers away. LOL
I will follow you and watch you grow. I think, however, you are already there!

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018

I thank thank you my dear and I will friend request you so I can read some of your work dr. Ricky 1024

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

The Black Death was a very scary time in history and it is still being studied today in order to help us understand and prepare for a similar pandemic in our time. This is well written and thoroughly engaging, my friend. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018

Thanks Angel it's always a pleasure to see Mystic angel or revealing my work since my daughter lives in Mystic Island so I think of you is my angel daughter I hope you don't mind dr. Ricky 1024

reply by Mystic Angel 7777 on 09-Jan-2018

I am honored.

Comment from Asem.inspirations

Exceptional

Good morning, Ricky: Thank you so much for this informative information. I think most of us forget about this kind of thing that happened and wipe so much of the population off of the earth. You have written this well and I could definitely appreciate it's application.

The bible warns that this would happen in the earth in the last days:

Luke 21: 11 There will be great earthquakes, famines and pestilences in various places, and fearful events and great signs from heaven.

It is a very fearful thing but as the scriptures show it will happen and it must as it was foretold by Jesus Christ in Matthew chapter 24 (and in Luke and Mark) as prophesies that must occur before the end of this system of things. This was in answer to his apostles who asked him, "What is the sign of the conclusion of this system of things?


Please have a marvelous day!

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018

Thanks for enjoying this tear the horrible thing was when it first started attack two children first it got so bad that they were they decided to contain it they needed to burn the body so there was massive burnings if they had died in a church or a house or whatever they would burn them also but it was fruitless so many millions that died thanks for this mystere talk to Ricky 1024

Comment from apky

Excellent

Hello Doc,

Thanks for this historical piece on one of humankind's most horrible afflictions in history. Thank you too, for taking the time to give us the historical background in this Age of Renaisance, to paint the whole picture in our minds.

"From the hundreds to eventually the millions?"
"France was Under Siege by some...
"Unknown Force?"
"All because of a ship from *England?"

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018

Glad you enjoyed is Aki and keep your cold back there in Siberia it's so cold here in New Jersey when we had a foot of snow again thanks talk to Ricky 1024

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

Well said, well done, a nice story of contagion disease, because of a ship, millions died; thank you for sharing this with us. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018

And thanks for the beautiful review.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today