From out of the Grayness
Viewing comments for Chapter 50 "Panagloria"Reaching from the gray areas to understand life
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Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
I think you covered the most wondrous gifts admirably in this well penned piece. The imagery is beautiful and calls to mind that enraptured moment each of us has had when gazing at the ocean or a star in the night sky. I especially liked the reference to the much maligned 'blue' as God would not have made so many shades of it to enjoy was there not something special about it. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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I think you covered the most wondrous gifts admirably in this well penned piece. The imagery is beautiful and calls to mind that enraptured moment each of us has had when gazing at the ocean or a star in the night sky. I especially liked the reference to the much maligned 'blue' as God would not have made so many shades of it to enjoy was there not something special about it. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Thank you Mystic Angel, for your wonderful review and stars! I am delighted to know you enjoyed my work and hope to see you again soon! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
As a poem I would like to see this broken up into stanzas because otherwise it becomes rather prosaic. I loved the content however, quite beautiful and very compelling to read for me at least. I think overall it is rather marvellous it just needs a little formatting to make it into a poem otherwise it is a spiritual short prose work. Very good though! Kindest regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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As a poem I would like to see this broken up into stanzas because otherwise it becomes rather prosaic. I loved the content however, quite beautiful and very compelling to read for me at least. I think overall it is rather marvellous it just needs a little formatting to make it into a poem otherwise it is a spiritual short prose work. Very good though! Kindest regards Meia xx
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much Mia, for your kind review and stars! It is always a special delight to hear from you in all ways! Vance
Comment from Dean Kuch
I truly enjoy your very uniquely formatted, interesting brand of poetry, Vance. It's all crunched up together, almost as if it were one continuous thought.
But, it's not.
It's a string of thoughts, like this, about God and nature and the beautiful things He's given us all to enjoy.
All for free.
What more can we ask for than that?
Well done, sir!
~Dean :)
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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I truly enjoy your very uniquely formatted, interesting brand of poetry, Vance. It's all crunched up together, almost as if it were one continuous thought.
But, it's not.
It's a string of thoughts, like this, about God and nature and the beautiful things He's given us all to enjoy.
All for free.
What more can we ask for than that?
Well done, sir!
~Dean :)
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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What a joy to hear from you Dean! I love all your works in all ways, and always the wonderful reviews you always write. Blessings always.. Vance
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You're very welcome, Vance. :)
Comment from RGstar
Hi, Vance. A strong write here my friend, with many questions within the answers.
Strong metaphors that carry your theme forward. Nature abundant here too. A nice write of faith.
My best wishes.
Have a great New Year, my friend.
RGstar
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Hi, Vance. A strong write here my friend, with many questions within the answers.
Strong metaphors that carry your theme forward. Nature abundant here too. A nice write of faith.
My best wishes.
Have a great New Year, my friend.
RGstar
Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much RG for your uplifting and generous review! Always a joy to hear from yo and Hope you have a wonderful and prosperous new year. Please stay in touch! Vance
Comment from Dawn Munro
Vance, this is truly beautiful, rich with vibrant imagery - I have one, small nit, however, and that is the presentation (but only because it makes it harder to read when it is not broken into stanzas - these eyes are growing more challenged with every passing day. LOL)
Wonderful poem! Happy New Year, my friend. May 2018 be the best one yet!
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Vance, this is truly beautiful, rich with vibrant imagery - I have one, small nit, however, and that is the presentation (but only because it makes it harder to read when it is not broken into stanzas - these eyes are growing more challenged with every passing day. LOL)
Wonderful poem! Happy New Year, my friend. May 2018 be the best one yet!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much Dawn, for the lovely review and generous stars..so much appreciated. I hope this new year brings you great joy and peace and certainly keeps more of your lovely works coming through on Fanstory! Blessings always! Vance
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You are very welcome. :) (and THANK you!)
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Thanks so much and have the very best YEAR YOU COULD EVER WISH FOR! Blessings always: Vance
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Thank you - you too. :)
Comment from Ricky1024
Happy New Year my friend A very wise and wonderful actor once said when I in before I go to bed and rest my head I get down on my knees and place my boots firmly underneath as far back as I can so that when I awaken in the morning and take my rested Head Upon off pain my bed get down again on my knees of course to retrieve what I left before have no choice but to thank God for all he's done for me and more just a little thought and quit and rhyme about mr. Denzel Washington this kind of spark that off thanks and have a Happy New Year dr. Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Happy New Year my friend A very wise and wonderful actor once said when I in before I go to bed and rest my head I get down on my knees and place my boots firmly underneath as far back as I can so that when I awaken in the morning and take my rested Head Upon off pain my bed get down again on my knees of course to retrieve what I left before have no choice but to thank God for all he's done for me and more just a little thought and quit and rhyme about mr. Denzel Washington this kind of spark that off thanks and have a Happy New Year dr. Ricky 1024
Comment Written 01-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Thank you sincerely dear friend Ricky and please know how much I appreciate your encouraging comments and generous stars...so much appreciated! I hope this year is the best in your life and all of your prayers and aspirations come true. I always look forward to your excellent writings! All the best always! Vance
Comment from apky
In this poem you display excellent tone, tenor and imagery that awed me as a reader. You do have the gift to mix and mingle words in imagery that turn out absolutely thrilling to the reader, and dig deep into the mind.
My favourite lines:
as the ocean sings to the sky and the sky cries in gratitude, its glorious tears kiss beauty and grace into the flowers and trees, and their fragrances feed the butterflies,and the fresh winds carry their majestic blue back across as the ceiling of life brings a billion smiles across the horizons and love is born.
Blessing for the New Year,
Apky
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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In this poem you display excellent tone, tenor and imagery that awed me as a reader. You do have the gift to mix and mingle words in imagery that turn out absolutely thrilling to the reader, and dig deep into the mind.
