While I'm Sleeping
Dance of Death - Macabre17 total reviews
Comment from Rasmine
Kerry, :)
Happy New Year! How are you doing? I see it still says your reviewer rank and mine at the bottom of the page. I guess that doesn't start over at the beginning of the year.
Hey, I loved your poem!! Do you know Stephen King wrote a nonfiction book called 'Danse Macabre?" It's a book about his writing. He can be funny at times, too. In one part he says he always has to check under the bed for ghosts and ghoulies before going to bed. :P
I found one typo in your author's notes:
no matter one's station in life, the Dance (Danse) Macabre unites all.
Take care,
Nome
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Kerry, :)
Happy New Year! How are you doing? I see it still says your reviewer rank and mine at the bottom of the page. I guess that doesn't start over at the beginning of the year.
Hey, I loved your poem!! Do you know Stephen King wrote a nonfiction book called 'Danse Macabre?" It's a book about his writing. He can be funny at times, too. In one part he says he always has to check under the bed for ghosts and ghoulies before going to bed. :P
I found one typo in your author's notes:
no matter one's station in life, the Dance (Danse) Macabre unites all.
Take care,
Nome
Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Thanks, Rasmine, I appreciate it. I never read that book, hmmm...Oh, it's not a typo in the notes, it is suppose to be like that, just like the name of the book you just mentioned, lol
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No, you spelled it 'dance' not 'danse' :P
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I know, Rasmine, I intended too:))
Comment from DR DIP
How funny is that? I posted a poem a couple of days ago called 'While I was sleeping'
Nearly the same title. Did you see it by chance?
great poem Kerry, totally different to mine I really love the internal rhyme going on her in this ABAB rhyme scheme Thanks for sharing.
dip
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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How funny is that? I posted a poem a couple of days ago called 'While I was sleeping'
Nearly the same title. Did you see it by chance?
great poem Kerry, totally different to mine I really love the internal rhyme going on her in this ABAB rhyme scheme Thanks for sharing.
dip
Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Wow, that is weird, lol, No I did not see it yet, I have much reviewing to catch up on now that the holidays are done. I will have to check it out, had I seen it, I would of altered the name of mine, lol, Sorry, Dip. I wrote it over a week ago, didn't post till yesterday, still would of changed the name though. Thanks for the kind review:)) Have a wonderful New Year.
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hey Kez its sweet it matters not I certainly don't care its great to see you posting as always and may we enjoy a fruitful poetic year together.
dip
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That sounds lovely, Dip, Have a great one:)
Comment from BOO ghost
The presentation is stunning. Lovely. Nice alliterations here. torment and tangle in my mind, reality's tossed away,
twisting tales into my world,
unsettled plight, that is a word combination I never seen before. Imaginative. "Oh come with me into my tomb, we'll dance the night away,
impurities inspire me, we'll dissolve in cleansing purge."
Fantastic! You knocked this one out of orbit!
BOO-tastic!
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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The presentation is stunning. Lovely. Nice alliterations here. torment and tangle in my mind, reality's tossed away,
twisting tales into my world,
unsettled plight, that is a word combination I never seen before. Imaginative. "Oh come with me into my tomb, we'll dance the night away,
impurities inspire me, we'll dissolve in cleansing purge."
Fantastic! You knocked this one out of orbit!
BOO-tastic!
Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Awe...Thank you so much, Boo for this outstanding review, I'm glad you liked it, I appreciate the golden nugget emensley.
Have a great New Year:))
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Don't freeze to death yo yonder. getting down to - 1 degrees down here. Hope you got your autoplay working.
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oh-no, I didn't, I gave up for now, lol
Comment from emptypage
rigamortis--rigor mortis
The fourth verse is the best.
It alone flows without interruptions within the structured sentences.
I like the eery reality. I like the visuals your words produced, unhappy as they are.
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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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rigamortis--rigor mortis
The fourth verse is the best.
It alone flows without interruptions within the structured sentences.
I like the eery reality. I like the visuals your words produced, unhappy as they are.
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Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Thanks for catching the misspelled word, my spell check didn't catch that, it was fixed, is that the only reason for the 4 star
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No, Kerry. The lack of flow in the first three verses was my reason. Two and three go okay together, but one is clumsy on the tongue. Four is strong and reads well.
Comment from Dean Kuch
This was most assuredly a Danse Macabre, Kerry.
Interesting internal and end-rhyme scheme.
You've painted some eerie imagery in writing this one.
I, for one, thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
So, you've danced with death.
But, have you ever danced with the Devil in the pale moonlight?
Would you like to, heh-heh?
Nicely done...
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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This was most assuredly a Danse Macabre, Kerry.
Interesting internal and end-rhyme scheme.
You've painted some eerie imagery in writing this one.
I, for one, thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
So, you've danced with death.
But, have you ever danced with the Devil in the pale moonlight?
Would you like to, heh-heh?
Nicely done...
Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Hmmm...An interesting invite, sounds temptingly scary, lol. Thank you, Dean, I appreciate your kind review, I take it as a compliment that you enjoyed it.:)) ~Kerry
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I did, very much!
You can dance with me anytime, my dear.
~Dean :)
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lol, Why thank you, kind Sir:))
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I'm really not kind but I'm glad you think so, Kerry.
And please, don't call me sir. I work for a living, LOL.
Besides, Sir spelled in reverse is "R-i-s."
I have no idea what that means at all, however...
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lol, I don't know what it means either
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They say great minds think alike.
Now, if you can find another one who agrees with you there will be two of you! :)
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hmm...
Comment from oliver818
I enjoyed this poem. It flows well and is nice to read. I like the image of the Danse Macabre. Thanks for sharing this great poem and have yourself a really great day
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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I enjoyed this poem. It flows well and is nice to read. I like the image of the Danse Macabre. Thanks for sharing this great poem and have yourself a really great day
Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Thank you so very much, my friend, I appreciate it.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
hey Kerry. I love the fact it's not another contest, but just something you were thinking about or something! I'm not even sure it isn't one of the best I've read in this subject matter. Truly enjoyed it! Happy New Year again, the race is on lmao! xx Kiwi
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hey Kerry. I love the fact it's not another contest, but just something you were thinking about or something! I'm not even sure it isn't one of the best I've read in this subject matter. Truly enjoyed it! Happy New Year again, the race is on lmao! xx Kiwi
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Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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lol, Thanks so much, Kiwi, It actually was written from a nightmare I had, scared to go back to sleep, tried to stay awake so I didn't fall back into the dream and wrote this, crazy, I know. Have a Happy New Year!
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you do know right? That anytime you dream of any type of "death" you are actually putting to rest something that has been rolling around your psyche without a landing spot. To dance with death is like precise and measured movements, plan if you will but definitely something that has been an itch and needed to be dealt with and then put to rest...I could go on ... one of my deals really, I really do see shit. lol xx Kiwi
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Hmmm...very interesting, I never heard that, I do analize dreams, and have a dream book thats pretty accurate, I live by, lol I guess it is a good sign, huh?
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lol oh Kerry, some things don't come from "books" mate, but they still come :)
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hmmm..Interesting,
