Unleashed Chaos
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "Secrets and Betrayal"A Novel of the Breedline Series
7 total reviews
Comment from Natali Holden
Eve is probably one of my favorite characters, but then most of your characters are like that. You are awesome at making your characters feel real. Even some of the bad guys, like Sebastian, are likeable to me. Keep up the awesomeness!
Natali ;)
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
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Eve is probably one of my favorite characters, but then most of your characters are like that. You are awesome at making your characters feel real. Even some of the bad guys, like Sebastian, are likeable to me. Keep up the awesomeness!
Natali ;)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
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Thank you dear Natali :)
It surprises me to hear you say Eve is one of your fav characters. She was actually hated in the first book. I wanted to make her character have a change of heart. I believe there is good in everyone. And yes... Sebastian is one of my beloved characters. He is actually my alter-ego.
Thanks again!
Shana :)
Comment from ngage
Shana, just when I thought your story was outstanding, it turns out you have gone beyond that. Fantastic scribing! Your imagination takes my breath away.
My favorite part in this chapter has to be Eve's dream. Very interesting and captivating. Keep up the good work! Looking forward to reading it all!
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Shana, just when I thought your story was outstanding, it turns out you have gone beyond that. Fantastic scribing! Your imagination takes my breath away.
My favorite part in this chapter has to be Eve's dream. Very interesting and captivating. Keep up the good work! Looking forward to reading it all!
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Thank you my dear friend :)
This is amazing to hear! Words cannot express how inspiring this is to me. I'm on cloud nine!
Sincerely,
Shana :)
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good portion to your story, full of emotion and intrigue.
I'm waiting to see what the next chapter will reveal.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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This is a good portion to your story, full of emotion and intrigue.
I'm waiting to see what the next chapter will reveal.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Thank you, Sharon :)
So glad you enjoyed the emotion in this chapter. Your feedback is great to hear! Looking forward to entertaining you with more Breedline adventures.
Sincerely,
Shana :)
Comment from apky
Poor Eve. I immediately feel with her in the opening paragraph of this chapter. And it was truly a great opening chapter that urged the reader to keep going to find out what would happen next.
Amd poor Tessa too. When a wounding experience happens, the memories and negative emotions associated with it are long lasting. The event is so awful that the character becomes afraid that it or something like it will happen again. This fear can take many different forms associated with the wounding event.
"I'm not feeling well," she said, avoiding (his-change to "the") hand he offered.
Another elegant and brilliant chapter, darling. You're great in this genre.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Poor Eve. I immediately feel with her in the opening paragraph of this chapter. And it was truly a great opening chapter that urged the reader to keep going to find out what would happen next.
Amd poor Tessa too. When a wounding experience happens, the memories and negative emotions associated with it are long lasting. The event is so awful that the character becomes afraid that it or something like it will happen again. This fear can take many different forms associated with the wounding event.
"I'm not feeling well," she said, avoiding (his-change to "the") hand he offered.
Another elegant and brilliant chapter, darling. You're great in this genre.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Thank you my dear friend :)
So inspired to always hear what you think about my chapters. I'm glad you expressed how you feel about Eve. Most of my readers in the beginning of my story hated her. But of course she was a bad apple at first. It's funny how readers can change their feelings about a character as the story moves on. Like you, now they care for her. I guess I've done my job, because I want the readers to like her. She has a change of heart.
Always my pleasure to hear from you. I'm your true fan as always,
Shana :)
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Glad you liked the review.
How are you feeling, better?.
BTW I've entered (for the first time here in FS) the Marriage Proposal contest. If you ever read the short story, let me know if you "recognise" something, okay?
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Thanks for asking. Yes, I am much better. I will have to take a look at the Marriage Proposal contest.
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Is yours the the Barbarian Proposal???
Comment from royowen
There's such a lot going on in this longish episode, I wonder if a mother's instinct and attachment to her offspring survives even the unusual supernatural existence of the parent. Just what will she do, and is Lilith aware of Stephen, I hope the awakened goodness in Eve helps in her change, and what will Tim work out, why doesn't Tessa turn to her wolf self, she's bigger than the others? Well done dear Shana, great scribing. Blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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There's such a lot going on in this longish episode, I wonder if a mother's instinct and attachment to her offspring survives even the unusual supernatural existence of the parent. Just what will she do, and is Lilith aware of Stephen, I hope the awakened goodness in Eve helps in her change, and what will Tim work out, why doesn't Tessa turn to her wolf self, she's bigger than the others? Well done dear Shana, great scribing. Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Thank you my dear friend :)
Yes, you are right. There is a lot going on with the Breedline adventures. Stay tuned to find out if Lilith's memories come back to her before she destroys her own children.
Tessa cannot turn into her Breedline wolf because the drug Thomas has been giving her is keeping her from it. He warned her if she shifts, she will die. And if she continues to telepathically connect with Jace, she will die. Stay tuned....
Thanks again for all you do!
Always your fan,
Shana :)
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Mmh good weaving dear Shana, very interesting and clever
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This enormous novel has its own natural order of identifiable entity toward dimensions of human values and moral message in the shades of glossy fantasy having fast plot development to mature the theme, now secrets and betrayal are so well flown with a curious ending. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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This enormous novel has its own natural order of identifiable entity toward dimensions of human values and moral message in the shades of glossy fantasy having fast plot development to mature the theme, now secrets and betrayal are so well flown with a curious ending. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 27-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Thank you, Dr. Alcreator :)
Your feedback is very kind and I really enjoy hearing from you. Stay tuned for more Breedline adventures to come.
Thanks again,
Shana :)
Comment from Ricky1024
Secrets and betrayal is part of the chaos series well written in which enzimas Wells imagery it flood well-read well and had no grammar issue so to speak and checked in an object of contents were excellent and descriptive measures in place Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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Secrets and betrayal is part of the chaos series well written in which enzimas Wells imagery it flood well-read well and had no grammar issue so to speak and checked in an object of contents were excellent and descriptive measures in place Ricky 1024
Comment Written 27-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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Thank you, Ricky! :)
It's great to hear from you again. I enjoy your feedback. Thanks so much my friend! Hope you had a Merry Christmas!
Sincerely,
Shana :)
