Rising Fear
A Cacaphony11 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This poem is really well done. I enjoyed the fast pace and rhythmic beat you've created here. Good word choices throughout and illustrated well. Marilyn
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2018
This poem is really well done. I enjoyed the fast pace and rhythmic beat you've created here. Good word choices throughout and illustrated well. Marilyn
Comment Written 03-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2018
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Hi Marilyn, Thanks for your review and I was luck to gain a third for this so that is great. These contests always make me think up something along with the picture challenges (so far behind though even with my week away, but now home where the computer is so much faster and I can go back and check out every-ones work Cheers Christine
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Hi Christine. This being the first of the year we are challenged to review everyone's work and can easily get overwhelmed. I'm happy you placed in the contest and hope you're having a wonderful vacation. Marilyn
Comment from Ogden
You do exaggerate, but why not? To just say these noises are a little unsettling and such, wouldn't make for a interesting or involving poem or be cacaphonic, which your poem is.Good luck in the contest.
Don (aka Ogden)
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
You do exaggerate, but why not? To just say these noises are a little unsettling and such, wouldn't make for a interesting or involving poem or be cacaphonic, which your poem is.Good luck in the contest.
Don (aka Ogden)
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Hi Don I can assure you there is no exaggeration on my behalf I am petrified of storms and if one comes I do dash inside and draw the curtains etc and block my ears. My family all know how I feel and let me do this. It all started as a child when my Grandfather took me outside as a four year old and told me about lightning that woul Kill Ya well that was enough for me And ai have been scared ever since I cannot look at lightning under any circumstances. ( I won a competition a couple of years ago called 'Storms give me Palpitations ' if you would like to read it it is in my profile ) The day I wrote this one last week I heard some rain on the roof and thought of a storm approaching and this is the result. LOL And Ihope it gave me good material for this contest. Cheers for you good luck wishes and Have a Great New Year. Cheers Christne
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Hi Don I can assure you there is no exaggeration on my behalf I am petrified of storms and if one comes I do dash inside and draw the curtains etc and block my ears. My family all know how I feel and let me do this. It all started as a child when my Grandfather took me outside as a four year old and told me about lightning that woul Kill Ya well that was enough for me And ai have been scared ever since I cannot look at lightning under any circumstances. ( I won a competition a couple of years ago called 'Storms give me Palpitations ' if you would like to read it it is in my profile ) The day I wrote this one last week I heard some rain on the roof and thought of a storm approaching and this is the result. LOL And Ihope it gave me good material for this contest. Cheers for you good luck wishes and Have a Great New Year. Cheers Christne
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I was teasing, Christine, which I wouldn't have done if I knew how serious your fear of storms is.
Wishing you a dry 2018.
Happy New Year!
Don
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Thats Ok Don no harm done LOL My kids realy laugh at me but do understand just a big woose I suppose Cheers
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Cheers back atcha, Christine!
Comment from MSJVClarke
This is an excellent Cacophony poem. The words you chose to describe the storm certainly can be heard. I can envision the beginning of the storm, "pitter, patter" and the acceleration as it became stronger. I especially liked the ending, "Fingers....."
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
This is an excellent Cacophony poem. The words you chose to describe the storm certainly can be heard. I can envision the beginning of the storm, "pitter, patter" and the acceleration as it became stronger. I especially liked the ending, "Fingers....."