My favourite lines:
as the ocean sings to the sky and the sky cries in gratitude, its glorious tears kiss beauty and grace into the flowers and trees, and their fragrances feed the butterflies,and the fresh winds carry their majestic blue back across as the ceiling of life brings a billion smiles across the horizons and love is born.
Blessing for the New Year,
Apky
Comment Written 01-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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Thank you sincerely dear apky for you kind and generous review! Have a blessed New Year! HIS GRAYNES; Vance
Comment from rama devi
Exquisite imagery, tone and tenor. Beautiful and inspired, dearest Vance! This is exalted in mood and substance. I enjoyed it a ton. The voicing and flow are good, even with the run-on longer lines, but there are spag issues that hamper the smooth read (noted below), since this is a prose-style poem.
NOTES
I LOVE the opening line:
Not more than tiny fingers of light are called to form the chords of God's music and light dancing upon the harp of destiny and the celebration of life.
* Would now the thundering hoofs (hooves) of reality pounding the dry(,) hard floor of reality,(no comma) bring clouds of consciousness to the horseman of life?
Powerful personification:
Can the wings of silence lift the heavy storm clouds of fear from the grip of desperation and worry that spits boredom's ignorance into the face of Mother Nature?
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Do you know why anything blue may not be sad? a(A)s the ocean sings to the sky and the sky cries in gratitude, its glorious tears kiss beauty and grace into the flowers and trees, and their fragrances feed the butterflies,(space)and the fresh winds carry their majestic blue back(s) across as the ceiling of life brings a billion smiles across the horizons(-- or ,) and love is born.
*The smiles abide(,) and God's greatest gift of gratitude sweeps across uncounted hearts(,) and,(no ,) life itself is created.
Elevating and inspiring write.
Lovely presentation.
Thank you.
God Bless.
Happy New Year.
Happy New NOW!
Warmest Wishes,
rd
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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Exquisite imagery, tone and tenor. Beautiful and inspired, dearest Vance! This is exalted in mood and substance. I enjoyed it a ton. The voicing and flow are good, even with the run-on longer lines, but there are spag issues that hamper the smooth read (noted below), since this is a prose-style poem.
NOTES
I LOVE the opening line:
Not more than tiny fingers of light are called to form the chords of God's music and light dancing upon the harp of destiny and the celebration of life.
* Would now the thundering hoofs (hooves) of reality pounding the dry(,) hard floor of reality,(no comma) bring clouds of consciousness to the horseman of life?
Powerful personification:
Can the wings of silence lift the heavy storm clouds of fear from the grip of desperation and worry that spits boredom's ignorance into the face of Mother Nature?
*
Do you know why anything blue may not be sad? a(A)s the ocean sings to the sky and the sky cries in gratitude, its glorious tears kiss beauty and grace into the flowers and trees, and their fragrances feed the butterflies,(space)and the fresh winds carry their majestic blue back(s) across as the ceiling of life brings a billion smiles across the horizons(-- or ,) and love is born.
*The smiles abide(,) and God's greatest gift of gratitude sweeps across uncounted hearts(,) and,(no ,) life itself is created.
Elevating and inspiring write.
Lovely presentation.
Thank you.
God Bless.
Happy New Year.
Happy New NOW!
Warmest Wishes,
rd
Comment Written 31-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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Thank yo so much rama, for this lovely and uplifting review (as always from you), and please have a wonderful and blessed NEW YEAR. BTW, I cannot visit Florida due to medical issues taking priorities in life just now. Blessings always! Vance
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So sorry about the medical issues, dear Vance. Sending a ton of prayers and healing thoughts and vibrations. Feel 'em? Love and Light, rd
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Thank you dearest /RAMA FOR THE WONDERFUL LOVE AND VIBES! BLESS YOU ALWAYS)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
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Sending abundant healing thoughts your way, precious brother!
Love, rd
Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for this uplifting poem, Vance. Yes, there are so many beautiful things in Nature that praises God, and we in turn should also thank and praise Him. May you be blessed this new year!
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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Thank you for this uplifting poem, Vance. Yes, there are so many beautiful things in Nature that praises God, and we in turn should also thank and praise Him. May you be blessed this new year!
Comment Written 31-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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Thank you sincerely lyenochka, for your lovely review and generous stars! I am delighted to know that you enjoyed my work and I look forward to seeing you again soon. Blessings always and HAPPY NEW YEAR! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment from MissMerri
There is something so beautiful in the arrangement of these words and the images they create in the mind as we read. I liked, not only the lovely word selection, but also the message they offer, of gratitude to God for all that's good in our lives. What an appropriate message as we look back over the year now ending and think about what lies before us. God is at the center, no matter where we look, but I hope I will remember to lift up my eyes in the months ahead. It's there I find my help. I appreciate your kind spirit and generous ways, Vance. I hope 2018 is for you the happiest year yet. Hugs, MM
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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There is something so beautiful in the arrangement of these words and the images they create in the mind as we read. I liked, not only the lovely word selection, but also the message they offer, of gratitude to God for all that's good in our lives. What an appropriate message as we look back over the year now ending and think about what lies before us. God is at the center, no matter where we look, but I hope I will remember to lift up my eyes in the months ahead. It's there I find my help. I appreciate your kind spirit and generous ways, Vance. I hope 2018 is for you the happiest year yet. Hugs, MM
Comment Written 31-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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Dearest MM, my greatest joy on FS is reading your work and hearing from you with such lovely and uplifting reviews! I am so proud of you for you great success in releasing your book of poetry and will be purchasing it asap, and will send you my immediate review, which I'm sure will be a million stars...just like those that sparkle from your precious mind! Love Vance
