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Holiday, Holiday

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Comment from Sis Cat
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I enjoyed your lyrics which celebrate the diversity of beliefs. It reminds me of the Disney song "It's a Small World After All," but you go further by addressing the often contentious issue of faith. You extol our common bonds and what unites us:

what matter the names
it is faith binding all
together we celebrate
apart we will fall

This reminds me of the maxim, "United we stand, divided we fall."

Lyrics remind me of an interview I saw last night of the Oakland Interfaith Gospel Choir composed of peoples of many faiths. Choir members even talked about singing songs of other faiths, and the strategies they use so as to not denigrate any one's faith.

You know all of the key components of a song--verse, chorus, bridge, vamp out--and vary them in a natural progression.

This line would sing smoother by omitting the "and"

holiday, holiday
(and) all are united

You show real talent as a songwriter. I wish you success not only in this contest, but in your songwriting career.

Thank you for sharing and caring.

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2017

Comment from Ogden
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An interesting approach for a Christmas season song. I believe you are correct in saying it would offend no one.
Good luck in the contest.
Happy Holiday!
Don (aka Ogden)


 Comment Written 29-Dec-2017

Comment from Sugarray77
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I really like your holiday theme. Your lyrics were good and the tempo and rhythm were defined. Great job. Good luck in the 'Lyrics Make the Song' contest.

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2017

Comment from flylikeaneagle
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Holiday, Holiday, you sing my song and I'll sing yours. I think you are
very nice to include all people together singing and enjoying songs.
I can see this with a harp, grand piano and many voices.

Yes, we can appreciate each other and value each one's traditions.
Great verses with friendship, peace and love shining through.

Stars for you! Keep singing. flylikeaneagle - nancy

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2017

Comment from Thomas Bowling
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A very good song. I can't envision the music for it, butI'm sure you have a melody in mind. This is a great contest entry and should do well. Good luck in the voting.

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2017

Comment from Quantum Traveler
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Beautiful Imaging and Color that accents the Lyrics of this musical orchestration.

Without hearing the music it does have lyrical quality that I can sound out in my own mind.

What matters here to me is that we as a whole here on Fanstory have the "Freedom" to "Speak" of any and all Issues whether being Politically Correct or Not and whether one is Christian or Non-Christian.

The cohesion of Imagery, Lyrics with Poetic Verse are well entertained in this writing.

It is very well orchestrated...Quantum Traveler...Phil.

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2017

Comment from patcelaw
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This lyric song does have the feeling of a piece that would be a nice choral presentation with an orchestra music playing. May you new year be filled with great blessings. Patricia

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2017

Comment from dragonpoet
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This seems more like a Christmas holiday song because you mention lights and a haul (presents). But it could be any holiday season where peace and giving are main components.

Happy New Year.

Good luck and keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2017

Comment from Janie King
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Everyone has a right to their opinion, everyone. What does it matter, as long as each one is given that right...Happy holidays, Merry Christmas are greetings. Those greetings are what the individual has grown comfortable with and in America that should be permitted. This politically correct stuff is a bit stuffy and tiring. Good poem. God bless. Janie

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2017

Comment from evesayshi
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In my opinion, a potentially wonderful song - I can't wait to hear the musical arrangement - really, a new one that hasn't been done many times before. It complies perfectly with the prompt, and I wish you much luck in the contest...

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2017