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Comment from shieldsE
ESTORY, I could go on and on reading this presentation, if only you had gone on writing it 'on and on!' It thoroughly engrossed me with your crisp wording. You painted a lovely picture and I can readily see why you can't go back. Many thanks for posting it. E. Shields
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2018
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ESTORY, I could go on and on reading this presentation, if only you had gone on writing it 'on and on!' It thoroughly engrossed me with your crisp wording. You painted a lovely picture and I can readily see why you can't go back. Many thanks for posting it. E. Shields
Comment Written 11-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2018
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Thanks again for this exceptional review and all your wonderful comments supporting this piece so glad you enjoyed it estory
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your poem has great content and is an interesting read, some may argue it is not a true sonnet, but I prefer to look at the poem as a whole and whether it has merit. Your poem is more like a free write which is the right form for the subject, the freedoms of the sea, the adventure within, and the yearn to move forward, I liked it, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Your poem has great content and is an interesting read, some may argue it is not a true sonnet, but I prefer to look at the poem as a whole and whether it has merit. Your poem is more like a free write which is the right form for the subject, the freedoms of the sea, the adventure within, and the yearn to move forward, I liked it, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the five star review and your comments supporting this poem. I think I called it Sonnet- like. It is very much in the vein of contemporary sonnets by Seamus Heaney. I am glad you enjoyed the poem and the sense of adventure and mystery about it estory
Comment from Dean Kuch
Haul up the mainsail. Let down the rudder.
Feel the wind pull the line in your hand tight.
Outpassed past Block Island and Martha's Vineyard,
The wind rises, the water opens up. ... "Out past Block Island and Martha's Vineyard...", as in to pass something, in past tense, estory.
Good consonance of "s" all throughout.
Good use of alliteration with, "open ocean."
As you've stated in your author's notes, this is very sonnet-like.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Haul up the mainsail. Let down the rudder.
Feel the wind pull the line in your hand tight.
Out
The wind rises, the water opens up. ... "Out past Block Island and Martha's Vineyard...", as in to pass something, in past tense, estory.
Good consonance of "s" all throughout.
Good use of alliteration with, "open ocean."
As you've stated in your author's notes, this is very sonnet-like.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and for all the comments supporting this poem and for the suggestions. I am glad you enjoyed it estory
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My pleasure.
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good morning, estory: You certainly pulled it off. I could feel the rise and fall of the waves. I could see the whole thing in my mind as I read this wondrous poem. The images that your poem placed in my mind did exactly what you wanted them to do. It's great and wonderful. I enjoyed the trip, very nicely done.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Good morning, estory: You certainly pulled it off. I could feel the rise and fall of the waves. I could see the whole thing in my mind as I read this wondrous poem. The images that your poem placed in my mind did exactly what you wanted them to do. It's great and wonderful. I enjoyed the trip, very nicely done.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the excellent review and for all your comments supporting this piece. I am glad you enjoyed it, and the air of mystery and adventure I tried to create in it, the feel of the sea. I was born and raised on Long Island, and those summers spent sailing with my dad were the inspiration for this poem. The sense of freedom on the open water, the lure of the unknown estory
Comment from tfawcus
Interesting rhythm here to add to the nautical feel. I like the ambivalent ending that makes this into more than just a specific sea journey and unites it with the sense of departure experienced by all who migrate, leaving their familiar roots behind, never to return. I must look up the Glanmore Sonnets. These subtle departures from well-established forms often provide a surprising freshness of perspective. I much enjoyed your poem.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Interesting rhythm here to add to the nautical feel. I like the ambivalent ending that makes this into more than just a specific sea journey and unites it with the sense of departure experienced by all who migrate, leaving their familiar roots behind, never to return. I must look up the Glanmore Sonnets. These subtle departures from well-established forms often provide a surprising freshness of perspective. I much enjoyed your poem.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Thanks again for the six star review and for all your comments supporting this piece. I am glad you enjoyed it and that the poem resonated so well for you. This was one of my first sonnets, or sonnet like pieces, and maybe one of the best of the early ones. estory
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a nice work, artistic approach in expressive stand, well done and well said, good action and progression and resolution, thematic catch is likeable. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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This is a nice work, artistic approach in expressive stand, well done and well said, good action and progression and resolution, thematic catch is likeable. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 05-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for the five star review and for all your comments supporting this poem. Glad you are enjoying my poetry so much and hope you continue to enjoy it! estory
Comment from robyn corum
Estory,
I liked this poem very much -- and I am not a fan of sonnets or even 'sonnet-like' poems. *smile* And, I must say, I didn't notice any of the 'hints of rhymes' you were mentioning, but I still liked this piece very much. It had a great flow and the images were very, very cool.
One small note:
1.) Out (past) Block Island and Martha's Vineyard
Thanks so much!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Estory,
I liked this poem very much -- and I am not a fan of sonnets or even 'sonnet-like' poems. *smile* And, I must say, I didn't notice any of the 'hints of rhymes' you were mentioning, but I still liked this piece very much. It had a great flow and the images were very, very cool.
One small note:
1.) Out (past) Block Island and Martha's Vineyard
Thanks so much!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much for the excellent review of this poem and all your comments supporting this piece. "From one end of the world to the other/ Haul up the mailsail, let down the rudder" is one subtle rhyme, a bit broken from stanzas, "tight" and "up" is another, using off rhyme, or approximating sound matches rather than true rhymes. But if you didn't catch them then I did my job estory
