Cora
Should she trust him?23 total reviews
Comment from Ricky1024
Well written looking forward to the next part to see what's going on behind sneaky boyfriends back this well-written story rich and theme and imagery as well read well flow well no grammar issues as the objective and subjective concerts were firmly in place in the line with descriptive measures thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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Well written looking forward to the next part to see what's going on behind sneaky boyfriends back this well-written story rich and theme and imagery as well read well flow well no grammar issues as the objective and subjective concerts were firmly in place in the line with descriptive measures thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written and very interesting chapter to you story about Cora. You used very good descriptive wording and great dialogue. I look forward to reading some more about Cora! As far as trusting him It would be hard for me to trust him in this situation. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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This is a very well written and very interesting chapter to you story about Cora. You used very good descriptive wording and great dialogue. I look forward to reading some more about Cora! As far as trusting him It would be hard for me to trust him in this situation. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reading, Teri.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Well written. This is a good setup to go in many possible directions.
It's interesting and easy to follow.
Well done and I look forward to reading more.
Sharon
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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Well written. This is a good setup to go in many possible directions.
It's interesting and easy to follow.
Well done and I look forward to reading more.
Sharon
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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Thanks for your constant support, Sharon.
Comment from zanya
A lot of intrigue going on here between these two besotted lovers -nicely worked with a sense that there is something of interest on the way for the reader -keep on writing ..looking forward to the next episode !!
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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A lot of intrigue going on here between these two besotted lovers -nicely worked with a sense that there is something of interest on the way for the reader -keep on writing ..looking forward to the next episode !!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I truly love the way you wrote this and added the thoughts and confusion that she is feeling. It makes us feel like we are talking to them also
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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I truly love the way you wrote this and added the thoughts and confusion that she is feeling. It makes us feel like we are talking to them also
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reading and reviewing, Barb.
Comment from Bucketlist
Ah, the old cliff hanger suspense prose! I got envious just looking at the pub, and reading of their calcite affair. I must read the 'what happens next ' post. Are you writing a book? I like this so far, and you are a well versed grammer writer.
Hugs, Trisha
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Ah, the old cliff hanger suspense prose! I got envious just looking at the pub, and reading of their calcite affair. I must read the 'what happens next ' post. Are you writing a book? I like this so far, and you are a well versed grammer writer.
Hugs, Trisha
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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It might turn into a novel. I'm not sure yet...
Thanks for reading.
Comment from royowen
I like the plot of this delightful little story, the characters, the slightly enigmatic theme, the "edge of one's seat" Stotyline and the great finish to this episode leading to the next. Well done Maria, blessings, Rooy
Typo : as usual John (payed). Paid?
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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I like the plot of this delightful little story, the characters, the slightly enigmatic theme, the "edge of one's seat" Stotyline and the great finish to this episode leading to the next. Well done Maria, blessings, Rooy
Typo : as usual John (payed). Paid?
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reading and for noticing the typo.
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Welcome
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter. When a relationship starts with secrecy and behind the scenes there are usually a sinister reason behind the secrecy. Hopefully I am wrong and John will not break Cora's heart.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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A very well-written chapter. When a relationship starts with secrecy and behind the scenes there are usually a sinister reason behind the secrecy. Hopefully I am wrong and John will not break Cora's heart.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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No, you're not wrong. I'm afraid John is hiding something.
Thanks for reading.
Comment from pbomar1115
Cora has a complicated life. At twenty-two, young adults deal with complicated decisions like what to do. With more experience, Cora action will prove correct or wrong. In it, she would have learned something about herself in a relationship. But for now, she is the doing the normal thing.
Phillip
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Cora has a complicated life. At twenty-two, young adults deal with complicated decisions like what to do. With more experience, Cora action will prove correct or wrong. In it, she would have learned something about herself in a relationship. But for now, she is the doing the normal thing.
Phillip
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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I guess you're right, Phillip. Thanks for reading.
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You're welcome, Maria.
Phillip
Comment from humpwhistle
Your story and characters are interesting. But I think you can tighten up your writing some. I made a few suggestions.
Peace, Lee
She had already got dressed and was looking at herself in the mirror. She had a light pink lipstick in her hand and was applying it carefully.--Maybe you can eliminate a couple of pesky 'was': She'd already gotten dressed, looked at herself in the mirror. She held a light pink lipstick, allied it carefully. --Just a suggestion.
John was waiting in the living room.--John waited in the living room. (another 'was' gone)
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Your story and characters are interesting. But I think you can tighten up your writing some. I made a few suggestions.
Peace, Lee
She had already got dressed and was looking at herself in the mirror. She had a light pink lipstick in her hand and was applying it carefully.--Maybe you can eliminate a couple of pesky 'was': She'd already gotten dressed, looked at herself in the mirror. She held a light pink lipstick, allied it carefully. --Just a suggestion.
John was waiting in the living room.--John waited in the living room. (another 'was' gone)
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reading and for your suggestions.
