Puncturing Reality
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Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Ricky
Your title is very interesting Puncturing Reality
I like your original way of getting your message across about
losing one you love
example which got to me
"Everybody here has passed away and your no exception to the rule."
"And, unfortunately for thee...
"That accident in 2003?"
"With your sister Rita and your brother *Jason?"
Gert
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Hello Ricky
Your title is very interesting Puncturing Reality
I like your original way of getting your message across about
losing one you love
example which got to me
"Everybody here has passed away and your no exception to the rule."
"And, unfortunately for thee...
"That accident in 2003?"
"With your sister Rita and your brother *Jason?"
Gert
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Thanks Kurt but the sister thing with Rita was just for additional affect but my daughter Dana was actually supposed to be in the back of the death car but Jason knew somehow just like he knew he was going to give his organs with the picture taken 20 minutes before the accident and told Nina to go ride in the car which was much safer with her older sister Kai Lauren thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024
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Now from the way you described of what Jason some how knew he was going to give his organs when he died, he must of been able to see the future
Sounds like my mother she had a way of foreseeing the future
It scared me
Gert
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Thanks Kurt and have a wonderful New Year Ricky
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My name is Gert
You are welcome
Smiles
Comment from Joan E.
I have to agree that "we're not the most grateful beings on the planet". This is an intriguing prologue to your "guide" to life. I admired your phone dialogues but was devastated to learn of your son's demise. My deepest condolences- Joan
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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I have to agree that "we're not the most grateful beings on the planet". This is an intriguing prologue to your "guide" to life. I admired your phone dialogues but was devastated to learn of your son's demise. My deepest condolences- Joan
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Thanks Joan for your time review and condolences talk to Ricky 1024
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Ricky,
I'll say one thing for you, your style never changes and it is uniquely yours.
I do think with a few modifications the messages in themes in your work would find a greater audience/readership, but as always that is entirely down to the author to decide on how best to present their work.
Emotionally charged as always
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Hi Ricky,
I'll say one thing for you, your style never changes and it is uniquely yours.
I do think with a few modifications the messages in themes in your work would find a greater audience/readership, but as always that is entirely down to the author to decide on how best to present their work.
Emotionally charged as always
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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And of course I never take away 4 style or grammar issues never a star always five stars minimum rating I give out for work unless it's really horrible to teach the writer dr. Ricky 1024 there are younger writers here on this site that depend on ratings and giving the proper reward for their value it's not just my own personal follow all of my own personal style dr. Ricky 1024
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I don't take away anything, Ricky. I award a rating. Seeing it as taking away means you believe the 5 stars are a right or the norm. Everything can't be excellent all the time. If you see things as being taken away that's always looking as a negative. If you choose to not review as the site suggests/recommends that is your prerogative as much as it is mine to do so.
If a piece is really horrible I rate accordingly or skip. There's nothing wrong with some things being classified as good rather than excellent.
Comment from mermaids
Your words make me think of my loved ones who have passed on and maybe trying to get in touch with me. I like your vivid use of words and the emotions that come through in your writing. I hope you are enjoying the holiday season.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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Your words make me think of my loved ones who have passed on and maybe trying to get in touch with me. I like your vivid use of words and the emotions that come through in your writing. I hope you are enjoying the holiday season.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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Thanks Elaine and you too.
Dr Ricky 1024
Comment from Liberty Justice
DR. RICKY, you scared the dickens out of me this time--talking about ghosts calling your phone. Now, that's one for the Alfred Hitchcock movies. You tell this script with suspenseful dialogues leaving the reader shocked and in suspense wondering what will happen next. Where do you get your wild creative imagination? lol your friend forevermore, liberty justice
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2017
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DR. RICKY, you scared the dickens out of me this time--talking about ghosts calling your phone. Now, that's one for the Alfred Hitchcock movies. You tell this script with suspenseful dialogues leaving the reader shocked and in suspense wondering what will happen next. Where do you get your wild creative imagination? lol your friend forevermore, liberty justice
Comment Written 26-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2017
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imagination is something that is stewed in a pot it is formed within your cranial chamber it develops as you grow and as you find an adventure called life dr. Ricky 1024 and thanks for your kind review
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Remember to check out my profile, also, right now, and good luck in contest, today. Thank-you!
