A Night In Hell On Earth
Observation of a third kind55 total reviews
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
Oh, Everett. Where to start.
I'm still reeling from the depth, passion and truth of this piece let alone the masterful structure and integrity.
You poured your heart out onto paper reaching many more with your words. There are too many compelling words/lines/sentiments to pick out. You didn't put a pen wrong, except I will repeat this line which resonated deeply;
'No Gods come forth to verify their stands'.
Truly exceptional.
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Oh, Everett. Where to start.
I'm still reeling from the depth, passion and truth of this piece let alone the masterful structure and integrity.
You poured your heart out onto paper reaching many more with your words. There are too many compelling words/lines/sentiments to pick out. You didn't put a pen wrong, except I will repeat this line which resonated deeply;
'No Gods come forth to verify their stands'.
Truly exceptional.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024
Comment from nomi338
Once upon a time, man was perfect and without flaw.
The man and his mate were seduced into breaking God's eternal law.
There now exists a battle of competing wills.
Disobedience of God's holy law leads to a consequence that kills.
One can always believe whatever one chooses to believe.
Use your intelligence to trust or distrust what your mind can conceive.
The world is in a terrible mess, God will one day fix it, I confess.
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Once upon a time, man was perfect and without flaw.
The man and his mate were seduced into breaking God's eternal law.
There now exists a battle of competing wills.
Disobedience of God's holy law leads to a consequence that kills.
One can always believe whatever one chooses to believe.
Use your intelligence to trust or distrust what your mind can conceive.
The world is in a terrible mess, God will one day fix it, I confess.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024
Comment from Mark Jackson
This poem is a powerful and unflinching portrayal of the harsh realities of urban life, exploring themes of poverty, despair, and the human capacity for cruelty and indifference. Divided into two parts, it paints a vivid picture of a city consumed by decay and suffering, where the homeless and destitute are left to fend for themselves amidst the relentless onslaught of urban decay.
Overall, this poem is a searing indictment of the injustices and inequalities that plague modern society, offering a poignant reminder of the need for compassion, empathy, and social justice. It is a powerful and evocative piece of writing that demands to be read and reckoned with.
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This poem is a powerful and unflinching portrayal of the harsh realities of urban life, exploring themes of poverty, despair, and the human capacity for cruelty and indifference. Divided into two parts, it paints a vivid picture of a city consumed by decay and suffering, where the homeless and destitute are left to fend for themselves amidst the relentless onslaught of urban decay.
Overall, this poem is a searing indictment of the injustices and inequalities that plague modern society, offering a poignant reminder of the need for compassion, empathy, and social justice. It is a powerful and evocative piece of writing that demands to be read and reckoned with.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
Comment from gramalot8
This is a very thought provoking poem.
It brings a lot of pictures to minds eyes of the travesties of war happening all around our world.... countless of men, women and children left dead, dying or homeless.
Nearer to home, we find an abundance of men, women and children roaming our American streets, living in roadside shantytowns or tents due current economical wars.
We can only do our best to be the ones who remain to try and change these travesties somehow, someway.... Where'd we go wrong... where is that golden ticket or ring to gradp hold of to maje it all go away...
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This is a very thought provoking poem.
It brings a lot of pictures to minds eyes of the travesties of war happening all around our world.... countless of men, women and children left dead, dying or homeless.
Nearer to home, we find an abundance of men, women and children roaming our American streets, living in roadside shantytowns or tents due current economical wars.
We can only do our best to be the ones who remain to try and change these travesties somehow, someway.... Where'd we go wrong... where is that golden ticket or ring to gradp hold of to maje it all go away...
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Homeless people with mental diseases
Ukraine and Israel wars are awful. The videos of war casualties break my heart, children are the worse. I don't know what's the right answer.
Excellent imagery of the horrors of war.
The self called "good Christians" call themselves worthy yet turn away good deeds
My catholic school teachers scared the shit out of me with pictures of hell. Not a Christian thing to do.
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Homeless people with mental diseases
Ukraine and Israel wars are awful. The videos of war casualties break my heart, children are the worse. I don't know what's the right answer.
Excellent imagery of the horrors of war.
The self called "good Christians" call themselves worthy yet turn away good deeds
My catholic school teachers scared the shit out of me with pictures of hell. Not a Christian thing to do.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
Comment from Lisasview
Needless to say that this is a disturbing poem full of very sad thoughts...
Not sure how to comment on this because I am still pondering the words..
Lisasview
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Needless to say that this is a disturbing poem full of very sad thoughts...
Not sure how to comment on this because I am still pondering the words..
Lisasview
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
Comment from barbara.wilkey
The words you chose for this poem evoke graphic images in the readers' mind. Yes, there are many evils in our societies that allow these horrors to happen. Thank you for reposting.
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The words you chose for this poem evoke graphic images in the readers' mind. Yes, there are many evils in our societies that allow these horrors to happen. Thank you for reposting.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
Comment from gansach
Wow, exquisite descriptive imagery and commentary. This poem is so well done, it reaches inside and goes straight to the gut. I am impressed with this one. Bravo for this wonderful effort!
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Wow, exquisite descriptive imagery and commentary. This poem is so well done, it reaches inside and goes straight to the gut. I am impressed with this one. Bravo for this wonderful effort!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
Comment from Ricky1024
As I read this well-deserved sixth or piece the first thing I started nose was the definition of this and the great objective contents as you describe things in great detail and then you started to describe the Earth in the past with your pain as you grass but the question is this doesn't still persist and will it continue to last thanks for just talked to Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2017
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As I read this well-deserved sixth or piece the first thing I started nose was the definition of this and the great objective contents as you describe things in great detail and then you started to describe the Earth in the past with your pain as you grass but the question is this doesn't still persist and will it continue to last thanks for just talked to Ricky 1024
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2017
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I thank you so much for this exceptional review Ricky. I am most honored my friend. tom
Comment from kahpot
Yes an excellent read, The wars we are fighting and will fight will only increase the homeless and leave our children with less, lies and false beliefe are most definitely the cause of all this, very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2017
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Yes an excellent read, The wars we are fighting and will fight will only increase the homeless and leave our children with less, lies and false beliefe are most definitely the cause of all this, very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2017
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Thank you kahpot. tom