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Hi MSJVClarke, Thanks for you review and this is exactly how my poem started I am camping at the moment and I hear rain on the van roof and thought about Storms and how I feel about them This is all true even blocking my ears I hate storms based from a childhood experience and hence this one was written . Do have a Great New Year and Cheers
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Hi MSJVClarke, Thanks for you review and this is exactly how my poem started I am camping at the moment and I hear rain on the van roof and thought about Storms and how I feel about them This is all true even blocking my ears I hate storms based from a childhood experience and hence this one was written . Do have a Great New Year and Cheers
Comment from June Sargent
Well you have certainly painted a vivid picture of stormy weather with words! It flowed well and didn't sound contrived. Should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
Well you have certainly painted a vivid picture of stormy weather with words! It flowed well and didn't sound contrived. Should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Hi June, Thanks for your review and this was written based on exactly how Storms make me feel so not contrived at all I am petrified when I see lightning and run inside and draw the curtains and if the thinders is too loud I do block my ears. Silly isn"'t t it but I had a bad experience as a child when my grandfather told me that lightning would Kill Ya. have a Lovely New Year and see you in 2018 Cheers
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Hi June, Thanks for your review and this was written based on exactly how Storms make me feel so not contrived at all I am petrified when I see lightning and run inside and draw the curtains and if the thinders is too loud I do block my ears. Silly isn"'t t it but I had a bad experience as a child when my grandfather told me that lightning would Kill Ya. have a Lovely New Year and see you in 2018 Cheers
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written cacophony poem. All the sounds of an approaching storm can be very fearful. When it finally comes down it is usually over very quickly.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
A very well-written cacophony poem. All the sounds of an approaching storm can be very fearful. When it finally comes down it is usually over very quickly.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Hi Sandra, Thanks for sharing your thought on my entry for this contest And yes My morbid fear of storms allows content for this jonre' Everything I said is true I do close blinds and curtains and block my ears. A childhood fear is still with me LOL Cheers
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, this is simply an excellent Cacophony poem, Anonymous Poet.
A perfect poetic post portraying exceptional examples of Onomatopoeia.
Choosing a thunderstorm as your topic was a wise move as there are a myriad of sounds associated with them.
It's hard to imagine anything topping this.
However, this IS FanStory, so anything can happen.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
Well, this is simply an excellent Cacophony poem, Anonymous Poet.
A perfect poetic post portraying exceptional examples of Onomatopoeia.
Choosing a thunderstorm as your topic was a wise move as there are a myriad of sounds associated with them.
It's hard to imagine anything topping this.
However, this IS FanStory, so anything can happen.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Ha Ha Yes Dean this certainly is and it is a strange place sometimes win some lose some LOL Thanks so much for you support and great review Cheers AP
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Or lose some, lose some, Christine...depending on who you are.
Good luck...
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Ha Ha Yes Dean this certainly is and it is a strange place sometimes win some lose some LOL Thanks so much for you support and great review Cheers AP
Comment from zekeziemann
Well written and a good chance at winning the prize. Good rhythm and thyme and the fear described comes across nicely. Happy New Year.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
Well written and a good chance at winning the prize. Good rhythm and thyme and the fear described comes across nicely. Happy New Year.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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Hi zekeziemann. Thanks for your positive comments for my entry for this contest. I thought I would give it a go and my fear of storms and the sound of rain this morning prompted these thoughts. Cheers
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good entry for the 'Cacophany Poetry' writing prompt.
The beautiful picture is a good match as well.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
This is a good entry for the 'Cacophany Poetry' writing prompt.
The beautiful picture is a good match as well.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 27-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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Hi Sharon, Thanks for taking the time to have a peek at this contest entry. I thought this image fitted nicely too And your good luck wishes are welcome Cheers
Comment from Ricky1024
This writing prompt entry was Richard team as well as imagery of the flood well-read well no grammar issues adjective an object the contents were in place and excellent trip the measures also where employees thanks for dissing good luck in the contest dr. Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
This writing prompt entry was Richard team as well as imagery of the flood well-read well no grammar issues adjective an object the contents were in place and excellent trip the measures also where employees thanks for dissing good luck in the contest dr. Ricky 1024
Comment Written 27-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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Hi Ricky 1024 .Thanks for your great review and rating for this poem I am pleased to have tour support and Cheers for tour good luck wishes
Comment from Wetbelly01
Aww just great, I ain't coming out from the bed
until the storm is over!.... LOL....
Good poem!.... Should do well in the contest, I would think....
Well Done!... as far as I'm concerned...
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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
Aww just great, I ain't coming out from the bed
until the storm is over!.... LOL....
Good poem!.... Should do well in the contest, I would think....
Well Done!... as far as I'm concerned...
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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Hi Wetbelly01. thanks for reading and hiding under the covers. It is all true I have a morbid fear of storms and do excactly as my poem says LOL . lets hope the readers like it HA Ha Cheers for a great review
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You're very welcome,
and Good Luck!!
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Hopefully we won't end up in the land 0f OZ!!...