Procrastination
My inner dialogue this time of year45 total reviews
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I'll just eat a couple of pieces.
Hah, you will never lose any weight that way.
Yes, I will. I promise to cut back before the new year starts.
When?
Tomorrow, I'll start tomorrow. '
And we all say that! A great entry for the competition I hope you do very well love Meia xx
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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I'll just eat a couple of pieces.
Hah, you will never lose any weight that way.
Yes, I will. I promise to cut back before the new year starts.
When?
Tomorrow, I'll start tomorrow. '
And we all say that! A great entry for the competition I hope you do very well love Meia xx
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Yep, I find myself talking to me all the time. I don't listen very often though. LOL
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written dialogue. It is a familiar subject we all have many times. We dream of losing weight but we have a hard time to stay away from all the sweets and Christmas dishes.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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A very well-written dialogue. It is a familiar subject we all have many times. We dream of losing weight but we have a hard time to stay away from all the sweets and Christmas dishes.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Thank you, Sandra. It's tough this time of year. Maybe next year, right? LOL
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
This inner dialogue could be my own. I have every intention of watching what I eat... starting tomorrow. BUt tomorrow never comes and TODAY I crave chocolate. :)
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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This inner dialogue could be my own. I have every intention of watching what I eat... starting tomorrow. BUt tomorrow never comes and TODAY I crave chocolate. :)
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Thanks for the great review. I found out that I'm not alone after writing this story. LOL
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hahahaha,
This was grrrrrrrrrrreat, Anonymous Author.
It was easy to discern when "you" were talking and when your conscience was goading you.
It was very easy to follow, and well written (no SPAG, grammatical issues, etc.)
It's a topic most anyone who has made a New Years Eve resolution will be able to relate to.
Looks like a winner to me!
Good luck, and...
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Hahahaha,
This was grrrrrrrrrrreat, Anonymous Author.
It was easy to discern when "you" were talking and when your conscience was goading you.
It was very easy to follow, and well written (no SPAG, grammatical issues, etc.)
It's a topic most anyone who has made a New Years Eve resolution will be able to relate to.
Looks like a winner to me!
Good luck, and...
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Hey, thanks. A good review from the master means a lot to me. LOL
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I'm hardly a master, but you're welcome just the same.
Happy New Year!
~Dean
Comment from Mabaker
Very clever and well put together. It's not the easiest writing all dialogue, and being a contest entry makes it harder again, because you know your writing against other contestants. Hope you do well. Sincerely Mabaker
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Very clever and well put together. It's not the easiest writing all dialogue, and being a contest entry makes it harder again, because you know your writing against other contestants. Hope you do well. Sincerely Mabaker
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Thanks, old friend. Win or not, I love writing all dialogue stories. I already have an entry in the next one in January.
Comment from Rikki66
Well written and well told. These are the words spoken by every addict I have ever known, Be they addicted to food, drugs, booze even sex. one more cookie, one more sandwich, one more fix, one more drink, one more man or woman then I will quit tomorrow. but tomorrow never comes. Sounds like old song lyrics.
rikki66
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Well written and well told. These are the words spoken by every addict I have ever known, Be they addicted to food, drugs, booze even sex. one more cookie, one more sandwich, one more fix, one more drink, one more man or woman then I will quit tomorrow. but tomorrow never comes. Sounds like old song lyrics.
rikki66
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Yep, tomorrow never comes. I'm always promising myself I will go on a diet. Oh well.
Comment from Sugarray77
I really like this. So funny and dieting is so hard!!! Great choice of words. A good description and choice of topic. The photo was good and fit the scenario well. Good job. Regards. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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I really like this. So funny and dieting is so hard!!! Great choice of words. A good description and choice of topic. The photo was good and fit the scenario well. Good job. Regards. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reading and commenting. Yep, it's tough to diet.
Comment from zekeziemann
Boy is this a familiar story. I've hear it from several friends and family members. I wish you luck in the contest. Very well done. Happy New Year.
If you have a chance please review my Western Short Story, "They Were COwboys". as I am a couple of reviews short of the top status. Thanks.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Boy is this a familiar story. I've hear it from several friends and family members. I wish you luck in the contest. Very well done. Happy New Year.
If you have a chance please review my Western Short Story, "They Were COwboys". as I am a couple of reviews short of the top status. Thanks.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Okay, will do as soon as I get done answering reviews. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Comment from Spitfire
The wannabe dieter is great at rationalization. Her friend confronts her, but in a tactful way. But then again, that part could be read as brutal and with the right blocking, this could be interpreted as bullying.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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The wannabe dieter is great at rationalization. Her friend confronts her, but in a tactful way. But then again, that part could be read as brutal and with the right blocking, this could be interpreted as bullying.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reading and commenting. Glad you enjoyed the story.
Comment from Dan Diego
Reviewed in the blind. This is a highly relatable contest entry. Who hasn't gained a little weight during the Holidays? This should resonate with voters in the booth. I thought the dialogue was realistic. For some reason, I imagined a devil on one shoulder and an angel on the other. Strange. I did not see any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors. I did see a narrator clearly in control of a humorous exchange between the sub-conscience and the waistline. Great job. An enjoyable read. Good luck in the booth.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Reviewed in the blind. This is a highly relatable contest entry. Who hasn't gained a little weight during the Holidays? This should resonate with voters in the booth. I thought the dialogue was realistic. For some reason, I imagined a devil on one shoulder and an angel on the other. Strange. I did not see any spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors. I did see a narrator clearly in control of a humorous exchange between the sub-conscience and the waistline. Great job. An enjoyable read. Good luck in the booth.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reading and commenting. I love these dialogue only contests. I just wrote the way I talk to myself. Glad you enjoyed it.
