Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the '5-7-5' writing prompt.
Well said in your few short words.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018

Thanks for the kind review.

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

Thanks for explaining why I feel so tired these days. Here, I thought it was just my age. Skillful use of alliteration with D and P. Near rhyme with deep freeze.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018

Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

OMG, yer killin me! Woman, your wit is exceptional. I am about to have a meltdown from being locked up in my house because of this deep freeze. Thank heavens the weather is supposed to change next week! Best of luck with this clever poem. :))

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018

Thanks, Dawn. I think it is finally ending.

reply by Dawn Munro on 08-Jan-2018

It is RAINING outside. :( Better than that *&%$! deep freeze, but geez... Tomorrow is supposed to be nice, but I might go today anyway. What boots to wear tho? (LOL)

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Your icicle-filled artwork selection establishes the mood perfectly for your 5-7-5. I enjoyed your alliteration but I hope it and the cold don't take too much of a toll! (Don't be jealous--I'm sitting in a fog bank in Southern California.) Best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018

Thanks, Joan.

Comment from jenintorre

Excellent

I like your 5-7-5 poem very much. It has very clever wording and a great illustration.
I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes Jen..

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018

Thanks for the kind review.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I'm not sure I could survive a long cold icy cold winter, and you have my sympathy and I feel the pain and apathy within your words, very poignant, best wises, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018

Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written 5-7-5 poem. In wintertime we can expect to be covered in snow for days on end and keep us all inside in front of the chimneyvm fire to let the town appear brain dead.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018

Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Dallas,

I think what you are talking about is the process that happens when people are subjected to very cold temperatures. The body slowly shuts down until it gives up entirely. It's a sad process, but I understand it may be a rather kind one. This is a different sort of entry and a good one. Good luck!

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018

Causing me to be submerged in inertia. Finally moved frmo sofa and words with friends, to Fanstory. a wiser choice. Thanks for reviewing. -3 here today going to be worse tomorrow.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Oh... So, that's what's been wrong with me! It is -3 degrees here with a wind chill of minus 13 below.
That would explain my ineptitude--it's simply brain damage.
I thought it might be something serious.
Good consonance of "d" in line one, DALLAS.
Good play on the word, "precipitation", in your second.
As for your last line, we already know how I feel about that.
Good 5-7-5.
Best of luck!
~Dean

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018

My temperature is same as yours. Thanks for reviewing. Finally moved from couch, and trading words with friends, for Fanstory. A wiser choice. I was becoming a member of the couch-potato gang.

reply by Dean Kuch on 06-Jan-2018

As cold as it is I can' say as I blame you.
You're more than welcome, DALLAS
Try to keep warm!
~Dean