Home With Three Rotten Brats
Family dynamics.20 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your using your Spaceship form to tell this story and your including the required words. I think most mothers have had days when they were overwhelmed by their children. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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I enjoyed your using your Spaceship form to tell this story and your including the required words. I think most mothers have had days when they were overwhelmed by their children. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Thank you for your review, Joan.
Comment from brenda faye curtis
I think you've done an excellent job of writing a story with the six words, and the added challenge of using spaceship format was an interesting choice. The picture you chose to enhance the story is perfect. I hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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I think you've done an excellent job of writing a story with the six words, and the added challenge of using spaceship format was an interesting choice. The picture you chose to enhance the story is perfect. I hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Thank you for your review, Brenda.
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You're welcome.
Comment from BeasPeas
I always enjoy your spaceship poem format, Patricia. No, I don't think those cute little girls were ever brats BUT you did a great job using the words in your poem. Marilyn
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2017
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I always enjoy your spaceship poem format, Patricia. No, I don't think those cute little girls were ever brats BUT you did a great job using the words in your poem. Marilyn
Comment Written 08-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2017
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Thank you for the lovely review, Marilyn. You are right, they were not rotten kids, they were a joy to raise
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I know.
Comment from Teri7
Patricia, This is a very well written poem you have penned for the contest. You did a great job using the required words. Your wording was good with making for great imagery. I could see those bad kids as I read this! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2017
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Patricia, This is a very well written poem you have penned for the contest. You did a great job using the required words. Your wording was good with making for great imagery. I could see those bad kids as I read this! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 07-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2017
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Thank you for the lovely review, Teri.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Pat
= LOL ... brats, indeed.
= I'm surprised my brother speaks to me. I was soooo ornery to him.
= Often wondered what it would have been like to have sister.
= I'm sure your daughters were a handful when little. Adorable but ornery.
Cheers, J
*** Merry Christmas & Happy New Year ***
(*.*) A Smile Is Just A Smile Turned Upside-down (*.*)
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Hi, Pat
= LOL ... brats, indeed.
= I'm surprised my brother speaks to me. I was soooo ornery to him.
= Often wondered what it would have been like to have sister.
= I'm sure your daughters were a handful when little. Adorable but ornery.
Cheers, J
*** Merry Christmas & Happy New Year ***
(*.*) A Smile Is Just A Smile Turned Upside-down (*.*)
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Thanks for the nice review, Jackie.
Comment from lyenochka
I was going to say that the picture doesn't show any brats but adorable little girls! Yes, I agree that it is probably pretty intense when a young mom is home alone with her kids. Times even with adorable ones can be stressful.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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I was going to say that the picture doesn't show any brats but adorable little girls! Yes, I agree that it is probably pretty intense when a young mom is home alone with her kids. Times even with adorable ones can be stressful.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Thanks for the nice review, Helen. They were not brats, If all parents had as compliant children as mine were there would not be a lot of family squabbles. I seldom had to discipline physically. Most of the discipline I used was talking with them once they were old enough to understand.
Comment from DR DIP
hehe I was getting worried for a minute Pat. That write was totally against your loving character Now I understand why Your daughters look so sweet How long ago was the photo? Thanks for sharing.
dip
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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hehe I was getting worried for a minute Pat. That write was totally against your loving character Now I understand why Your daughters look so sweet How long ago was the photo? Thanks for sharing.
dip
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Thanks for the nice review, Dip. This was fiction as I had really good children.
Comment from smileycloud
a very lovely pictured image
(LOL I have read the author's notes; so I am lucky I know that this poem is fully fiction; well at least now I do after scrolling down; or it might have changed the comments drastically)
you have done very well with the form/style of poetry
your wording is good to be able to pop a number of specifics in there and still keep a sensible story line active
and you have done particularly well with your imagination for the fiction
have a smiley day
Lorraine
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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a very lovely pictured image
(LOL I have read the author's notes; so I am lucky I know that this poem is fully fiction; well at least now I do after scrolling down; or it might have changed the comments drastically)
you have done very well with the form/style of poetry
your wording is good to be able to pop a number of specifics in there and still keep a sensible story line active
and you have done particularly well with your imagination for the fiction
have a smiley day
Lorraine
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Thanks for the nice review, Lorraine. You are right, it is fiction.
Comment from Sasha
Great work with this poem. I like the spaceship style and it suites this poem nicely. I am sure many can relate to this story...I know I can, but my children were not brats, the neighbors' children were and so hard to deal with. Thanks for sharing this poem with us. Lovely photo of your daughters.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Great work with this poem. I like the spaceship style and it suites this poem nicely. I am sure many can relate to this story...I know I can, but my children were not brats, the neighbors' children were and so hard to deal with. Thanks for sharing this poem with us. Lovely photo of your daughters.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Thanks for the nice review, Sasha. My children were not brats and we seldom had to use punishment of a physical nature.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
that is so true, just kick back and let God listen to them.lol That is what I did, I had a discussion with God while listening to my three argue.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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that is so true, just kick back and let God listen to them.lol That is what I did, I had a discussion with God while listening to my three argue.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Thanks for the nice review, Barb. If my children had been brats, they would have found then into next week, I was not one who tolerated bratty behavior.
