Comment from royowen

Excellent

Well done Maria, you managed to create one or two questions, and a very relieved reader to find the baby in the professed non carer of the same, as a father, I don't know how one cannot be interested in one's own child. Well done Maria, good flash fiction story. Blesings, Roy

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

Thanks for reading, Roy.

reply by royowen on 07-Dec-2017

Most welcome

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Maria Jose, this must be any mother's worst nightmare. I think the father should have been arrested. A well written flash for the event. I liked it. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

Thanks for reading, Ulla. Looking forward to reading yours.

Comment from damommy

Excellent

I bet she never leaves the baby alone again. It only takes a few minutes for tragedy to happen in many forms.

Ryan should have been arrested and charged with kidnapping.

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

Thanks for reading, Yvonne. Have a nice day.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Maria, this is a good flash fiction and had me scratching my head at the end. I had forgotten that Ryan was mentioned in the first lines of the story. Blessings for a good day, Patricia

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

Thanks for reading, Patricia.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written story of suspence. It must be a crazy feeling to realize your baby is taken within a few minutes when you were gone to buy more formula while she was sleeping.

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

Thanks for reading, Sandra.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

I guess Ryan wanted more to do with Melinda than this single mum thought he did, Maria.
Here in the US, Ryan would have breaking and entering as well as kidnapping charges filed against him.
Not pretty!
Well, you know what they say.
"All's well that ends well."
Nicely done!
~Dean

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

Thanks, Dean.

reply by Dean Kuch on 07-Dec-2017

My pleasure. :)

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good story for the Suspense event.
It is not easy to tell a story in 200 words but you have managed quite well.
Well told, well done.
Sharon

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

Thanks, Sharon.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

You certainly had me hanging on the edge here! A great suspense write and I really enjoyed your story, only a Mother can know that fear of your child being missing. Love Dolly x

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 Comment Written 07-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

Thanks for reading, Dolly.

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Interesting ending So Ryan finally succumbed to the idea of being a father.
Split families with kids involved must be always hard I like your story telling Maria

thanks for sharing

dip

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 Comment Written 07-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

Thanks, Mark. Have a lovely day.