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Ricky. First let me say that I am very sorry for the loss of your son, a hard thing for a parent to bear. As a prologue to your book I think it's important to lay out the premise. Although this is illustrated beautifully and the quite poetic, it leaves the reader unsure of the direction the book will be heading. Organ donation is such a huge gift and I'm glad you've mentioned that aspect of it. Perhaps that is your intent? Thank you for sharing. Marilyn
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2017
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Hi Ricky. First let me say that I am very sorry for the loss of your son, a hard thing for a parent to bear. As a prologue to your book I think it's important to lay out the premise. Although this is illustrated beautifully and the quite poetic, it leaves the reader unsure of the direction the book will be heading. Organ donation is such a huge gift and I'm glad you've mentioned that aspect of it. Perhaps that is your intent? Thank you for sharing. Marilyn
Comment Written 26-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2017
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Hello and thanks for your kind review and thoughts but you need to read read the prologue the second time and perhaps you'll get an idea also after you read the first chapter you should realize that it's not going to be no children's book like I've written it's not going to be no book of love stories okay none of these things are going to happen in this book it's a book of reality going to be a book of suicide and addictions it's going to be a book of people who have had problems some of them will be succumbing to their problems others will find a way to over to take what they've been dealt with that's the basic premise place there in the book for you to discover sorry that you did not and you seem to enjoy The Prost part of it but the information part you didn't get a shame dr. Ricky 1024
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Hi Ricky. I will go back and check it out. Suicide and addiction are weighty topics and I have known those who have succumbed to both. Marilyn
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Forgive me, who is Lucy and she was not in the car or was she? I am just a little lost. Please help me understand this one
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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Forgive me, who is Lucy and she was not in the car or was she? I am just a little lost. Please help me understand this one
Comment Written 25-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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originally put my son Jason but then I in the beginning talked about the different characters and I didn't list him I listed Lucy so I had to change it from him to her and to Lucy of course who is fictional there is no Lucy unless you like to watch the peanuts cartoons thanks for your review dr. Ricky 1024 and have a nice holiday
Comment from Asem.inspirations
God morning Ricky: This is a very interesting, unique, and it is even poetic, like free verse in some areas - like below even:
And, They are calling me?"
"But why Ricky?"
"Why?"
"Do they need to feed?"
"As if Hungry or Lost?"
"Tossed as is a Salad without a Bowl?"
I love the way you express your loss and tell the stories about it all and hw it affects you, you past life and your present life situations. It is so true there is so much to share about such tragedy. I don't fear continuing to write about these things. Some say that I always write the angst and the painful poetry but this is only because I still have so much to say about this and yes, it does still ache very much. You and I have this in common so I will write more about it. Thank you for the encouragement that I receive even from just reading your work.
When you get a chance, please check out two posts that I re-promoted to introduce my children. They are at the top of my portfolio - titled "Taylea's teeth" and "My Jaime." Thank you in advance.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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God morning Ricky: This is a very interesting, unique, and it is even poetic, like free verse in some areas - like below even:
And, They are calling me?"
"But why Ricky?"
"Why?"
"Do they need to feed?"
"As if Hungry or Lost?"
"Tossed as is a Salad without a Bowl?"
I love the way you express your loss and tell the stories about it all and hw it affects you, you past life and your present life situations. It is so true there is so much to share about such tragedy. I don't fear continuing to write about these things. Some say that I always write the angst and the painful poetry but this is only because I still have so much to say about this and yes, it does still ache very much. You and I have this in common so I will write more about it. Thank you for the encouragement that I receive even from just reading your work.
When you get a chance, please check out two posts that I re-promoted to introduce my children. They are at the top of my portfolio - titled "Taylea's teeth" and "My Jaime." Thank you in advance.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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Thanks t i e r and will do doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
"The Gift of Life." Philadelphia, Pennsylvania.
"At 1-800-DONORS-1."
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"And, I wish to thank you for my and the bottom of my Heart."
"As well as my Son Jason's...
"Donated Heart and Lungs which exists...
(Fourteen years later)
"Within the chest of a man called Chaz."
Amazing as always Ricky, your child saved lives, beautiful but tragic too. Merry Chritmas xx love meia x
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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"The Gift of Life." Philadelphia, Pennsylvania.
"At 1-800-DONORS-1."
...
"And, I wish to thank you for my and the bottom of my Heart."
"As well as my Son Jason's...
"Donated Heart and Lungs which exists...
(Fourteen years later)
"Within the chest of a man called Chaz."
Amazing as always Ricky, your child saved lives, beautiful but tragic too. Merry Chritmas xx love meia x
Comment Written 25-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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It's funny I just did review on your peace just a few seconds ago and wish you the same thing dear love doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks the Prologue to the new work Puncturing Reality is well said, and introduced about the ghost haunts on phone; interactions about all author's family dead in heaven, good reference about organ-tissue donation; I like. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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This speaks the Prologue to the new work Puncturing Reality is well said, and introduced about the ghost haunts on phone; interactions about all author's family dead in heaven, good reference about organ-tissue donation; I like. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 25-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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Thanks I'll Creator and have a wonderful Christmas today and a happy and healthy New Year following talk to Ricky 1024
