Mama Bird
Hungry little mouths to feed.10 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 3-5-3 poem. Birds are one of the busiest animals in nature. They endlessly fly around looking for fiid and materials yo build their nests, and they are always chirping happily.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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A very well-written 3-5-3 poem. Birds are one of the busiest animals in nature. They endlessly fly around looking for fiid and materials yo build their nests, and they are always chirping happily.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Many thanks for reviewing
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good morning, Jen: This is another effective post. What I like is that you pick subjects that have much meaning to us as parents, humans, mothers. The amazing thing about the birds is this flying back and forth to bring her babes food, feeding them right from her mouth. I've always found this to be so amazing so this is a post that made me think about it all. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Good morning, Jen: This is another effective post. What I like is that you pick subjects that have much meaning to us as parents, humans, mothers. The amazing thing about the birds is this flying back and forth to bring her babes food, feeding them right from her mouth. I've always found this to be so amazing so this is a post that made me think about it all. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Many thanks.x
Comment from BeasPeas
Direct and to the point. What could be more forthcoming in nature than feeding the babies. The image is outstanding and perfect to go with your piece. Marilyn
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Direct and to the point. What could be more forthcoming in nature than feeding the babies. The image is outstanding and perfect to go with your piece. Marilyn
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Many thanks. I appreciate your comments
Comment from Joan E.
I relished the vivid artwork you selected to reinforce your 3-5-3, even though I did not need it, since your words described the scene perfectly. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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I relished the vivid artwork you selected to reinforce your 3-5-3, even though I did not need it, since your words described the scene perfectly. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much Joan for your great comments
Comment from Dean Kuch
Nice recovery in your final line as using "babies" would have been too many syllables.
Chicks would have worked just as well.
You couldn't state an occurrence in nature more straight forward than this.
Good luck,
~Dean
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Nice recovery in your final line as using "babies" would have been too many syllables.
Chicks would have worked just as well.
You couldn't state an occurrence in nature more straight forward than this.
Good luck,
~Dean
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Thanks Dean. What do you mean by nice recovery?
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That you were able to use "babes" instead of "babies."
Why, do you have some sort of problem with what I said?
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No I don't have a problem at all, I genuinely didn't know what you meant. I am sorry if I offended you by asking as I really appreciate your reviews.
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No worries.
Comment from zekeziemann
Good poem and something to visualize. Did you think perhaps to use the word "young" instead of "babes"? Some may quickly mistake babes for babies.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Good poem and something to visualize. Did you think perhaps to use the word "young" instead of "babes"? Some may quickly mistake babes for babies.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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I rather liked the word babes because she is Mama and they are her babies. Thank you so much for your input. I really appreciate your comments.
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I rather liked the word babes because she is Mama and they are her babies. Thank you so much for your input. I really appreciate your comments.
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine 3-5-3 poem and entry for the contest
with the correct syllables and excellent imagery
Since the poem is one line, I would suggest making
"flies" lower case.
Beautiful art work to match your words
Good luck in the contest
RS
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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This is a fine 3-5-3 poem and entry for the contest
with the correct syllables and excellent imagery
Since the poem is one line, I would suggest making
"flies" lower case.
Beautiful art work to match your words
Good luck in the contest
RS
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Thanks. You are right I will change it.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello author
I like your natural poetic voice of how you show the beauty of a Mama bird
Flies to nest with worms
to feed babes.
Nice
Gert
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Hello author
I like your natural poetic voice of how you show the beauty of a Mama bird
Flies to nest with worms
to feed babes.
Nice
Gert
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Many thanks.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Nature 3-5-3 writing prompt.
Well said in a few words. And your artwork is beautiful.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Nature 3-5-3 writing prompt.
Well said in a few words. And your artwork is beautiful.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Many thanks. I appreciate your comments
Comment from Sugarray77
A good 3-5-3 Nature prompt contest entry. I thought the artwork was perfect for your subject and added the right touch. Good luck on this contest. Regards.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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A good 3-5-3 Nature prompt contest entry. I thought the artwork was perfect for your subject and added the right touch. Good luck on this contest. Regards.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Many thanks
