Detective Monroe
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "There is a twin, but a twin sister"Serial murderer and Detective have a commonality
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
You have a good story on your hands, but it's extremely wordy and redundant. You need to leave spaces between different peoples' dialogue. You also switched verb tenses, even in the same sentence. I took time to rewrite it. I sent you and PM. I hope it helps.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2017
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You have a good story on your hands, but it's extremely wordy and redundant. You need to leave spaces between different peoples' dialogue. You also switched verb tenses, even in the same sentence. I took time to rewrite it. I sent you and PM. I hope it helps.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2017
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I was very happy to receive the rewrite and will make the changes. I appreciate any feedback.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about belief, proofs must be properly verified, authenticity of adoption information can help; more clues are available, doubt about twin is thrilling; I like. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2017
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This speaks about belief, proofs must be properly verified, authenticity of adoption information can help; more clues are available, doubt about twin is thrilling; I like. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 23-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2017
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Thank you for your feedback .
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Another good chapter. Lots of twists in your story and lots of potential for it to go in many directions.
Well done.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Sharon
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2017
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Another good chapter. Lots of twists in your story and lots of potential for it to go in many directions.
Well done.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Sharon
Comment Written 23-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2017
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Thank you for your feedback. I really appreciate it.
