A Night In Hell On Earth
Observation of a third kind55 total reviews
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Easy((((((((((,
well, you know how to brighten one's day with the joyous call of mankind's thrall.
Edgar Allen would have been proud of such a darkly painted scene I do believe.
Read aloud magnified every word and intention... I preferred my second read doing exactly that Easy... aloud((((((((.
Your words flowed so smoothly with a spewing of disdain, corrupted ideals and false prophecy leading to our societal demise.
Whilst this poem holds the negative side of everything leading up to now, I find the truth within its message hard to refute.
And just when you thought was it over, the refrain kicks in to echo the haunting vision of...
The children sit in sick beds all alone
And blowflies drop their eggs on skin and bone.
The child will die, as vermin start to bite,
By dawn the child is dead and maggot white((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((!
I appreciate the work and effort that goes into composing a poem with this much depth... Outstanding Easy!
With our thoughts we create...
faith that impels
unification.
Kindest regards,
James.
Hi Easy((((((((((,
well, you know how to brighten one's day with the joyous call of mankind's thrall.
Edgar Allen would have been proud of such a darkly painted scene I do believe.
Read aloud magnified every word and intention... I preferred my second read doing exactly that Easy... aloud((((((((.
Your words flowed so smoothly with a spewing of disdain, corrupted ideals and false prophecy leading to our societal demise.
Whilst this poem holds the negative side of everything leading up to now, I find the truth within its message hard to refute.
And just when you thought was it over, the refrain kicks in to echo the haunting vision of...
The children sit in sick beds all alone
And blowflies drop their eggs on skin and bone.
The child will die, as vermin start to bite,
By dawn the child is dead and maggot white((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((!
I appreciate the work and effort that goes into composing a poem with this much depth... Outstanding Easy!
With our thoughts we create...
faith that impels
unification.
Kindest regards,
James.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
Comment from GoWiSt
Indeed, it is horribly incredible how a society/nation can send its young men to die needlessly in unnecessary wars, while its homeless, hungry, destitute, starving and sick children suffer locally. It's an appalling shame! And then they use 'God' to justify it all.
Indeed, it is horribly incredible how a society/nation can send its young men to die needlessly in unnecessary wars, while its homeless, hungry, destitute, starving and sick children suffer locally. It's an appalling shame! And then they use 'God' to justify it all.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
Comment from Mia Twysted
We are a plight in this world that we love so much. Leaving a nasty legacy for our children. Each generation has damned the one before.
We are a plight in this world that we love so much. Leaving a nasty legacy for our children. Each generation has damned the one before.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
You can write dismal and despair like nobody's business. I wonder if you ever write anything happy or uplifting. I don't recall any. You do dark amazingly well. There is none to take over first place. Have a good week. Karen
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
You can write dismal and despair like nobody's business. I wonder if you ever write anything happy or uplifting. I don't recall any. You do dark amazingly well. There is none to take over first place. Have a good week. Karen
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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Just for you Karen. My current post "a piddle paddle poem". Take care friend. ee
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For me? Little ole' me? I declare I may swoon. I gotta go see it :-) Karen
Comment from Wendy G
A harsh and negative but realistic portrayal of man's inabilty to care and show compassion on fellow man. We will be judged for both our actions and our non-actions. There are attacks on both the religious system and the political system, most of which is justified ... and yet there are still some sparkling gems of love and care and people making a difference, in this sad world of ours. One thing is sure God sees everything, nothing goes unnoticed, and when His patience with man runs out - there will be deserved judgment for everything you mention in your powerful poem. Man wants to be independent from God? This is the result, starkly portrayed in your poem.
Wendy
A harsh and negative but realistic portrayal of man's inabilty to care and show compassion on fellow man. We will be judged for both our actions and our non-actions. There are attacks on both the religious system and the political system, most of which is justified ... and yet there are still some sparkling gems of love and care and people making a difference, in this sad world of ours. One thing is sure God sees everything, nothing goes unnoticed, and when His patience with man runs out - there will be deserved judgment for everything you mention in your powerful poem. Man wants to be independent from God? This is the result, starkly portrayed in your poem.
Wendy
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
Comment from Julie Helms
This is an excellent poem with great internal rhymes, consonance and assonance throughout that give it a very readable quality.
The message is extremely pessimistic, though not unwarranted. The author sees no chance of hope or redemption. Mankind, subject to human nature, is doomed.
Fantastic description throughout.
Nicely done!
Julie
This is an excellent poem with great internal rhymes, consonance and assonance throughout that give it a very readable quality.
The message is extremely pessimistic, though not unwarranted. The author sees no chance of hope or redemption. Mankind, subject to human nature, is doomed.
Fantastic description throughout.
Nicely done!
Julie
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
Comment from forestport12
Powerful and memorable. So many verses explode in the mind's eye with various sense arousals employed. You could smell it, hear it, taste it, etc...
I appreciate how you create an interplay with the political and spiritual conflict. Although homeless being attributed to those who lack compassion is a universal problem, it seems there is also a pseudo self-righteousness on the left or the right at times, but this was by far one of the best I've read of yours.
Powerful and memorable. So many verses explode in the mind's eye with various sense arousals employed. You could smell it, hear it, taste it, etc...
I appreciate how you create an interplay with the political and spiritual conflict. Although homeless being attributed to those who lack compassion is a universal problem, it seems there is also a pseudo self-righteousness on the left or the right at times, but this was by far one of the best I've read of yours.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024
Comment from Esther Brown
Easy Everett is not so easy to read. I am not sure what to say about this poem. Disturbing at very least. It leaves me with a bitter taste of hopelessness for mankind. Forever doomed to maggots and self destruction. Hell on Earth. Reminds me of when "Every thought was to evil all the time" leading to the flood of Noah's time. Esther
Easy Everett is not so easy to read. I am not sure what to say about this poem. Disturbing at very least. It leaves me with a bitter taste of hopelessness for mankind. Forever doomed to maggots and self destruction. Hell on Earth. Reminds me of when "Every thought was to evil all the time" leading to the flood of Noah's time. Esther
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Maybe men are blind to see WHEN the Second Coming will be but maybe it's already here as verse after verse describe calamity. Do unto others... was it meant to be in bad ways too?
Maybe men are blind to see WHEN the Second Coming will be but maybe it's already here as verse after verse describe calamity. Do unto others... was it meant to be in bad ways too?
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024
Comment from hullabaloo22
Wow! This is an exceptional piece of poetry. Forgive me if I'm wrong in my interpretation, but I see this as about a country ignoring its people's own needs while pumping financial resources in to other countries wars.
Even if I'm entirely wrong, it still merited the 6 stars.
Wow! This is an exceptional piece of poetry. Forgive me if I'm wrong in my interpretation, but I see this as about a country ignoring its people's own needs while pumping financial resources in to other countries wars.
Even if I'm entirely wrong, it still merited the 6 stars.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024