Dreams Of Freedom
Two slaves are separated. A man dreams of his love and home.34 total reviews
Comment from RGstar
Lovely. I liked this. Pockets of brilliance and very well delivered.
This is a deep love poem, not your surface kind. I wish you luck with the entry author.
My best.
RGstar
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Lovely. I liked this. Pockets of brilliance and very well delivered.
This is a deep love poem, not your surface kind. I wish you luck with the entry author.
My best.
RGstar
Comment Written 25-Dec-2017
Comment from Lulube
Great contest entry. Sultry, seductive and succulently delicious. I especially love the last verse. It says it all for passion and of wanting. Great descriptions for imageries. good luck in the contest and have a great New Years Eve
lulube
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Great contest entry. Sultry, seductive and succulently delicious. I especially love the last verse. It says it all for passion and of wanting. Great descriptions for imageries. good luck in the contest and have a great New Years Eve
lulube
Comment Written 25-Dec-2017
Comment from ronnie k
Congrats you made an excellent write in always meeting and I think really exceptionally, the passion is so good that I felt a confused yet challenging respond and exceptional effort.
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Congrats you made an excellent write in always meeting and I think really exceptionally, the passion is so good that I felt a confused yet challenging respond and exceptional effort.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2017
Comment from Cheryl Gilmore
Wow! This is an amazing poem. I read it out loud, and it sounded so romantic. I love your vision and your wording of that vision. Great job! I wish you all the luck in the contest, my friend.
Cheryl
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Wow! This is an amazing poem. I read it out loud, and it sounded so romantic. I love your vision and your wording of that vision. Great job! I wish you all the luck in the contest, my friend.
Cheryl
Comment Written 25-Dec-2017
Comment from kiwigirl2821
I've often thought that a man has the true poetic essence necessary to truly portray love in words. This one had me dreaming. Bravo and well done. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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I've often thought that a man has the true poetic essence necessary to truly portray love in words. This one had me dreaming. Bravo and well done. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 25-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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Hi Kiwi. Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you and all your loved ones. I thank you so much for validating that even a man can poetically express love. I think men cannot freely express love even verbally to the object of their as well as women can. Maybe it is a cultural limitation imposed on both men and women as to their proper roles in society. Anyway thank you very much for this great read and review Kiwi. Most honored. tom
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I think it's easier for a woman to just up and say what they have to or want to or desire to however, to write it poetically, I believe men have that hands down ... Thank you for the Merry Christmas and you and yours as well ... xoxo deborah
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi this is a great piece of poetry, the imageries are fabulous and the sense of beauty so subtly expressed , not to say the creative inspiration all the way down to the end.
Well done.
Danny Jock
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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Hi this is a great piece of poetry, the imageries are fabulous and the sense of beauty so subtly expressed , not to say the creative inspiration all the way down to the end.
Well done.
Danny Jock
Comment Written 25-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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Hi Danny Jock. Merry Christmas and Happy New Year friend. Thanks a bundle for the great review. tom
Comment from robina1978
I don't know if this is really all black and white, I saw red in it. It is a very nice poem though. I enjoyed the reading and the reviewing. Let me know if I an wrong or if you have changed it, and I'll up rate it.
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reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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I don't know if this is really all black and white, I saw red in it. It is a very nice poem though. I enjoyed the reading and the reviewing. Let me know if I an wrong or if you have changed it, and I'll up rate it.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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Thank you very much Robina. tom
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I wish I were a bee and free to probe
The perfumed scent beneath your blue-black skin;
Enfolded in your soft vermilion robe
I'd taste of every place you've ever been.
Utterly amazing. This should win. Instant bookcase! Love Meia x
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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I wish I were a bee and free to probe
The perfumed scent beneath your blue-black skin;
Enfolded in your soft vermilion robe
I'd taste of every place you've ever been.
Utterly amazing. This should win. Instant bookcase! Love Meia x
Comment Written 25-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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Love right back at you friend. Thanks a million for this wonderful review and commentary Meia. I am, once again, honored by your support. Take care and have a safe, healthy and creative Holiday season. tom
Comment from Thal1959
Excellent write! Sometimes a poet can become too vague and abstract such that he loses the reader who cannot figure out what the poem is saying. This one is written with both elegance and eloquence - yet, maintains its clarity and never loses the reader. Very well done.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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Excellent write! Sometimes a poet can become too vague and abstract such that he loses the reader who cannot figure out what the poem is saying. This one is written with both elegance and eloquence - yet, maintains its clarity and never loses the reader. Very well done.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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What a flattering review Thal. I am both honored and humbled by your commentary and of course the exceptional rating you bestowed on this poetic effort. Thank you very much. tom
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It's always my pleasure, Tom.
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your interpretation of the prompt as a separation between two slaves and your rhymed quatrains. Your appeal to our senses of sight, touch, sound, smell and taste is very effective. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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I admired your interpretation of the prompt as a separation between two slaves and your rhymed quatrains. Your appeal to our senses of sight, touch, sound, smell and taste is very effective. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 25-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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Thank you so much old friend for the uplifting comments and great rating. I am most honored. tom
