Therapy Patient part 2
The sexual desires take over... now what?2 total reviews
Comment from Ricky1024
Hey Sammy a nice Russian name my last name is Borkowski its first name of Richard it's nice Czechoslovakia ending this was nicely written by the way rich and team as well and reread well flowed well with no grammar issue so to speak adjective an object the contents were perfect and excellent trip to measure where in place thanks for just talked to Ricky 1024 and have a nice Christmas
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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Hey Sammy a nice Russian name my last name is Borkowski its first name of Richard it's nice Czechoslovakia ending this was nicely written by the way rich and team as well and reread well flowed well with no grammar issue so to speak adjective an object the contents were perfect and excellent trip to measure where in place thanks for just talked to Ricky 1024 and have a nice Christmas
Comment Written 25-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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thanks!!! Glad you liked it! You read both part 1 and 2?
Comment from apky
I can only repeat what I said about part one: An interesting story. I see yo u improved on the sex-related material, although this sounded like fantasy instead of "real" sex happening.
You need to make it moreconvincing by writing the scenes as if in real life.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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I can only repeat what I said about part one: An interesting story. I see yo u improved on the sex-related material, although this sounded like fantasy instead of "real" sex happening.
You need to make it moreconvincing by writing the scenes as if in real life.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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Well........ I guess that's where writers are different. Either I failed in your eyes to make it sound realistic, or it all felt like a fantasy to the main character. But it was meant to sound realistic, sure. Not sure I can improve on that, besides write more. Thanks!!!!
