A tawdry Rose
Contest Picture7 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
A thoroughly modern woman in the wrong time here, I venture...lol
Nice piece for the comp.
What would Mama make of it all ? And papa would - you capitalise Mama here but not Papa.
tender kisses on their lovers cheeks at eventide ? - lover's. and also delete the space before the question mark.
you don't really need to conditioner of 'to herself' when using she thought/mused - it would be inferred in the context of the piece.
that Lord Dainsley 's - delete the space before the apostrophe.
to swoon with such haste ?- delete the space before the question mark here.
Young men -a-plenty - delete the space after men or delete the first hyphen.
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A thoroughly modern woman in the wrong time here, I venture...lol
Nice piece for the comp.
What would Mama make of it all ? And papa would - you capitalise Mama here but not Papa.
tender kisses on their lovers cheeks at eventide ? - lover's. and also delete the space before the question mark.
you don't really need to conditioner of 'to herself' when using she thought/mused - it would be inferred in the context of the piece.
that Lord Dainsley 's - delete the space before the apostrophe.
to swoon with such haste ?- delete the space before the question mark here.
Young men -a-plenty - delete the space after men or delete the first hyphen.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2018
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully as you express the essence of the artwork in a well penned story. I liked the Elizabethan flavor of the piece as I felt it enhanced the overall enjoyment. All the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully as you express the essence of the artwork in a well penned story. I liked the Elizabethan flavor of the piece as I felt it enhanced the overall enjoyment. All the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2018
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good submission for the 'The Forgotten Rose' writing prompt.
Well done, your story is well told. A good match for the picture.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
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I think this is a good submission for the 'The Forgotten Rose' writing prompt.
Well done, your story is well told. A good match for the picture.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 09-Jan-2018
Comment from Hailey Smith
I like the detail. It tells you something you would not think or notice which is why I like it. Readers will like this story. I hope they agree.
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I like the detail. It tells you something you would not think or notice which is why I like it. Readers will like this story. I hope they agree.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2018
Comment from Joy Graham
Hello Mystery Author,
I enjoyed reading your contest entry. I'm enjoying the entries in this theme. A young princess dreaming of love. Knights and gentlemen. Kings and Queens. It's all very dreamy. I enjoyed your story. It comes off the page and I feel I can see all the things you describe.
One thingInticed is that some paragraphs need a space between them. They're all scrunched up.
Best wishes to you and your contest entry.
Sincerely Joy xx
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Hello Mystery Author,
I enjoyed reading your contest entry. I'm enjoying the entries in this theme. A young princess dreaming of love. Knights and gentlemen. Kings and Queens. It's all very dreamy. I enjoyed your story. It comes off the page and I feel I can see all the things you describe.
One thingInticed is that some paragraphs need a space between them. They're all scrunched up.
Best wishes to you and your contest entry.
Sincerely Joy xx
Comment Written 09-Jan-2018
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Well said, well done, a good submission for The Forgotten Rose writing prompt contest, thank you for sharing this with us. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
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Well said, well done, a good submission for The Forgotten Rose writing prompt contest, thank you for sharing this with us. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
Comment from CKLA
This is a very good entry into the contest. You brought the young maiden in the picture to life quite well, making the reader like her and hoping one day she finds her prince charming.
Well done and good luck in the voting.
Collette
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This is a very good entry into the contest. You brought the young maiden in the picture to life quite well, making the reader like her and hoping one day she finds her prince charming.
Well done and good luck in the voting.
Collette
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
